Lead Detective Case 2 part 1
Lead Detective gets his second case19 total reviews
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Well this is quite different Pam and yes I can see where it can go in many directions. You could direct it into many scenes and yes it would be very lengthy.
I like the photo, it accommodates the writing well and I must also add that perhaps you should take it out a little longer or continue it.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Well this is quite different Pam and yes I can see where it can go in many directions. You could direct it into many scenes and yes it would be very lengthy.
I like the photo, it accommodates the writing well and I must also add that perhaps you should take it out a little longer or continue it.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Part 2 on Sunday. Thank you for your lovely review
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Great. Is Sunday
when you get 6 stars?
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Yes Sunday. I just finished a very original painting. I already wrote the Tanka for it.
Comment from Michele Harber
As with your previous "Lead Detective" poems, this tells a full (well, as full as it can be until Part 2), interesting, suspenseful and emotionally grabbing story, using excellent meter and rhyme. I appreciate that the detective's emotions show through, and his willingness to "go the extra mile" makes the reader want to as well. I'm looking forward to reading Part 2.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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As with your previous "Lead Detective" poems, this tells a full (well, as full as it can be until Part 2), interesting, suspenseful and emotionally grabbing story, using excellent meter and rhyme. I appreciate that the detective's emotions show through, and his willingness to "go the extra mile" makes the reader want to as well. I'm looking forward to reading Part 2.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Sunday for part 2. Thank you so much for the extra star and delightful review
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You?re welcome. I?m looking forward to Sunday. :-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a bit graphic Pam and a bit gruesome too! But I could see the fun in it too as most of what you've written is tongue in cheek, a crime scene in the making, love Dollyx
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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This is a bit graphic Pam and a bit gruesome too! But I could see the fun in it too as most of what you've written is tongue in cheek, a crime scene in the making, love Dollyx
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you Dolly for your wonderful review. Murder is a grisly business.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a solid write, in perfect rhyming rhythm, and the tale is one that captivates - I was totally immersed in my read - this, to me, is "Exceptional" in its epic style delivery, and I could have read more - a superb and classic mystery in rhyme - who thought...
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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In my opinion, a solid write, in perfect rhyming rhythm, and the tale is one that captivates - I was totally immersed in my read - this, to me, is "Exceptional" in its epic style delivery, and I could have read more - a superb and classic mystery in rhyme - who thought...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Hi evesayshi. I will probably post part 2 on Sunday. Most parts, I will post on
Sunday. Thank you so much for the extra star and lovely review
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You are very welcome, Pam, superb, in my estimation...Eve
Comment from royowen
A brand new venture for you dear Pam, a gruesome murder/mystery that questions the instigator's mental condition, it sounds a little satanic in nature. But beautufully written in octave stanzas and abab rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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A brand new venture for you dear Pam, a gruesome murder/mystery that questions the instigator's mental condition, it sounds a little satanic in nature. But beautufully written in octave stanzas and abab rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Well, killers are satanic, aren?t they? Thank you for your excellent review
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Well done
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written mystery poem/story. It seems the detective will have his hands full to solve this case. The ransom note is even more confusing with a promise to murder more on each full moon.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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A very well-written mystery poem/story. It seems the detective will have his hands full to solve this case. The ransom note is even more confusing with a promise to murder more on each full moon.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a grisly case for the detective. He's from Los Angeles. I wonder if he's Joe Friday? Y'know? Dragnet. Compels me to read where this goes.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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This is a grisly case for the detective. He's from Los Angeles. I wonder if he's Joe Friday? Y'know? Dragnet. Compels me to read where this goes.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Maybe he is Joe Friday?s grandson. Lol. Thanks for the great review
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is the most creative thing I've ever seen. A story told in poem genre. It's so clever I stand in awe. You're a genius. The concept alone is worth a six.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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This is the most creative thing I've ever seen. A story told in poem genre. It's so clever I stand in awe. You're a genius. The concept alone is worth a six.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Wow. Thankyou Thomas for an incredibly encouraging review. I have written other mystery and crime poems but not in installments. Thank you so much for the extra star as well
Comment from Loredana
I had never read a poem like this one. Mystery and crime in rhyme. Absolutely original. One comment; I 'bras' is spelled with 's'. Also, in stanza 4, three lines before the last, the poem says 'has' but you wrote her story all in the past, so maybe this should be 'she had a record' and not 'she has a record'.
Thanks
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I had never read a poem like this one. Mystery and crime in rhyme. Absolutely original. One comment; I 'bras' is spelled with 's'. Also, in stanza 4, three lines before the last, the poem says 'has' but you wrote her story all in the past, so maybe this should be 'she had a record' and not 'she has a record'.
Thanks
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi Loredana. The only parts of this poem that are past tense are things that happened before the lead Detective looked at the crime scene. Most of the lines will be in present tense. For example, the cros WAS carved because it happened in the past while she was still alive. She only has one bra,
So bra and panties is right. Thanks for the great review
Comment from Pantygynt
Fictional detectives are often pictured as being hard as nails - they have to be given the job they are in - but I often wonder if this is the case in real life. This one is pretty new to the job (it is only his second case) and he tries to remain detached from the grizzly scene that meets his eye. There is a job to be done and he has to do it but he still retains his humanity.
I look forward to part two of this story, written in octaves of iambic tetrameter.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Fictional detectives are often pictured as being hard as nails - they have to be given the job they are in - but I often wonder if this is the case in real life. This one is pretty new to the job (it is only his second case) and he tries to remain detached from the grizzly scene that meets his eye. There is a job to be done and he has to do it but he still retains his humanity.
I look forward to part two of this story, written in octaves of iambic tetrameter.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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He is new to being the lead homicide detective but not to police work. Thank you for the wonderful review
