Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem about emotions, Envy, brings us down the classic path of the green monster until we come to hop-scotch squares that will get those ta-tas into tease mode.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018

Many thanks

Comment from Deb Kincaid

Excellent

How fun! That last line caught me by surprise. With each line I was getting more anxious to find out what it was exactly that captured the neighbors attention. The poem captures the envy well--the neighbors repeated attempts to check your new figure out. And, the protagonist's obvious delight in seeing her envious neighbor so entranced. A lighthearted poem--a nice break from the heavier emotions.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018

Thank you so much Deb for your great review. Jen

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

How funny! I hope you eventually give in and give the neighbor a peek! :) Your ending took me by surprise. I kept wondering...what's making that neighbor green with envy.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thanks Cindy. Glad you liked it.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks an emotion shared as the neighbour was found envious of getting something precious from the poet as poet thought it was more precious than diamond; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Many thanks.

Comment from Mel E. Furnish

Good

I will admit I did not see that end coming! Haha either way very excellent piece! Great entry to represent envy, very dangerous emotion. Keep up the good work!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thank you for reading. You said it was excellent so why only 4 stars?

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Maybe. Maybe not. Seems to me, big new boobies suggests
low self-esteem. Over-compensation.
A case of self-delusion, perhaps?
Just a suspicion.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

I think you took it a bit too seriously, it is just a bit of fun but thanks for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the Emotions writing prompt.
You have covered several emotions here.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thanks Sharon.