River Of Tar
What roads are made for to get from here to there23 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the repetition and the metaphor of roads as river. I also like that you give all the things roads provide to a society. Good luck in the contest. Happy Holidays
Keep writing
One error for-bares should be forbears.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2018
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I like the repetition and the metaphor of roads as river. I also like that you give all the things roads provide to a society. Good luck in the contest. Happy Holidays
Keep writing
One error for-bares should be forbears.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2018
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Thanks Cheers
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You're welcome. Same to you.
Joan
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
As I read your traveling words I felt I was had travel the same road some time in my life.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
As I read your traveling words I felt I was had travel the same road some time in my life.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 22-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks Cookie, much obliged for your review and comments. kev.
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My pleasure
Have a blessed day
Cookie
Comment from meeshu
This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. I love the concept of the river of tar, except it reminds me of the summer I spent patching said river and the lakes (parking lots?) too..
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. I love the concept of the river of tar, except it reminds me of the summer I spent patching said river and the lakes (parking lots?) too..
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks so much for your review and comments, cheers, Kev
Comment from Shanbreen
A good poem about your country and its roadways. We had the same thing at one time in the U.S. One still finds these "rivers of tar" in the country but they are barely seen except by the few country folk who use them.
I like the simplicity of the poem, but starting each quatrain with "The river of tar" kind of stops the flow, the rythem of the poem.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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A good poem about your country and its roadways. We had the same thing at one time in the U.S. One still finds these "rivers of tar" in the country but they are barely seen except by the few country folk who use them.
I like the simplicity of the poem, but starting each quatrain with "The river of tar" kind of stops the flow, the rythem of the poem.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks Mate, for your review and comments, cheers, Kev
Comment from Insider98
Wow. I never thought that a piece about roads would be such a great read. They truly are an amazing invention. We are just so used to them we don't understand how useful they are. Great job!
Insider98
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Wow. I never thought that a piece about roads would be such a great read. They truly are an amazing invention. We are just so used to them we don't understand how useful they are. Great job!
Insider98
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks Mate, for your review and comments, cheers, Kev.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest submission. In North Port, Florida, the roads were blacktopped sixty years ago. Now, the unused ones have grass growing up through them like a scab flaking away.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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This is an excellent contest submission. In North Port, Florida, the roads were blacktopped sixty years ago. Now, the unused ones have grass growing up through them like a scab flaking away.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks Thomos, for your review and comments, Cheers, Kev.
Comment from royowen
I haven't circumnavigated Australia yet, as my daughter and so in law, have, but we drivin the coast road from Adelaide to Daintree, and back three times, and much caravanning in Victoria, S.A. NSW, and Queensland. Have traveled the world also. Loved your poem, written in free verse/blank verse, rhythmic and articulte, well done,blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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I haven't circumnavigated Australia yet, as my daughter and so in law, have, but we drivin the coast road from Adelaide to Daintree, and back three times, and much caravanning in Victoria, S.A. NSW, and Queensland. Have traveled the world also. Loved your poem, written in free verse/blank verse, rhythmic and articulte, well done,blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Well thank-you Roy, much obliged, cheers, Kev
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Most welcome
Comment from estory
The format here is somewhat rigid and squared, in these rhymed quatrains in iambic pentameter, but what I really liked about this piece was the colorful images in it, this great central image of the road, connecting all kinds of diverse populations, places, landscapes, livelihoods, into the same country, giving us a sense of the differences and similarities that bind humanity together. estory
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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The format here is somewhat rigid and squared, in these rhymed quatrains in iambic pentameter, but what I really liked about this piece was the colorful images in it, this great central image of the road, connecting all kinds of diverse populations, places, landscapes, livelihoods, into the same country, giving us a sense of the differences and similarities that bind humanity together. estory
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks Mate, for your review and comments, cheers, Kev.
Comment from Sally Law
I find Australia fascinating! Thank you for sharing your story and the history of the tar path. Not much traffic here. How refreshing. It gets more congested where I live every day, taking away from the true beauty of the surroundings. How fun it must be to travel around and enjoy your country's beauty.
My best to you and in the contest!
Sally :+)
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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I find Australia fascinating! Thank you for sharing your story and the history of the tar path. Not much traffic here. How refreshing. It gets more congested where I live every day, taking away from the true beauty of the surroundings. How fun it must be to travel around and enjoy your country's beauty.
My best to you and in the contest!
Sally :+)
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks very much Sally, for your comments and review, Cheers, Kev
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem isn't just well-written; it's very informative. You have employed
an effective blend of literal and figurative language to pay tribute to the
"river of tar" and its importance. Last stanza: forebears
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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This poem isn't just well-written; it's very informative. You have employed
an effective blend of literal and figurative language to pay tribute to the
"river of tar" and its importance. Last stanza: forebears
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanks Janice, for your review and comments and for picking up the mistake. Cheers, Kev.