Envy
I bet she wants what I've got7 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem about emotions, Envy, brings us down the classic path of the green monster until we come to hop-scotch squares that will get those ta-tas into tease mode.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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This poem about emotions, Envy, brings us down the classic path of the green monster until we come to hop-scotch squares that will get those ta-tas into tease mode.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Deb Kincaid
How fun! That last line caught me by surprise. With each line I was getting more anxious to find out what it was exactly that captured the neighbors attention. The poem captures the envy well--the neighbors repeated attempts to check your new figure out. And, the protagonist's obvious delight in seeing her envious neighbor so entranced. A lighthearted poem--a nice break from the heavier emotions.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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How fun! That last line caught me by surprise. With each line I was getting more anxious to find out what it was exactly that captured the neighbors attention. The poem captures the envy well--the neighbors repeated attempts to check your new figure out. And, the protagonist's obvious delight in seeing her envious neighbor so entranced. A lighthearted poem--a nice break from the heavier emotions.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much Deb for your great review. Jen
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
How funny! I hope you eventually give in and give the neighbor a peek! :) Your ending took me by surprise. I kept wondering...what's making that neighbor green with envy.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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How funny! I hope you eventually give in and give the neighbor a peek! :) Your ending took me by surprise. I kept wondering...what's making that neighbor green with envy.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks Cindy. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks an emotion shared as the neighbour was found envious of getting something precious from the poet as poet thought it was more precious than diamond; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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This speaks an emotion shared as the neighbour was found envious of getting something precious from the poet as poet thought it was more precious than diamond; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from Mel E. Furnish
I will admit I did not see that end coming! Haha either way very excellent piece! Great entry to represent envy, very dangerous emotion. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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I will admit I did not see that end coming! Haha either way very excellent piece! Great entry to represent envy, very dangerous emotion. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading. You said it was excellent so why only 4 stars?
Comment from humpwhistle
Maybe. Maybe not. Seems to me, big new boobies suggests
low self-esteem. Over-compensation.
A case of self-delusion, perhaps?
Just a suspicion.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Maybe. Maybe not. Seems to me, big new boobies suggests
low self-esteem. Over-compensation.
A case of self-delusion, perhaps?
Just a suspicion.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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I think you took it a bit too seriously, it is just a bit of fun but thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Emotions writing prompt.
You have covered several emotions here.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Emotions writing prompt.
You have covered several emotions here.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks Sharon.