This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "A Family Chat"Veronica is sent back again
38 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
All the questions buzzing around in my head seem to be coming out in your story now. So I'm glad to have things explained. I'm enjoying your UK English. You have some funny expressions which I love. It allows me a chance to see my mom's British roots in action.
I hope you'll heal soon after tearing the whatsit in your leg. I'm still recovering from bursitis in my hip. I got injured back in August. I'm tired of being an invalid.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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All the questions buzzing around in my head seem to be coming out in your story now. So I'm glad to have things explained. I'm enjoying your UK English. You have some funny expressions which I love. It allows me a chance to see my mom's British roots in action.
I hope you'll heal soon after tearing the whatsit in your leg. I'm still recovering from bursitis in my hip. I got injured back in August. I'm tired of being an invalid.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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That sound painful, too. I know what you mean about being an invalid, since having my replacement knee, I've not been right since. What caused it? And, what is it? Sounds awful.
What part of England did your mother come from? I'm so pleased you like my English. Mildred's is my favourite. :)) She is actually taken from a friend of mine. When she read it, she loved the character but didn't realise she was the model, when I told her, she was thrilled to bits! Bless her.
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My mom grew up in London. I couldn't tell you any more than that.
Comment from wordsfromsue
The problem is, Veronica can figuratively shake her fist at the unseen powers that be all she wants, but that's not going to make them come..
I like that she's having sympathy for Joe's predicament as well as Michael's. It's neither of their fault.
Okay, let's see if the powers that be show up soon!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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The problem is, Veronica can figuratively shake her fist at the unseen powers that be all she wants, but that's not going to make them come..
I like that she's having sympathy for Joe's predicament as well as Michael's. It's neither of their fault.
Okay, let's see if the powers that be show up soon!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi Sue, I'm back from Spain, I'll tell you all about it later. Thank you for reading this part, the powers that be, are coming up!! Big hugs, my friend. xxxxxxxx Sandra
Comment from mbroyles2
You have such a unique way telling a story. You can draw an audience in so quickly and hold them there sentence after sentence.
This story has an intriguing twist and full of suspense.
Excellent writing!
Michael
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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You have such a unique way telling a story. You can draw an audience in so quickly and hold them there sentence after sentence.
This story has an intriguing twist and full of suspense.
Excellent writing!
Michael
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi Michael, sorry for taking so long to reply, I've been in Spain for a while. Thank you so very much for the lovely six stars, and the wonderful review, I really appreciate both! Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
An excellent chapter to continue the story with spot on dialogue.
It''s good to see MIldred in a more prominent role.
V & M make a good tandem.
One question immediately comes to mind.
When Veronica travels she occupies another person for a long period of time,
but Joe seems to only be there for a few seconds.
Where is he when he's not 'occupying' Michael?
Perhaps when Michael sees his castle in pieces, he might ask,
"What happened to my castle, mummy?"
The collision is a good explanation of how Joe traveled and became Michael.
But it seems the "powers" must have been behind it.
I guess the powers that be have a lot to answer for
and a big mess to straighten out.
And that's what makes it interesting.
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hello Sandra,
An excellent chapter to continue the story with spot on dialogue.
It''s good to see MIldred in a more prominent role.
V & M make a good tandem.
One question immediately comes to mind.
When Veronica travels she occupies another person for a long period of time,
but Joe seems to only be there for a few seconds.
Where is he when he's not 'occupying' Michael?
Perhaps when Michael sees his castle in pieces, he might ask,
"What happened to my castle, mummy?"
The collision is a good explanation of how Joe traveled and became Michael.
But it seems the "powers" must have been behind it.
I guess the powers that be have a lot to answer for
and a big mess to straighten out.
And that's what makes it interesting.
Well done
RS
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for the 6 stars, Robert! Sorry I've been so long replying, I had to rush off to Spain with my husband because his brother, who lives there, had a heart attack, the second in a short space of time. Fortunately, he rallied round again. Lots of questions here, LOL, answers coming soon. Veronica took over Mrs Humphries body and was in control of it while she was in her. When she was in Alice, she was only an observer, until she was 'thrown out'. What is happening to Joe?? Thanks again, my friend. Big hugs. xxxxxx Sandra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter, Sandra, that
fills us in with a few things.
-The main one is how Michael
happened to be in the room
the same time as Daveth when
his dad was contacting him.
-Poor Mildred hadn't heard Joe's
voice through Michael, and I
can see why that would disturb
and shock her.
-We also see Ver.'s frustration at the very end.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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-A good chapter, Sandra, that
fills us in with a few things.
-The main one is how Michael
happened to be in the room
the same time as Daveth when
his dad was contacting him.
-Poor Mildred hadn't heard Joe's
voice through Michael, and I
can see why that would disturb
and shock her.
-We also see Ver.'s frustration at the very end.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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HI Pam. I'm back from Spain, my brother-in-law is on the mend. I just hope he takes care of himself a bit better now. Now, back to work on my next part. Thank you so much, my dear friend, for the lovely 6 stars and for another lovely review. A few things will be coming out in the next part, I'm still working on it now. I've really missed being here. Thanks for being so patient and kind. Big hugs, my friend. xxxxxx Sandra
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Huge hugs to you, Sandra, I have missed seeing you on FS, and I am very glad your brother-in-law is doing better. You are very welcome and deserving of the 6 stars and review. They just put out a new picture challenge; I think you will really like it when you get time. I have been thinking of you often. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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Thank you, Pam, you always make me smile. You're such a good friend. I'll have a look at the new picture, have you joined the group? You would be so good at it, your poetry is lovely. It's so nice to chat to you. xxxx
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You are welcome, Sandra, and I am glad I make you 🙂 No, I haven't as it takes me a while to write something and also need those $$ when I do. I enjoy chatting, as well.
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Sandra, I'm back again I enjoy reading your story, I need to read it twice (must be an age thing with me. LOL
Good descriptions of Mildred reaction as she realises that Michael is host to Joe.
I like the idea of the lego castle being smashed works well with the story.
Silly' wotnot' haven't heard that for years. My Gran used to call us kids when we misbehaved:- 'Little nowts' She was broad Yorkshire.
Good story and again I can find no faults with it. Keep up the good work. Enjoy your holiday.
~Mel~
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi Sandra, I'm back again I enjoy reading your story, I need to read it twice (must be an age thing with me. LOL
Good descriptions of Mildred reaction as she realises that Michael is host to Joe.
I like the idea of the lego castle being smashed works well with the story.
Silly' wotnot' haven't heard that for years. My Gran used to call us kids when we misbehaved:- 'Little nowts' She was broad Yorkshire.
Good story and again I can find no faults with it. Keep up the good work. Enjoy your holiday.
~Mel~
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi Mel, sorry to be so late replying, I had to rush to Spain because my brother-in-law had a heart attack. Fortunately, he is recovering. Thank you so much for this lovely review, I'm so pleased to see you back again. LOL, an age thing? I am way ahead of you there!! I love some of the old expressions from the past. Most of them my mum and grandmother used. I hope to keep them going with my grandchildren. Thanks again. my friend. xxx Sandra x
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Hi Sandra, sorry you had to rush to Spain, but pleased your brother-in-law is recovering. The medical service is first class here in Benidorm and I know it is the same further down the coast. So at least he is in good hands.
I'm back home now to a good internet connection. LOL
~Mel ~ xxxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Cousin.
" Finally, shrugging it off as only a child can do, he picked up the pieces and began rebuilding it again. Relief flooded through me--he was fine." (Phew!)
"I stood up and went to put the kettle on. A strong, sweet cup of tea was needed." (Hahaha!)
"She stood up and slowly lowered herself onto the floor to the sound of her arthritic knee joints angrily complaining." (Crikey, I hear ya there cuz! I make the same noises now, as Pa did in his 70's lol.)
"Hedgerow Capers ... oh(,) that's the book I wrote for you and Michael..."
"Michael came trotting in just as Joe entered Daveth's room, and I think they clashed, and that's how Joe ended up inside him." (Ah, good work.)
" I thought back to all the times I time-travelled and occupied Mrs Humphries' and Alice's body(bodies)."
" If they do, they'd better bloody well come and sort this out!" (Great finishing line.)
This is fabulous stuff, mate. How did you come up with this idea, for a book? I wish I could write fiction but my imagination is not good enough.
Brilliance, once again.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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G'day Cousin.
" Finally, shrugging it off as only a child can do, he picked up the pieces and began rebuilding it again. Relief flooded through me--he was fine." (Phew!)
"I stood up and went to put the kettle on. A strong, sweet cup of tea was needed." (Hahaha!)
"She stood up and slowly lowered herself onto the floor to the sound of her arthritic knee joints angrily complaining." (Crikey, I hear ya there cuz! I make the same noises now, as Pa did in his 70's lol.)
"Hedgerow Capers ... oh(,) that's the book I wrote for you and Michael..."
"Michael came trotting in just as Joe entered Daveth's room, and I think they clashed, and that's how Joe ended up inside him." (Ah, good work.)
" I thought back to all the times I time-travelled and occupied Mrs Humphries' and Alice's body(bodies)."
" If they do, they'd better bloody well come and sort this out!" (Great finishing line.)
This is fabulous stuff, mate. How did you come up with this idea, for a book? I wish I could write fiction but my imagination is not good enough.
Brilliance, once again.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi, Cousin!! I'm back, my brother-in-law is on the mend, thank goodness, with strict instructions to take it easy. Now, I'm back. I'll take a look through your manuscript. I had a quicky before I left. Thank you so much for this lovely review, and all those shiny stars. Big hugs and lots of love! xxxx Sandra xx
Comment from Ogden
I find this story to have excellent dialog and a challenging, multifaceted plot.
There is no doubt in my mind that the writer is talented, yet I question the decision to advance the plot - in this rather lengthy chapter, at any rate, virtually, with dialog only. Reading a dramatic description of the action and events being discussed, would be considerably more comprehensible (leastwise, in my opinion).
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I find this story to have excellent dialog and a challenging, multifaceted plot.
There is no doubt in my mind that the writer is talented, yet I question the decision to advance the plot - in this rather lengthy chapter, at any rate, virtually, with dialog only. Reading a dramatic description of the action and events being discussed, would be considerably more comprehensible (leastwise, in my opinion).
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi Don, so sorry to have taken so long to reply, I was called away to Spain when my brother-in-law was rushed to hospital after suffering a second heart attack. Thank you so much for reading this part. The dialogue was necessary, as it was an important part of this chapter. It isn't always like this. (thank goodness) The next part will explain more. Thank you again! xx Sandra xx
Comment from c_lucas
Man has learned to fly, reached outer space and traveled to the moon. Time travel is still in the future. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Man has learned to fly, reached outer space and traveled to the moon. Time travel is still in the future. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I am sure it will come, but not in our time, Charlie, sad to say. I'd love to go back and change a couple of things. Thank you for the lovely review, my friend. Sandra xxx
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You're welcome, Sandra. Charlie
Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, I still like my idea....LOL...try eating or drinking something he doesn't like...prunes...liver...smoothies made from vegies...LOL...we have got to get him out of there...I love this chapter sweet girl...sorry I am so late...a story very well written...and very well told...love you sooooo very much...love you....Linda xxoo
so far everything is going well here...there were a few rough spots...but we are getting through them...my heart just aches for those who have lost so much Sandra...I wish I were a millionaire....I would help them rebuild...so sad...sigh...it is in the 90's here...and some still don't have electric...I know God was with us...I was sitting on the bed in the bedroom...leaning on the wall...I could feel the wall moving...my daughter was sooooooooo scared...so I played scrabble with her...and read to the grandkids...I think that is like the seventh hurricane I was in...but we are safe...xxoo love
say hi to Ian for me...and god bless you all...loveeeee ya xxoo
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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HI Sandra, I still like my idea....LOL...try eating or drinking something he doesn't like...prunes...liver...smoothies made from vegies...LOL...we have got to get him out of there...I love this chapter sweet girl...sorry I am so late...a story very well written...and very well told...love you sooooo very much...love you....Linda xxoo
so far everything is going well here...there were a few rough spots...but we are getting through them...my heart just aches for those who have lost so much Sandra...I wish I were a millionaire....I would help them rebuild...so sad...sigh...it is in the 90's here...and some still don't have electric...I know God was with us...I was sitting on the bed in the bedroom...leaning on the wall...I could feel the wall moving...my daughter was sooooooooo scared...so I played scrabble with her...and read to the grandkids...I think that is like the seventh hurricane I was in...but we are safe...xxoo love
say hi to Ian for me...and god bless you all...loveeeee ya xxoo
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Hi, my dear Linda! I've been away, we had to rush off to Spain when Graham's brother had another heart attack, it was a worrying time, but he has pulled through. Thank you so very much, my wonderful friend, for the lovely 6 stars and the fun review. Prunes!!! LOL, I love them, but they don't do anything for me. lol. How is everything with you now? It must have been the worst ever time, so many hurricanes at one time, I don't believe I've heard of that happening before, not on that scale. I'm so pleased you are safe. Was there any loss of live in your area? Your daughter wouldn't have been alone in being scared had I been there, I've never seen one, and don't want too!!! I do feel for everyone who lost everything. So many memories have been sucked up and blown away. Things that can never be replaced. So sad. I don't know how you can cope with that. You've survived SEVEN!!!! Goodness me, Linda, you have the angels on your side, I've always said as much. Take care, my dear friend. Sending you lots of love. xxxxxx And loads of hugs! xxxx Sandra xxxx
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HI Sandra, I am so sorry to hear about Graham's brother...but thankful he is ok...LOL...yes prunes...and your so welcome...we came out just fine...not having electric for so long was the worst part...but we did have a generator...but it didn't take the daytime heat away...I felt so bad for people around us...no one died that I know about...I told my daughter God was there with us...and He would protect us...just truly believe that...
talked to my mother yesterday...the water went in there living room...and their trailer of thirty five years was totally damaged...and they were up off the ground by 4 or 5 feet...it is tilted...my brother said it can't be fixed...there seeing if FEMA can help with another...in the mean time...they can live with my brother...their so in prayers...and I know you are an angel...you help so many people...sigh...you take care as well my sweet friend...sending you the bestest of love...and the biggerest hugs...LOL...loveeeee you...and say hi to Ian for me...