The Fall
a time for caution35 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Tony, congrats of placing second in the contest.
This vignette shows the fear of falling when you are old. It also shows the beauty you miss if you let worry run your life. If he is that scared, he could just stop and lean against that big tree and look up, then continue on.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Tony, congrats of placing second in the contest.
This vignette shows the fear of falling when you are old. It also shows the beauty you miss if you let worry run your life. If he is that scared, he could just stop and lean against that big tree and look up, then continue on.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Joan. Pausing to lean against a tree while looking up to enjoy the scenery is the perfect answer!
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My pleasure, Tony.
Joan
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My pleasure, Tony.
Joan
Comment from johnwilson
As always, you are amazing. You even dribble-drabble in this format. Excellent. I had no idea where you were going; and, you were able to get there with great description. Ha! I never thought I would be giving six stars for 75 word flash fiction.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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As always, you are amazing. You even dribble-drabble in this format. Excellent. I had no idea where you were going; and, you were able to get there with great description. Ha! I never thought I would be giving six stars for 75 word flash fiction.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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How nice of you to take the time to review this one. I'm delighted by your comments and the six star award. Many thanks!
Comment from karenina
Congrats on your second place finish. Health issues called me away and I was unable to vote in this contest but this is a very poignant write...made all the more so by the seemingly impossible task of evoking such emotion!
--Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Congrats on your second place finish. Health issues called me away and I was unable to vote in this contest but this is a very poignant write...made all the more so by the seemingly impossible task of evoking such emotion!
--Karenina
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Many thanks, Karenina, for stopping by to review this and to offer your congratulations. Both much appreciated. I hope that you are back in good health again now. Best wishes, Tony
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Dong well thanks....loved your write!--Karenina
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DOING...not "dong" (duh)
Comment from mrsmajor
This piece of prose hit home for me, at age 83, I can identify with this old man, yet through it all he marches on, not like a drill sargent, but like an old man that's seen life...he knows just how much he can do, and so do I...thanks for sharing this with us, in these few words, and with the well matched picture...I have to say I enjoyed reading it!
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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This piece of prose hit home for me, at age 83, I can identify with this old man, yet through it all he marches on, not like a drill sargent, but like an old man that's seen life...he knows just how much he can do, and so do I...thanks for sharing this with us, in these few words, and with the well matched picture...I have to say I enjoyed reading it!
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Very many thanks for stopping by to review, Victoria. I appreciate the six-star award. I find myself looking at my feet and the path ahead far more than I used to!
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You're quite welcome, I'm lucky if I can even put one foot in front of the other...but still life can be
worth the effort...LOL
The poem was well worth those 6 stars, tfawcus, at least to me..Take Care!
Comment from Joan E.
I am only seventy-four, but since I have Idiopathic Peripheral Neuropathy and cannot feel my feet, I could relate to the old man's concern. However, I try not to miss the "sighing trees". I admired your play on "Fall" and the perfect picture selection as well. Cheers and best wishes in the Flash Fiction Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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I am only seventy-four, but since I have Idiopathic Peripheral Neuropathy and cannot feel my feet, I could relate to the old man's concern. However, I try not to miss the "sighing trees". I admired your play on "Fall" and the perfect picture selection as well. Cheers and best wishes in the Flash Fiction Contest- Joan
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thanks for your review and comments, Joan. It seems that we are the same age. I sympathise with your predicament. It must make it difficult to get around with any confidence.
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Thank you for your compassionate response. Here's to the good fight! -Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love this 75 word flash fiction story Tony about the old man having to be so careful watching where he's going in case of a Fall (clever double meaning). Enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Love this 75 word flash fiction story Tony about the old man having to be so careful watching where he's going in case of a Fall (clever double meaning). Enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Very many thanks, Valda. So glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Spitfire
Stunning images in this poetic prose, especially paragraph two. As we get older, our biggest fear is falling. I, too, don't look up unless I'm sitting down.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Stunning images in this poetic prose, especially paragraph two. As we get older, our biggest fear is falling. I, too, don't look up unless I'm sitting down.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Very many thanks for your review and the extra star, Shari. Much appreciated, as always. As for me, I don't look up unless I'm lying down! LOL
Comment from IndianaIrish
An awesome flash fiction story, Tony. You capture the character, setting, and emotion with your perfect descriptions. The ending is what made me feel your story deserved an extra star! Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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An awesome flash fiction story, Tony. You capture the character, setting, and emotion with your perfect descriptions. The ending is what made me feel your story deserved an extra star! Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much for this encouraging review, Karen, and your award of six stars. Glad you liked this one. I was originally going to make a poem of it, but somehow it seemed to fit flash fiction better. All the best, Tony
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is excellent, Tony. I enjoyed it immensely. Flash friction is one of my favourites, and some of the phrases, like 'the light and shade of trees,' is poetry in prose in this piece, Giddy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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This is excellent, Tony. I enjoyed it immensely. Flash friction is one of my favourites, and some of the phrases, like 'the light and shade of trees,' is poetry in prose in this piece, Giddy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Giddy. I did, in fact, start out writing this as a piece of free verse, but thought, on the whole, it was better suited to flash fiction. You have to be in it to win it! LOL
All the best, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good choice of photo for the story.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You describe the man very well, Tony.
-You have also included the consequences
of his aging, as the autumn seasons have come and gone.
-He sees them in his memory now; he has become
fragile, like the leaves, and fears he might fall,
just as they do.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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-A good choice of photo for the story.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You describe the man very well, Tony.
-You have also included the consequences
of his aging, as the autumn seasons have come and gone.
-He sees them in his memory now; he has become
fragile, like the leaves, and fears he might fall,
just as they do.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Pam. Glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate the good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony.
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You are welcome, Tony.