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Comment from pome lover
How dare he, is right! of all the nerve!
well, is he dead this time? OR was it someone else????
I have to say, Chico has one weird Mexican accent, but I love the back and forth with them.
I bet a TV remote as a murder weapon, is a first!
It's either the perfect murder, or a case of the wrong victim.
what an imagination you have!
good show, as the Brits say.
pl
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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How dare he, is right! of all the nerve!
well, is he dead this time? OR was it someone else????
I have to say, Chico has one weird Mexican accent, but I love the back and forth with them.
I bet a TV remote as a murder weapon, is a first!
It's either the perfect murder, or a case of the wrong victim.
what an imagination you have!
good show, as the Brits say.
pl
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you for this very pleasing review.
Ronald is dead. He died a while ago, but I don't think Sterling will ever know.
Patrolman Grandea is a Filipino who speaks perfect English. He's playing a part for Detective Brennan to help Sterling think he's killing Ronald. How would you write his dialogue in an accent?
The battery cover on my remote is very sharp.
Thanks for the compliments and the 5 stars.
Marv
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oh, a Filipino. sorry. no clue as to accent. am sure the one you gave him is fine.
so Sterling will never know? and Chico is playing a part. fascinating!
I join your other fans in waiting for more chapters!
Comment from Miranda Langston
This is dark as heck but it's really really good. "I don't know about dee coast, but hallway eez clear."
hahahahahaha! I nearly laughed out loud at that
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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This is dark as heck but it's really really good. "I don't know about dee coast, but hallway eez clear."
hahahahahaha! I nearly laughed out loud at that
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thanks for reviewing chapter 15. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the five stars.
Go ahead. Laugh out loud. I'm happy to hear it.
Marv
Comment from Victor Y
Wow... this murder scene was quite intense. The switching between 1st-person POV and 3rd-person POV is interesting, but it works! I gain the perspective of the murderer and learn his thought process. Good job!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Wow... this murder scene was quite intense. The switching between 1st-person POV and 3rd-person POV is interesting, but it works! I gain the perspective of the murderer and learn his thought process. Good job!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much, Victor, for this great review.
I needed the affirmation of the two POV's.
Thanks for the compliments.
Marv
Comment from c_lucas
If one is observance one would the Venitian's Blind cord, or fill the trash can with water. A third possibility would be an electric cord from an electric item in the room. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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If one is observance one would the Venitian's Blind cord, or fill the trash can with water. A third possibility would be an electric cord from an electric item in the room. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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I like your suggestions. Very clever. I wished I had thought of them. I wrote on the assumption that Sterling's room was devoid of anything that could be used for a weapon.
Shame on me for not writing something to that effect.
Thank you very much for the compliments.
Marv
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Marv,
Don't you just hate it when you complete a job and there's no one there to appreciate the fine work you've done?
This was a strange look into a demented mind. I especially loved the part about 'assault and battery.'
Good fun,
~patty~
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
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Hi, Marv,
Don't you just hate it when you complete a job and there's no one there to appreciate the fine work you've done?
This was a strange look into a demented mind. I especially loved the part about 'assault and battery.'
Good fun,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
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Thanks for reviewing. You have Sterling pegged. Glad you didn't think I mistakenly went down the wrong road.
Glad you liked this chapter.
Marv
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, you keel Ronald is very funny, Marv. And the understated urgency at a murder is classic comedy. If she's not dead then it's only attempted murder. lol.
Of course assault and battery is from the TV remote control. Doh, how stupid of me to have missed that obvious fact all these years.
That's right too! You have to kill the evidence, especially if can tell on you.
Do you think double jeopardy is when you kill the same person twice, you know using TV remote logic?
This is hilarious stuff Marv and totally unique.
Much enjoyed.
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
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Ha, you keel Ronald is very funny, Marv. And the understated urgency at a murder is classic comedy. If she's not dead then it's only attempted murder. lol.
Of course assault and battery is from the TV remote control. Doh, how stupid of me to have missed that obvious fact all these years.
That's right too! You have to kill the evidence, especially if can tell on you.
Do you think double jeopardy is when you kill the same person twice, you know using TV remote logic?
This is hilarious stuff Marv and totally unique.
Much enjoyed.
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
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Thank you, Gloria, for this pleasing review.
Your approval of what I was trying to do in this chapter has made me very happy.
You think you've written something humorous, but you never know until you get the reaction you're hoping for. I suppose it's true with any emotion.
Thanks for the compliments.
I like your remark: 'double jeopardy' when you kill the same person twice.
Thanks again,
Marv
Comment from Raul1
Exciting story! This is the type of crime mystery I like very much to read. You did a good job with part of your chapter. There is lots of action. I like it.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
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Exciting story! This is the type of crime mystery I like very much to read. You did a good job with part of your chapter. There is lots of action. I like it.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
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Thanks for reviewing this chapter, Raul. I appreciate the compliments.
I'm glad you liked part of this story.
Thank you for the five stars.
Marvin
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You're welcome.
Comment from judiverse
Chico is funny. Love Chico' comment I don't know about dee coast but the hallway eez clear. Sterling doesn't take any responsibility at all for what has happened. He is ready to kill Ronald thinking if he doesn't, he'll Finger Sterling. He considers ways and means of killing Ronald. He decides on using the pillow to smother him. He's angry because there's no response from Ronald when he apparently kills him. He thinks it's not very sporting of him not to make a move or put up any kind of struggle. I'm sure we'll find out what's really going on here. Excellent chapter and it read very smoothly. judi
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
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Chico is funny. Love Chico' comment I don't know about dee coast but the hallway eez clear. Sterling doesn't take any responsibility at all for what has happened. He is ready to kill Ronald thinking if he doesn't, he'll Finger Sterling. He considers ways and means of killing Ronald. He decides on using the pillow to smother him. He's angry because there's no response from Ronald when he apparently kills him. He thinks it's not very sporting of him not to make a move or put up any kind of struggle. I'm sure we'll find out what's really going on here. Excellent chapter and it read very smoothly. judi
Comment Written 28-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
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Thanks for reviewing this chapter, Judi. I appreciate the compliments.
Chico is one of the new patrolmen, assigned to keep an eye on Sterling. His name is Melchor Grandea.
Thank you for the five stars.
Marvin
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter in the crime book teamwork was well written rich in semen imagery it flowed well and it read well with no grammar issues as well objective an object the continents were excellent scripted measures aligned perfectly and good luck with this have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
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This chapter in the crime book teamwork was well written rich in semen imagery it flowed well and it read well with no grammar issues as well objective an object the continents were excellent scripted measures aligned perfectly and good luck with this have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 28-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
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Thanks for reviewing this chapter. I appreciate the compliments.
Thank you for the five stars.
God bless you, Dr. Ricky.
Marv
