Gluttony
The delicious deadly sin11 total reviews
Comment from Lady Jane
First off, PERFECT picture to set off the gist of this poem. Second, excellent choice for a sin. This is the first I've read for gluttony. Yes, rule of thumb is to leave something on the plate, LOL. Bones are perfect. Well done. Good entry for the contest. Meter flowed ok and the presentation was good. Nothing to revise. Good luck.
Janelle
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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First off, PERFECT picture to set off the gist of this poem. Second, excellent choice for a sin. This is the first I've read for gluttony. Yes, rule of thumb is to leave something on the plate, LOL. Bones are perfect. Well done. Good entry for the contest. Meter flowed ok and the presentation was good. Nothing to revise. Good luck.
Janelle
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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thanks for your review and good wishes
Comment from donette1914
this is too funny! very talented of deadly sins and i love the artwork and your skills
It was a pleasure to read your work. thank you for sharing this well penned work donette1914 July 15 2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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this is too funny! very talented of deadly sins and i love the artwork and your skills
It was a pleasure to read your work. thank you for sharing this well penned work donette1914 July 15 2018
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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thanks so much for your great review. I love the picture on your home page. neat!
Comment from Boogienights
This is my favorite entry so far in this contest. I can certainly relate as I love to eat...and eat....and eat. Great picture you found to go with it. Seriously though is eating a lot really a sin? It doesn't feel like it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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This is my favorite entry so far in this contest. I can certainly relate as I love to eat...and eat....and eat. Great picture you found to go with it. Seriously though is eating a lot really a sin? It doesn't feel like it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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thanks a lot, and if it's a sin, I've had it.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahaha - perfect and funny. The meter is wonderful, the rhyme excellent but it's the story that's the sweetest. I LOVED it! (Wish I had a six left this week for it.)
Now, about your notes - easy-peasy. When you are in advanced editor, you will see a row of things to click on. You must select "size" (and give it a minute, if your computer is like mine... *sigh*). Then you simply scroll down the list that drops down Until you see the size you want.
Best of luck!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Hahahaha - perfect and funny. The meter is wonderful, the rhyme excellent but it's the story that's the sweetest. I LOVED it! (Wish I had a six left this week for it.)
Now, about your notes - easy-peasy. When you are in advanced editor, you will see a row of things to click on. You must select "size" (and give it a minute, if your computer is like mine... *sigh*). Then you simply scroll down the list that drops down Until you see the size you want.
Best of luck!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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thanks very much! and then, I've been told, I hit SAVE - which I'm not sure I did.
and thanks again for your great review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from AprilViolet
I really like your poem and I totally know what you mean about enjoying being a glutton from time to time! Love the picture you chose as well! Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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I really like your poem and I totally know what you mean about enjoying being a glutton from time to time! Love the picture you chose as well! Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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thanks a lot!
Comment from meeshu
as one of the Cardinal Sins, it is one of the cardialiest. but you are right it probably is better to be thin. or make a fortune selling diet books..
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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as one of the Cardinal Sins, it is one of the cardialiest. but you are right it probably is better to be thin. or make a fortune selling diet books..
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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there you go!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words make sense, Mystery Author, as gluttony is a choice. Unfortunately it is a popular choice hard to overcome by many. Your words + picture pair nicely.
Did you go to edit this
then select advanced editor
then highlight your poem & select font size
then SAVE?
Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Your words make sense, Mystery Author, as gluttony is a choice. Unfortunately it is a popular choice hard to overcome by many. Your words + picture pair nicely.
Did you go to edit this
then select advanced editor
then highlight your poem & select font size
then SAVE?
Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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I did all that but couldn't get a medium font size. must be doing something wrong. finally decided too big was better than too little, thanks for the info, though OR...maybe I forgot to save. thanks again.
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Very funny. Good pacing and flow. I love the line; I've not left a single crumb; Humorous way to approach a serious problem in this country. I love how the protagonist solves the issue, order something that has a part that needs to be left on the plate! Reminds me of the old joke, "I'll have a double cheeseburger, fries, apple pie and a diet coke! Love the picture with the poem. Hugh
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Very funny. Good pacing and flow. I love the line; I've not left a single crumb; Humorous way to approach a serious problem in this country. I love how the protagonist solves the issue, order something that has a part that needs to be left on the plate! Reminds me of the old joke, "I'll have a double cheeseburger, fries, apple pie and a diet coke! Love the picture with the poem. Hugh
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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thank you for your really nice and witty review. much appreciated.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good work on this one. If gluttony is a sin, I'll have plenty of company in Hell. LOL!
I have tried every way I know how to get the print size smaller than this but not too small, and I haven't been able to do it. I would welcome any and all advice. <-- It's easy. Just look right under the posting window and choose "advanced" (first, before typing anything). Then you have choice of fonts and font sizes, bold or italic... even font colors. I always use advanced. I choose size 20 in Times New Roman.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Good work on this one. If gluttony is a sin, I'll have plenty of company in Hell. LOL!
I have tried every way I know how to get the print size smaller than this but not too small, and I haven't been able to do it. I would welcome any and all advice. <-- It's easy. Just look right under the posting window and choose "advanced" (first, before typing anything). Then you have choice of fonts and font sizes, bold or italic... even font colors. I always use advanced. I choose size 20 in Times New Roman.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Phyllis, I did all that EXCEPT the size 20. bless you! however when I used 14 Times Roman it didn't make it any bigger than 12, so I didn't go higher. I will, now. thanks again.
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I've found that size 18 is okay, but any smaller and readers complain. Different fonts require different sizes.
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thanks again
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the deadly sin Gluttony that is deadly in more than one way. When we overeat on occasion it feels like we are going to die when the digestive system seems not to digest fast enough.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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A very well-written poem about the deadly sin Gluttony that is deadly in more than one way. When we overeat on occasion it feels like we are going to die when the digestive system seems not to digest fast enough.
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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right. Ye olde tummyache
