Something to be Proud of
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You may be running the risk of disqualification here by identifying yourself in your author notes by naming and referring to your other stories. May be better to delete those.
made sure I knew I was going to pay with blood sweat and tears- you need some commas in there at the end.
Generally a good, sound technical write. You get the feelings in the piece over very well indeed.
Best of luck in the comp.
GMG
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Hi there,
You may be running the risk of disqualification here by identifying yourself in your author notes by naming and referring to your other stories. May be better to delete those.
made sure I knew I was going to pay with blood sweat and tears- you need some commas in there at the end.
Generally a good, sound technical write. You get the feelings in the piece over very well indeed.
Best of luck in the comp.
GMG
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Thanks for the technical advice. I hope I fixed it in time. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Rene Ravensdale
This is great!
To be honest I don't know much about wrestling, and most of the moves passed by my airhead.
But that, for some reason did not deter me from reading on, and that's how great your story is!
This story should be an addition for what you should be proud of!
Keep on the good writing !
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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This is great!
To be honest I don't know much about wrestling, and most of the moves passed by my airhead.
But that, for some reason did not deter me from reading on, and that's how great your story is!
This story should be an addition for what you should be proud of!
Keep on the good writing !
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I tried to keep the technical stuff to a minimum, I?m glad it didn?t deter you from reading the whole story. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from AngieDee
This is a very inspiring story and I enjoyed reading it. Also very well written, as I did not get sidetracked with fill-ins. It flowed straight through. Thankyou for sharing such a great story.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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This is a very inspiring story and I enjoyed reading it. Also very well written, as I did not get sidetracked with fill-ins. It flowed straight through. Thankyou for sharing such a great story.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I liked your story because it's written from the heart, and I do understand how you must have felt. I must admit, I don't understood about the sport itself, but I got the spirit. Well written and good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Hi there, I liked your story because it's written from the heart, and I do understand how you must have felt. I must admit, I don't understood about the sport itself, but I got the spirit. Well written and good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Kiera Haley
The content of the story was interesting, but I wasn't as captivated as I would like to be. I think the story could use some more description of places, people and feelings to reel in your readers and bring them into the story. I would suggest maybe varying your sentence structure a bit more to add more interest. It could use some work, but it was unique and interesting so good job on that!
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The content of the story was interesting, but I wasn't as captivated as I would like to be. I think the story could use some more description of places, people and feelings to reel in your readers and bring them into the story. I would suggest maybe varying your sentence structure a bit more to add more interest. It could use some work, but it was unique and interesting so good job on that!
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
Comment from Carolyn Reaves
Good for you! I am glad you had principals and coaches that were willing to give you an opportunity to redeem yourself. I don't know much about wrestling, but your story is well written and comes from the heart. Keep writing!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Good for you! I am glad you had principals and coaches that were willing to give you an opportunity to redeem yourself. I don't know much about wrestling, but your story is well written and comes from the heart. Keep writing!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Jake P.
Good story of athleticism. I don't understand all the terminology since I've never wrestled, but I understood the emotion. I liked the 'pivotal moment' of character change: "But this one time really turned me around in high school. I'd go on the next year to be 23-7 and a section champion, But I'd never have done it without the McLane match."
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Good story of athleticism. I don't understand all the terminology since I've never wrestled, but I understood the emotion. I liked the 'pivotal moment' of character change: "But this one time really turned me around in high school. I'd go on the next year to be 23-7 and a section champion, But I'd never have done it without the McLane match."
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so well done and well written too. I enjoyed the descriptive story and was rooting for you all the way.... I am glad you won the match for your team. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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This is so well done and well written too. I enjoyed the descriptive story and was rooting for you all the way.... I am glad you won the match for your team. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Tpa
Good Job. A great deal of something you earned. I enjoyed the beginning and you mother's discipline, which seemed to give you another chance.
In one paragraph you wrote: Here where the crowd comes in---they start --
Omit the first part just put they start booing. good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Good Job. A great deal of something you earned. I enjoyed the beginning and you mother's discipline, which seemed to give you another chance.
In one paragraph you wrote: Here where the crowd comes in---they start --
Omit the first part just put they start booing. good luck.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the advice I'll change it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from kiwijenny
I did enjoy this . I'm proud of the resilience. Some of the technical stuff was a bit like Charlie Brown's school teacher . So glad you put it in layman's terms. I'm not sure why they booed when you won.
Well penned ...oops well pinned
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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I did enjoy this . I'm proud of the resilience. Some of the technical stuff was a bit like Charlie Brown's school teacher . So glad you put it in layman's terms. I'm not sure why they booed when you won.
Well penned ...oops well pinned
God bless
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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They booed because they were A**holes. I'm sorry if I used too much technical stuff, I tried to write it so everyone would enjoy it. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
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