I'll Be Your Refuge
From the stresses that threaten to bring you down...10 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the striking photograph and your playful Tyburn poem. I enjoyed your rhymes and refuge theme. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you for sharing the striking photograph and your playful Tyburn poem. I enjoyed your rhymes and refuge theme. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, Joan -- this type of a poem is a challenge, but it's a great workout for the brain! :) I am so glad you enjoyed it! :) Have a wonderful weekend! :) Yvette
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Good point--have a pleasant weekend as well. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is not a form I have written more than once, but your notes explain it, and your poem is a wonderful example of the Tyburn, IMO. I guess we grew up in similar times because I can identify with it!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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This is not a form I have written more than once, but your notes explain it, and your poem is a wonderful example of the Tyburn, IMO. I guess we grew up in similar times because I can identify with it!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Yeah - it's really a 'weird' form and presents challenges of its own, but after a day of teenagers, it's good therapy... LOL! Thanx for the review, ma'am! :) :) Yvette :)
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This tyburn, I'll Be Your Refuge, has the proper structure and finds the iconic lighthouse to stand as the protector of those who would be saved.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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This tyburn, I'll Be Your Refuge, has the proper structure and finds the iconic lighthouse to stand as the protector of those who would be saved.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thanx for the review, Bill - much appreciated. :) Yvette
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a great Tyburn poem. Your topic is well-thought out and written for this contest. You've followed the syllable and rhyming pattern requirements. I hope you do well in the contest. This is a solid entry.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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What a great Tyburn poem. Your topic is well-thought out and written for this contest. You've followed the syllable and rhyming pattern requirements. I hope you do well in the contest. This is a solid entry.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the review - always appreciated, Cindy. :)
Comment from kiwisteveh
I've always felt thus form is a somewhat contrived one. It is very difficult to follow the prescribed rules and end up with something that doesn't either sound stilted or which doesn't make complete sense.
In any case, you have followed the rules to perfection, and with the help of a cleverly chosen title, your poem does make sense, so well done and good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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I've always felt thus form is a somewhat contrived one. It is very difficult to follow the prescribed rules and end up with something that doesn't either sound stilted or which doesn't make complete sense.
In any case, you have followed the rules to perfection, and with the help of a cleverly chosen title, your poem does make sense, so well done and good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful comments, Steve - have a wonderful day! :) :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever write and I enjoyed the aliteration! A place of refuge indeed and these lighthouses saved many souls back in their day, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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This is a clever write and I enjoyed the aliteration! A place of refuge indeed and these lighthouses saved many souls back in their day, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful comments, Dolly - have a wonderful day! :) :)
Comment from Donka Kristeva
that is quite creative considering the limited number of words. Words well played with, nicely rhymed and amusing. Well done for the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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that is quite creative considering the limited number of words. Words well played with, nicely rhymed and amusing. Well done for the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thanx so much for your read and review, Donka - always so appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from Jennifer Carr
Let me give a Shoutout! I liked all the words ending in "out". The only suggestion I have is that some of the words were used twice and maybe you could have used them just once but that's just my own little opinion. I really liked the piece. The flow was fun and smooth. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Let me give a Shoutout! I liked all the words ending in "out". The only suggestion I have is that some of the words were used twice and maybe you could have used them just once but that's just my own little opinion. I really liked the piece. The flow was fun and smooth. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the review.
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Jennifer - you do realize that the definition of the poem is to use the words twice? Please read and understand the definition of a contest write before you comment. Thank you.
Comment from Carola Fernandez
Nice poem with very successful rhyming. Good job following the hard to do syllable count. Nice word selection and picture selection as well. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Nice poem with very successful rhyming. Good job following the hard to do syllable count. Nice word selection and picture selection as well. Best of luck!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Carola -- much appreciated! :)
Comment from Libby Geisinger
This is a challenging poem type but you executed it quite well. Reading the first 4 words you wonder where the poem will go but the last two lines tie them together nicely. Even though it is brief and the words are harsh sounding, there is a comfort underneath in the last two lines saying that it is okay to fall there or hide here. I enjoyed it and thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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This is a challenging poem type but you executed it quite well. Reading the first 4 words you wonder where the poem will go but the last two lines tie them together nicely. Even though it is brief and the words are harsh sounding, there is a comfort underneath in the last two lines saying that it is okay to fall there or hide here. I enjoyed it and thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Libby -- much appreciated! :)
