Lead Detective Case 2 Part 2
Lead Detective hears from the coroner16 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Amazing! This is like reading one of Michael Connelly's Mystery novels. So detailed and perfectly sequenced. The writing is so well done and in a poem it just seems so extraordinary. You are certainly an extraordinary writer. God Bless.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Amazing! This is like reading one of Michael Connelly's Mystery novels. So detailed and perfectly sequenced. The writing is so well done and in a poem it just seems so extraordinary. You are certainly an extraordinary writer. God Bless.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Hi Raffaelina. Thank you so much for the extra star. I really appreciate it. My original ?Lead Detective? poem is in my portfolio. It is a thriller. If you would like me to tell you which page it is on, please let me know. Thank you for your splendid review
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Yes, definitely. I would like to read more.
Comment from kahpot
Another great read as well as the poem, ( I went back to your first work to refresh) I didn't know you would also put it in here, I love the way the description from the coroner is explained in this story-poem, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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Another great read as well as the poem, ( I went back to your first work to refresh) I didn't know you would also put it in here, I love the way the description from the coroner is explained in this story-poem, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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Part 3 will be posted on Sunday. Thank you for your excellent review
Comment from Michele Harber
OK, that tonsil detail turned my stomach, but it was a really good plot twist. This continues to be a very interesting tale, with excellent plot detail and character development, and you further keep our interest with the addition or new characters. Somehow, you manage to keep it all together within an abab rhyme scheme. As usual, I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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OK, that tonsil detail turned my stomach, but it was a really good plot twist. This continues to be a very interesting tale, with excellent plot detail and character development, and you further keep our interest with the addition or new characters. Somehow, you manage to keep it all together within an abab rhyme scheme. As usual, I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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Thank you Michele for another excellent review. Especially for the extra star. I think people think it is too long. That part one is part of the current poem.
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It's a full story in a poem, which means it's long by definition. Look at the length of the poem that just won the Faith contest, and that wasn't even a story. The point is, if anyone doesn't want to read a long poem, they don't have to, but they'll be missing out on an interesting story. For the type of story poem you're writing, anything shorter would have shortchanged the reader.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written detective story. Sometimes to discover the truth when someone went missing and the body was found is just as disturbing and devastating than not to know the details.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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A very well-written detective story. Sometimes to discover the truth when someone went missing and the body was found is just as disturbing and devastating than not to know the details.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review
Comment from Lady Jane
I was wondering when you'd hit this piece again. Well done. So, he keeps them for a while, huh? I hope they find him soon :(*
The rhyme was steady and the cadence flowed well from stanza to stanza. The story is relatable and very realistic. I didn't find any errors, dear. The read had me enthralled from. the mayor...to the chief's cold coffee, LOL... All involved in task at hand. Find the darned culprit, already, right?
Keep em coming. I love a good mystery. Poetry style, now that's where it's at! Nicely done, dear.
janelle
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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I was wondering when you'd hit this piece again. Well done. So, he keeps them for a while, huh? I hope they find him soon :(*
The rhyme was steady and the cadence flowed well from stanza to stanza. The story is relatable and very realistic. I didn't find any errors, dear. The read had me enthralled from. the mayor...to the chief's cold coffee, LOL... All involved in task at hand. Find the darned culprit, already, right?
Keep em coming. I love a good mystery. Poetry style, now that's where it's at! Nicely done, dear.
janelle
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Bob does not like this, Janelle. I think I understand why. It is because he is a novelist who looks at characters through dialogue and observation. I am just trying to present from inside the mind of one man. One reviewer actually found it more compelling than stories or novels. It is unique, I guess. Thank you for your wonderful review
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Pam. this is different. LOL I guess it's because I am a detective/crime writer but without the ability to read imagery and lots of it in my stories i cannot enjoy a story as you have it in a poem here. There is no place for real dialogue either and dialogue propels a story forward.
YOur rhymes are great but I am just not one cut out for this work I guess. So sorry. I would rather be honest with you than anything short of that. Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Hi, Pam. this is different. LOL I guess it's because I am a detective/crime writer but without the ability to read imagery and lots of it in my stories i cannot enjoy a story as you have it in a poem here. There is no place for real dialogue either and dialogue propels a story forward.
YOur rhymes are great but I am just not one cut out for this work I guess. So sorry. I would rather be honest with you than anything short of that. Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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That is fine Bob. I probably would stop but some opeople beg me for new installments. I understand how you feel. You want to be more detailed and look at things from the standpoint of each character. This is dealing with just one man. His thought process
as the lead Detective. Other characters are only in passing. Everything is pertinent to the case. Some reviewers even said it was refreshing bs novels and stories about crime they read on here. There is a niche for almost everything. You can skip future installments. Take care and thanks for this review
Comment from Jaye Bennett
Very good. I learned a couple of things. I find the details of crimes I read about in prose come through with more impact when they are in poetry. You are writing quite a mystery. I read Part 1. Glad to know new installments are posted Sunday mornings. I will check next week.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Very good. I learned a couple of things. I find the details of crimes I read about in prose come through with more impact when they are in poetry. You are writing quite a mystery. I read Part 1. Glad to know new installments are posted Sunday mornings. I will check next week.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Thank you Jaye for your kind words and lovely review
Comment from royowen
An unusual way of presenting a story, in rhyming verse Pam. Quite an undertaking my friend, thank you for the previous chapter, it helps a lot. Not as carefully edited as previous poems, but still, an epic. Well done, for writing these instalments, an excellent embarkation. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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An unusual way of presenting a story, in rhyming verse Pam. Quite an undertaking my friend, thank you for the previous chapter, it helps a lot. Not as carefully edited as previous poems, but still, an epic. Well done, for writing these instalments, an excellent embarkation. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Thank you Roy. Is something wrong? Why did you say not as carefully edited. I appreciate any feedback. Thanks for the great review
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I didn't think it was as smooth as normally as others, just check, I could be wrong Pam.
Comment from meeshu
I don't know how you do this Pam, a detective novel and 'Forensic File' episode. and all of it in perfectly rhymed verse, that's the amazing part............6six6..................meeshu
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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I don't know how you do this Pam, a detective novel and 'Forensic File' episode. and all of it in perfectly rhymed verse, that's the amazing part............6six6..................meeshu
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Thank you meeshu so much for the extra star and awesome review. Part three will be posted on Sunday
Comment from country ranch writer
This guy need to be hung out to dry and soon before another young life is lost to this ghoul! Why do men think they have to mutilate to get their point across.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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This guy need to be hung out to dry and soon before another young life is lost to this ghoul! Why do men think they have to mutilate to get their point across.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Wow. country
Ranch writer. Did I hit a nerve? I could not agree more. I guarantee he will be stopped, just not when. Thank you for your fine review
