Onwards and Upwards, Eventually
Finding equilibrium, with or without Lithium.15 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twenty syllables poem about the only way we can keep going is onwards and upwards until we reach the end. No matter how long it takes or what we find along the way just keep going.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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A very well-written twenty syllables poem about the only way we can keep going is onwards and upwards until we reach the end. No matter how long it takes or what we find along the way just keep going.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Oh, I think we are allowed to stop sometimes, but only if it is to smell the roses!
Thanks for your review Sandra.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
Love your 20 syllable poetic offering! Last line is my favorite and speaks volumes of truth. To find equilibrium in this chaotic world is, indeed, an achievement.
Thank you for sharing.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer,
Love your 20 syllable poetic offering! Last line is my favorite and speaks volumes of truth. To find equilibrium in this chaotic world is, indeed, an achievement.
Thank you for sharing.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Ah, but the last line is very misleading. Does it mean that everything that remains feels all right after the chaos, or does it mean that the writer is so confused she doesn't know her left hand from her right? 'Just breathe' is my motto... any day above ground is a good day!
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Hah!
Open to interpretation - which is the hallmark of all excellent writing! :)
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Yes indeed, let the reader do some of the work!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, there is some very clever word play on display here, Anonymous Poet.
All that is "left" is "right"...brilliant.
Needless to say, you have my vote.
Best of luck to you!
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Ah, there is some very clever word play on display here, Anonymous Poet.
All that is "left" is "right"...brilliant.
Needless to say, you have my vote.
Best of luck to you!
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I hoped some people would get the subtleties beyond surface, and you never disappoint Dean.
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I try not to.
You're very welcome. :)
Comment from poetwatch
I can relate to your poem. Though being right is never enough now-a-days it has to be proven in a court of law where your accuser is the mirror of yourself. Mood swings everywhere. :) Thank you for trying to lift up all spirits. This is a good entry for the 20 Syllables contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I can relate to your poem. Though being right is never enough now-a-days it has to be proven in a court of law where your accuser is the mirror of yourself. Mood swings everywhere. :) Thank you for trying to lift up all spirits. This is a good entry for the 20 Syllables contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thanks for your generous review. Mood swings, poll swings, noose swings... we sure need some mood elevating therapy, and I got it by going on a road trip and reading messages in the road signs!
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great job with your poem and the syllable count is correct. I agree with the premise you wrote. It is a life that smooths out after a rough ride and you center again and start over. Good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Great job with your poem and the syllable count is correct. I agree with the premise you wrote. It is a life that smooths out after a rough ride and you center again and start over. Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thanks for taking the time to visit my poem Shirley. Life is full of twists and turns.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I like your philosophy here and your words are uplifting, it is all down to attitude and the rest falls into place but life continues to be challenging at every crossroads, you get my vote here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I like your philosophy here and your words are uplifting, it is all down to attitude and the rest falls into place but life continues to be challenging at every crossroads, you get my vote here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Sometimes it's challenging before you even get to a crossroads!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made effective use of all twenty syllables in this philosophical
statement about what goes into finding a balance in life. I especially like the last line.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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You have made effective use of all twenty syllables in this philosophical
statement about what goes into finding a balance in life. I especially like the last line.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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The last line can be misleading... is everything ok now, or has more confusion ensued.
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Oh, I wasn't confused by it. I liked it.
Comment from James W. Reynolds
Nice work. I really like the ending's dual meaning. It leaves the reader wondering if the writer is at peace with herself / himself or if the writer is more confused than ever. I like the vagueness. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Nice work. I really like the ending's dual meaning. It leaves the reader wondering if the writer is at peace with herself / himself or if the writer is more confused than ever. I like the vagueness. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thanks for your review and for spotting the ambiguity of the ending (intentional, although most people would read it as being satisfied with the end result after the period of confusion).
Comment from 24chas
I liked this read, unknown poet. It made me chuckle a little when I finished it. This was a great thought and you expressed it nicely. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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I liked this read, unknown poet. It made me chuckle a little when I finished it. This was a great thought and you expressed it nicely. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thanks for your good wishes and the review. There's quite a few twists and turns on life's highway.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about art of living and attitudes toward living and states not to worry about the past, and we should feel our past as right and accept all ups and down in life, and maintain peace at all costs; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing! -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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This speaks about art of living and attitudes toward living and states not to worry about the past, and we should feel our past as right and accept all ups and down in life, and maintain peace at all costs; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing! -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Your review is spot on to my intention. Thanks for your time. Finding Peace is the one true goal.
