April NaPoWriMo NationalPoetcontest
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "A Sonnet for today"Daily poems for April 2018
17 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Well Christine this is a fine, fine sonnet written in perfect metre and also about a subject we all love, Shakespeare. lol kidding of course I mean love.
Looking forward to today's offering. Hopefully I haven't got myself out of the correct number of things in the universe. :)
Great job!
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Well Christine this is a fine, fine sonnet written in perfect metre and also about a subject we all love, Shakespeare. lol kidding of course I mean love.
Looking forward to today's offering. Hopefully I haven't got myself out of the correct number of things in the universe. :)
Great job!
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Hi Gloria, Thank very much and yes I called on William for some extra help LOL I have a busy weekend away so not much poetry I will be a bit behind so will have to catchup on Sunday Cheers Christine
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, A Sonnet for Today, has athe key indicators of the format. The meter and rhyme scheme seem on the mark. The turn perhaps too subtle for my simple mind. Nice work with this.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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This sonnet, A Sonnet for Today, has athe key indicators of the format. The meter and rhyme scheme seem on the mark. The turn perhaps too subtle for my simple mind. Nice work with this.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hi Bill Thanks for your reply and I am sure you could whip up a sonnet in no time I challenge you to do one Cheers Christine
Comment from lyenochka
I have tried sonnets, too. The trick of the consistent iambic pentameter is hard to master. I like that you call upon the bard for help. But you're right. The love has to start in our hearts and minds.
"My poets hand " (poet's)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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I have tried sonnets, too. The trick of the consistent iambic pentameter is hard to master. I like that you call upon the bard for help. But you're right. The love has to start in our hearts and minds.
"My poets hand " (poet's)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Hi Helen Thank you for your review and have fixed poet's I originally had it in and then took it our LOL Cheers Christine
Comment from BeasPeas
Excellent, Christine. Nicely composed with great message. Last two lines are my favorite, though all are terrific. Good job with the sonnet. Check out: poets (poet's) hand. Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Excellent, Christine. Nicely composed with great message. Last two lines are my favorite, though all are terrific. Good job with the sonnet. Check out: poets (poet's) hand. Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Hi Marilyn Mine to LOL Have fixed poet's . Have worked hard today teaching and very tired now, latest one just posted, now to bed Yawn Goodnight Cheers Christine
Comment from aryr
This was so enjoyable to read Christine. A Sonnet is a challenge, but from what I know I think you did well. I loved the picture and I agree that it is a good reminder of a quill. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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This was so enjoyable to read Christine. A Sonnet is a challenge, but from what I know I think you did well. I loved the picture and I agree that it is a good reminder of a quill. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Hi Ary, Thanks so much for your lovely support and giving my work great reviews I really appreciate hearing from you Cheers Christine
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Most welcome Christine.
Comment from Mark Valentine
I love sonnets and you've done a quite nice one. I like that it is a sonnet about writing sonnets. My favorite line is "And that is what I truly write thereof" - it's a strongly accented line to keep the reader in the iambic pentameter flow- it's a good "love" rhyme, and it reinforces the 'writing-about-writing' theme. Your brief detour to muse upon having Shakespeare as your muse is wonderful and fits this pome perfectly.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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I love sonnets and you've done a quite nice one. I like that it is a sonnet about writing sonnets. My favorite line is "And that is what I truly write thereof" - it's a strongly accented line to keep the reader in the iambic pentameter flow- it's a good "love" rhyme, and it reinforces the 'writing-about-writing' theme. Your brief detour to muse upon having Shakespeare as your muse is wonderful and fits this pome perfectly.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hi Mark Thank you for this nice review for my sonnet. I think the secret is to get that flow and dum da meter as close as possible ai called upon Will to assist LOL. Well tried to anyway Cheers Christine
Comment from damommy
Instructions on how to write a sonnet given in such a lovely way in yours. Mentioning Shakespeare was very clever.
In your stanza, I think you can remove both commas to make the reading flow. They aren't necessary in these lines.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Instructions on how to write a sonnet given in such a lovely way in yours. Mentioning Shakespeare was very clever.
In your stanza, I think you can remove both commas to make the reading flow. They aren't necessary in these lines.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hi Yvonne, Thank you and I have removed all comma,s I never know exactlywhre to put them anyway so cheers and hopefully it can just be read without interruption Cheers Christine
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Good. 8-)
Comment from Susan B. Lamphier
Nicely done, Christine. This sonnet should be used in all lessons about how to write a sonnet. You absolutely hit it spot on, including a nod to ol' Willie the Shake himself! Thoroughly enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Nicely done, Christine. This sonnet should be used in all lessons about how to write a sonnet. You absolutely hit it spot on, including a nod to ol' Willie the Shake himself! Thoroughly enjoyed it!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hi Susan, Thanks for you encouraging words I hope Willie Would like it i am glad you did Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet. It is clear your love is in your mind and flows through your pen on paper and send to the reader with pure love. As far as my knowledge allow I did not pick up any faults.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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A very well-written sonnet. It is clear your love is in your mind and flows through your pen on paper and send to the reader with pure love. As far as my knowledge allow I did not pick up any faults.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Thank you Sandra, You are spot on I love to write and this site has opened up so much and given me the confidence to try new things and have made some lovely friends including you Cheers and what fun is this Christine
Comment from Pamusart
Get ready to write the next one! Huphup. March. Lol. Well written. Good rhyming scheme. This is another good poem for this contest.
This one sounds like you are just avoiding writers block.
Good luck in the contest. Thank you fir sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Get ready to write the next one! Huphup. March. Lol. Well written. Good rhyming scheme. This is another good poem for this contest.
This one sounds like you are just avoiding writers block.
Good luck in the contest. Thank you fir sharing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hi Pamusart, Thanks for your review I wrote this one thinking my sonnet writing may have needed help as there is so much to writing a sonnet all the requirements and meter and endings etc so a plea for help may be needed but my overall love is writing and therefore in my mind it dwells And hes 4 down 26 to go LOL Cheers Christine