Comment from Adam Ihnken

Good

Just some polishing ideas.

I'd drop the "I'm" in the first sentence, the second sentence establishes who the subject is.

For the titles sake, I'd either replace "spirit" with "love" in the body or "love" with "spirit" in the title.

I'd also consider taking the second and third lines and shortening them into a single sentence with fewer words, "Living my life for all to see." That gains you five words, which could allow you to further impress upon the reader this feeling.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024

Thank you for your review and all the helpful information.

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Good

Your words are so powerful I would not change one of them. I feel (just my opinion) you could find an image that would resonate more and make the words really pop off the page. Lovely piece of writing.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018

Thank you for your review and kind words, I do appreciate them.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I'm a sinner,saved by grace.
I try to live my life
for all the world to see.
The spirit of
JESUS CHRIST
Lives in me.
Way to use your 25 words to the very very very best...well concisely done
God bless

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018

Thank you for your review and comment I do appreciate them.God bless