An Embarrassing Circumstance
Did they listen?4 total reviews
Comment from BWReal
Okay fine. Sounds more like a woman gossiping to her girlfriend than a story...but it does fir the 100-word requirement. I don't like to sound crass, but where's the message?
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Okay fine. Sounds more like a woman gossiping to her girlfriend than a story...but it does fir the 100-word requirement. I don't like to sound crass, but where's the message?
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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You are entitled to your opinion, however I believe you missed the entire meaning of the story, that is, that illicit relationship are not a good thing.
Comment from write hand blue
Hi mystery writer. An unusual subject for a competition. What right does a policeman have over morals, considering that the couple were out of sight. I do hope that this can't be true. The last line is wrong, God didn't give the warning, the policeman did. Good luck. Mel.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Hi mystery writer. An unusual subject for a competition. What right does a policeman have over morals, considering that the couple were out of sight. I do hope that this can't be true. The last line is wrong, God didn't give the warning, the policeman did. Good luck. Mel.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thanks for the read and the comments. I believe it is illegal to conduct sexual activity in a public place. Could God have motivated the cop? It is all in one's mind.
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I Sweden they have a spray for the windows of a car etc that turns it into a private place.
If it's on display then ok, but if the policeman had to stare into the car then surely he is at fault? (we call that perving)
Yes, it's all in the mind.
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Dark car windows are illegal in our state.
Comment from kiwijenny
The cop motion for ....motioned
Yes, it is time to end the illicit affair. That's a neat way to end the flash fiction. But the court house would be a fitting end too...you know with a witness thrown in and a ring or two...but how to untangle the illicit affair in a hundred words or less. Hmmm
God bless
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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The cop motion for ....motioned
Yes, it is time to end the illicit affair. That's a neat way to end the flash fiction. But the court house would be a fitting end too...you know with a witness thrown in and a ring or two...but how to untangle the illicit affair in a hundred words or less. Hmmm
God bless
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thanks for the catch. I will edit.
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Yw
Comment from Artasylum
Well Susie takes a long pass hint I see... so I take it Susie just never went to that park again with that guy... thanks so much for your fun read and great, good luck... yours, diana
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Well Susie takes a long pass hint I see... so I take it Susie just never went to that park again with that guy... thanks so much for your fun read and great, good luck... yours, diana
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thanks for the read and the review.
