Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "haiku (sugar cotton clouds)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
28 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy;
I love this haiku. The images brought to mind by your words were lovely for me. Thank you.
I'm so sorry to hear about your depression. I'm suffering too, and I empathize with you. Please feel the love I'm sending your way,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Hi Gypsy;
I love this haiku. The images brought to mind by your words were lovely for me. Thank you.
I'm so sorry to hear about your depression. I'm suffering too, and I empathize with you. Please feel the love I'm sending your way,
~patty~
Comment Written 09-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate.
Yum, sugar cotton clouds! lol. You have a very good imagination and it shows through in this nice and well written little piece.
How are you feeling? A bit better than the other day I hope.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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G'day mate.
Yum, sugar cotton clouds! lol. You have a very good imagination and it shows through in this nice and well written little piece.
How are you feeling? A bit better than the other day I hope.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. I was in the hospital for six days, just got home last night. I am okay.
gypsy
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Good to see you back and hopefully getting better.
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Thank you :)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, very sweet. I really like the line 'sugar cotton clouds'. It reminds me of when I was young I had a second job working a fairy floss machine. There's nothing quite like cotton candy pink floss. I like the 'sweet' theme of the whole haiku.
I am so sorry you have not been well, Gypsy. Do hope you are feeling much better. You play such an important role on this site as a teacher and guide. Cheers, Giddy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Oh, very sweet. I really like the line 'sugar cotton clouds'. It reminds me of when I was young I had a second job working a fairy floss machine. There's nothing quite like cotton candy pink floss. I like the 'sweet' theme of the whole haiku.
I am so sorry you have not been well, Gypsy. Do hope you are feeling much better. You play such an important role on this site as a teacher and guide. Cheers, Giddy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A softly spoken write with deep meaning and resonance. I always enjoy your Haiku writes as they are so clever and poignant, take care of yourself, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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A softly spoken write with deep meaning and resonance. I always enjoy your Haiku writes as they are so clever and poignant, take care of yourself, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from Bard's Bride
Love this haiku poet. Conjures up an image perfectly without a picture. I've looked at clouds before and seen cotton candy ( in them)
Sometimes they've looked like that. Fantastic satori in every way. Bookcasing this if you don't mind.
Btavo!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Love this haiku poet. Conjures up an image perfectly without a picture. I've looked at clouds before and seen cotton candy ( in them)
Sometimes they've looked like that. Fantastic satori in every way. Bookcasing this if you don't mind.
Btavo!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. The six stars is icing on the cake....thank you.
gypsy
Comment from Heather Knight
This is another lovely haiku that makes me think of candy floss. Please don't let that depression win.
I posted My Soul the other day thinking of you and other FanStorians and friends who are feeling down at the moment.
Take care. Big hug.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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This is another lovely haiku that makes me think of candy floss. Please don't let that depression win.
I posted My Soul the other day thinking of you and other FanStorians and friends who are feeling down at the moment.
Take care. Big hug.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written and very original it made me smile , it is very descriptive using fifteen syllables if I am correct molasses was a good word choice and works really well I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written and very original it made me smile , it is very descriptive using fifteen syllables if I am correct molasses was a good word choice and works really well I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-I was very taken and moved by your ingeniously creative haiku that is especially soft sounding with the "S" words that slowly and quietly produce a soft sounding aura to the haiku.
-Even the sweetness of your intentional words like. "molasses" and "sugar cotton clouds", which is also alliteration, creates a happiness of thought and also describes demonstratively how visually molasses moves slowly in a great inventive quality for your description.
-The alliteration in your satori of the words "sweet Sojourn" not only is a beautiful alliteration but also acts as a relativity to your conceptual theme of your haiku and gives that moment of a spontaneous excitement of understanding.
-I'm glad you did not use the picture because you painted one perfectly.
-Opening is fine and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you love dearly.
Alex
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-I was very taken and moved by your ingeniously creative haiku that is especially soft sounding with the "S" words that slowly and quietly produce a soft sounding aura to the haiku.
-Even the sweetness of your intentional words like. "molasses" and "sugar cotton clouds", which is also alliteration, creates a happiness of thought and also describes demonstratively how visually molasses moves slowly in a great inventive quality for your description.
-The alliteration in your satori of the words "sweet Sojourn" not only is a beautiful alliteration but also acts as a relativity to your conceptual theme of your haiku and gives that moment of a spontaneous excitement of understanding.
-I'm glad you did not use the picture because you painted one perfectly.
-Opening is fine and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you love dearly.
Alex
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
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You are very welcome Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The clouds can sometimes remind us of the candy floss we had as children. We had some pink clouds a while back that had that effect on me.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The clouds can sometimes remind us of the candy floss we had as children. We had some pink clouds a while back that had that effect on me.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This is beautiful Sister. Is there any way I can help with your issues? I'm a great listener! Just want you to know you are a very special woman to me. Smile my friend. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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This is beautiful Sister. Is there any way I can help with your issues? I'm a great listener! Just want you to know you are a very special woman to me. Smile my friend. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
