Let The Truth Be Told
free verse, story in a poem15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Alicia,
I love Christmas! Always have, always will. I used to sneak downstairs as a kid, and feel under the tree in the darkness. Most gifts were wrapped, but a few were placed "from Santa Claus".
Yes, it was a special time. We kids had to be on our best behavior of the entire year! Mom would threaten... "Santa Claus can hear you down the chimney, so you better be good!"
Can I offer a few suggestions, mainly for meter?
"Christmas is quickly approaching
Annual judgements are coming
Who's been naughty?
Who has been nice?" ... ( I suggest,
Christmas is quickly approaching,
And judgement the perilous price.
Which little kid has been naughty?
And which little kid has been nice?)
"Write Santa a letter
Or sit on his lap at the mall
Confess your sins and feel better
And pray to get at least a new doll" ... ( I suggest,
I'll have to write Santa a letter,
And sit on his lap at the mall.
Confessing my sins, I feel better
To pray for at least one new doll.)
I could go further, but you get the idea for a bouncy meter. You could polish the rest, and post the new poem for this December. I know it would shine.
I believed in Santa Claus until I was at least 13 years old. I couldn't believe it when I heard the kids at school, saying there is no Santa Claus. I think it was probably that very same year, I had a dream on Christmas Eve that I heard Santa's sleigh on the roof! The runners were sliding along on the snow, bells were ringing, a even reindeer hooves pounding above my head! I waited, scared to death, so excited that Santa Claus was real after all! Then a few minutes later, away went the sleigh again, with all the noise! I snuck out of bed, and crept downstairs. Sure enough, I could feel his presents... unwrapped! He had been there! It was him! I've believed it for many years. I still would like to believe that it wasn't a dream. I was awake for the whole "encounter"!
I'm glad I found your Christmas poem this morning. It brought back some wonderful memories.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Hi Alicia,
I love Christmas! Always have, always will. I used to sneak downstairs as a kid, and feel under the tree in the darkness. Most gifts were wrapped, but a few were placed "from Santa Claus".
Yes, it was a special time. We kids had to be on our best behavior of the entire year! Mom would threaten... "Santa Claus can hear you down the chimney, so you better be good!"
Can I offer a few suggestions, mainly for meter?
"Christmas is quickly approaching
Annual judgements are coming
Who's been naughty?
Who has been nice?" ... ( I suggest,
Christmas is quickly approaching,
And judgement the perilous price.
Which little kid has been naughty?
And which little kid has been nice?)
"Write Santa a letter
Or sit on his lap at the mall
Confess your sins and feel better
And pray to get at least a new doll" ... ( I suggest,
I'll have to write Santa a letter,
And sit on his lap at the mall.
Confessing my sins, I feel better
To pray for at least one new doll.)
I could go further, but you get the idea for a bouncy meter. You could polish the rest, and post the new poem for this December. I know it would shine.
I believed in Santa Claus until I was at least 13 years old. I couldn't believe it when I heard the kids at school, saying there is no Santa Claus. I think it was probably that very same year, I had a dream on Christmas Eve that I heard Santa's sleigh on the roof! The runners were sliding along on the snow, bells were ringing, a even reindeer hooves pounding above my head! I waited, scared to death, so excited that Santa Claus was real after all! Then a few minutes later, away went the sleigh again, with all the noise! I snuck out of bed, and crept downstairs. Sure enough, I could feel his presents... unwrapped! He had been there! It was him! I've believed it for many years. I still would like to believe that it wasn't a dream. I was awake for the whole "encounter"!
I'm glad I found your Christmas poem this morning. It brought back some wonderful memories.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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My dear Father Flaps, I still believe in Santa. You're very kind. I am glad you enjoyed reading my work. Thank you very much.
Happy Apple Dumpling Day :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem about the holidays, Let the Truth Be Told, finds us hoping against hope that Santy doesn't really check his list twice.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This poem about the holidays, Let the Truth Be Told, finds us hoping against hope that Santy doesn't really check his list twice.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Hi! Thank you :)
Comment from Denise J Tidwell
How can this be exceptional
I think it is a joke simple I can't even describe it help it please please please please pleaplease please please please please se please
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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How can this be exceptional
I think it is a joke simple I can't even describe it help it please please please please pleaplease please please please please se please
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice work up for this one everyone lokes to go see Santa whether they have been good or bad they hope Santa will overlook the bad things they have done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Nice work up for this one everyone lokes to go see Santa whether they have been good or bad they hope Santa will overlook the bad things they have done.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Six stars for thinking outside the box and for being a little bent, mystery writer.
This had me laughing! "Oranges and crackers are nothing new either" ... LOL I love your sense of humor! "Be scared of the year past, you might be screwed" ... hahaha! All of those children had better watch out, and not pout, because if they've been naughty they'll surely find that lump of coal in their stocking. Great choice of picture to complement your write.
Great job! Best wishes for the contest with this gem of a poem. Luv it!
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Six stars for thinking outside the box and for being a little bent, mystery writer.
This had me laughing! "Oranges and crackers are nothing new either" ... LOL I love your sense of humor! "Be scared of the year past, you might be screwed" ... hahaha! All of those children had better watch out, and not pout, because if they've been naughty they'll surely find that lump of coal in their stocking. Great choice of picture to complement your write.
Great job! Best wishes for the contest with this gem of a poem. Luv it!
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 20-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from rhonnie69
MERRY CHRISTMAS POET: I like this posting in that it is a good one for the kids. I've imagined that it just might be relative to the situation at hand...to leave this posting posted on the screen while I'm trying to get a wink of nap...while the little rascals stop romping and running and gather around my computer...for a few. "YEAH," Thank you for sharing, poet. I needed this. God bless your clever soul. Cordially: rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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MERRY CHRISTMAS POET: I like this posting in that it is a good one for the kids. I've imagined that it just might be relative to the situation at hand...to leave this posting posted on the screen while I'm trying to get a wink of nap...while the little rascals stop romping and running and gather around my computer...for a few. "YEAH," Thank you for sharing, poet. I needed this. God bless your clever soul. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Hi! People say Christmas is for the children. However, I think it's for everybody. We all get something from the season like renewed hope. However, if you want to give me a gift, I'll enjoy it. Lolz. God bless you. Merry Christmastime. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your timely and sensitive poem about the potential for stress generated by the holiday season. Best wishes in the contest and keep thinking positive thoughts! Merry, merry- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Thank you for your timely and sensitive poem about the potential for stress generated by the holiday season. Best wishes in the contest and keep thinking positive thoughts! Merry, merry- Joan
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Hi Joan! Optiimism is they way. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem/story about the real truth of Christmas that is hid behind gifts, Trees, and Santa Which is all a myth while the real reason is played down, the birth of Christ.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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A very well-written poem/story about the real truth of Christmas that is hid behind gifts, Trees, and Santa Which is all a myth while the real reason is played down, the birth of Christ.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you
Merry Christmas
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed reading this poem and I wish you much luck in the contest. Image is heartwarming and sweet. We all hope for a merry Christmas and worthy of receiving a gift. These are lines that jumped out at me and gave a giggle:
"Annual judgments are coming
Who's been naughty?
Who has been nice?"
Oh-oh, putting the fear in all of us. A time for self evaluation. Santa seems to give us a gift anyway.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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I enjoyed reading this poem and I wish you much luck in the contest. Image is heartwarming and sweet. We all hope for a merry Christmas and worthy of receiving a gift. These are lines that jumped out at me and gave a giggle:
"Annual judgments are coming
Who's been naughty?
Who has been nice?"
Oh-oh, putting the fear in all of us. A time for self evaluation. Santa seems to give us a gift anyway.
Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you
Merry Christmas
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a very unique offering for this contest....love the cacophony of questions as your presentation ... makes a parent smile! :) ;) thanx for sharing and good luck at the polls! :)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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What a very unique offering for this contest....love the cacophony of questions as your presentation ... makes a parent smile! :) ;) thanx for sharing and good luck at the polls! :)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you
Merry Christmas
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Merry Christmas to you and yours! :)
