Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 453 "Let Us Fly!"Small and Specialty Poems
14 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Good presentation. Enjoyable to read. Creative. Irony between artwork choice and poetic thoughts. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good alliteration. Nice work.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Good presentation. Enjoyable to read. Creative. Irony between artwork choice and poetic thoughts. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good alliteration. Nice work.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you Alicia. It was kind of a crazy piece, so I had a whimsical interpretation.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--an amazing flying statue and a combined-form poem to mimic its shape! I liked the comparison to Superman and your addition of rhymes. Here's to "pure energy"! -Joan
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Wow--an amazing flying statue and a combined-form poem to mimic its shape! I liked the comparison to Superman and your addition of rhymes. Here's to "pure energy"! -Joan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you Joan. I'll drink to that!
Comment from LIJ Red
The photo and two poetic forms work well together. The etheree and nonet seem to work in my mind better than some poems, especially those with refrains...fivers.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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The photo and two poetic forms work well together. The etheree and nonet seem to work in my mind better than some poems, especially those with refrains...fivers.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you LijRed. Yes, I agree that a Nonet would work well with the Ethree too.
Comment from jppoet
As usual, here is another of your Treischelesque poems, rich in rhymes and sweet metrical cadences, but THIS TIME, UNIQUE, in its dual sculptures of 5 7 5 technology interwoven with its POETIC PYRAMID.
I am bookcasing it. john
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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As usual, here is another of your Treischelesque poems, rich in rhymes and sweet metrical cadences, but THIS TIME, UNIQUE, in its dual sculptures of 5 7 5 technology interwoven with its POETIC PYRAMID.
I am bookcasing it. john
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you John. It's a privilege to have a poem book-cased and an honor to get those six stars. Love your description of the Etheree as a ":Poetic Pyramid" with its awesome alliteration.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I really like the combination of the two forms that you used. It flows together very well. Your etheree uses strong, powerful words. I like it!
teresa
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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I really like the combination of the two forms that you used. It flows together very well. Your etheree uses strong, powerful words. I like it!
teresa
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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thank you teresa. It's a pleasure to get a wonderful review like this.
Comment from Pantygynt
What a strange statue. I wonder what the sculptor meant it should represent. Perhaps you hit the nail on the head with this combination, but you have miscounted the syllables in the last line of your 5-7-5.
"What a joy it will be!" This is six syllables and should be five. Suggest you omit the indefinite article. It works just as well without it.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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What a strange statue. I wonder what the sculptor meant it should represent. Perhaps you hit the nail on the head with this combination, but you have miscounted the syllables in the last line of your 5-7-5.
"What a joy it will be!" This is six syllables and should be five. Suggest you omit the indefinite article. It works just as well without it.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you Pantygynt. Amazing what the mind overlooks. Sometime I get brain-blind. I'll drop that "a" ASAP. Funny that nobody else noticed it, must have taken my word for it. One reviewer thought that the statue represented death and releasing oneself from the forces of earth.
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No problem. Brain blindness happens to all of us some time or another. Death is it? Well there is always some gloomy bastard around. Lol.
Comment from damommy
That sculpture looks like it might take off any minute. You've shown that with your words very well. You're very creative to come up with something for this one. It is a bit strange-looking.
Very nice how you combined a 5-7-5 and an Etheree. They tied together nicely.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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That sculpture looks like it might take off any minute. You've shown that with your words very well. You're very creative to come up with something for this one. It is a bit strange-looking.
Very nice how you combined a 5-7-5 and an Etheree. They tied together nicely.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you damommy, Yes, I scratched my head a bit while looking at it. Thought; maybe a soul departing its owner, maybe a ghost haunting that house, but settled on Superman-esque flight. That's the fun of art!
Comment from heavenempress
Waal, amazing work. Cannot doubt the gift and the creative nature in you. Keep it up. The presentation is absolutely perfect. Wish to learn how you do it!!!!!!I highly recommend your work to others.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Waal, amazing work. Cannot doubt the gift and the creative nature in you. Keep it up. The presentation is absolutely perfect. Wish to learn how you do it!!!!!!I highly recommend your work to others.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Thank you heavenempress, that is wonderful. I appreciate your review and encouragement.
Comment from Pamusart
I think I understand this one. I think it is about death and releasing oneself from the forces of earth and of loved ones left behind. Am I right. Uplifting and well written. Thank you for sharing and best of luck with this poem
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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I think I understand this one. I think it is about death and releasing oneself from the forces of earth and of loved ones left behind. Am I right. Uplifting and well written. Thank you for sharing and best of luck with this poem
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Thank you Pamusart. That is a good interpretation of the artwork, for sure.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi TRIESCHEL,
Well you certainly did find something to write about this one.
I can see why you thought of superman in this one, although Concorde sprung to mind when I saw it. I admire your determination to write what ever the subject.
Well done you.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Hi TRIESCHEL,
Well you certainly did find something to write about this one.
I can see why you thought of superman in this one, although Concorde sprung to mind when I saw it. I admire your determination to write what ever the subject.
Well done you.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Thank you Brenda, I can see that Jet too. I appreciate your comments and review.
