Slick Tony
Always a player, still a loser9 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Looks like Slick Tony wasn't as smooth as he planned. More like Slimy Tony haha...well to wifey pooh at least.
Yep. We're better'n the CIA. You can take that to the bank LOL
Some flashy dribble, for sure! haha Congrats on 3rd Place
Cheers P
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Looks like Slick Tony wasn't as smooth as he planned. More like Slimy Tony haha...well to wifey pooh at least.
Yep. We're better'n the CIA. You can take that to the bank LOL
Some flashy dribble, for sure! haha Congrats on 3rd Place
Cheers P
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Tony wasn't so slick after all, LOL.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL A complete turn around for writing. Usually your man gets the girl. This time he lost his wife, but I guess he officially has a bikini clad girl. LOL I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Good luck.
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LOL A complete turn around for writing. Usually your man gets the girl. This time he lost his wife, but I guess he officially has a bikini clad girl. LOL I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
Comment from bookishfabler
I know these things aren't easy. Such little words to use. This picture was great. I wish you much luck in the contest. I like a bit longer Shorts to write myself because these limited words are a bitch.
hugs Heidi
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I know these things aren't easy. Such little words to use. This picture was great. I wish you much luck in the contest. I like a bit longer Shorts to write myself because these limited words are a bitch.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
Comment from c_lucas
Caught in the act and no excuse comes to mind. Busted! This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
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Caught in the act and no excuse comes to mind. Busted! This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Very nice piece here, all through dialogue. Full story there and nicely paced given the strict word count.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
Very nice piece here, all through dialogue. Full story there and nicely paced given the strict word count.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
To be brutally honest, John, this fifty-one word dribble flash fiction works better than many of the entries I read in such contests. First, it is all composed of telephone dialogue between a wronged woman and a two-timing husband who claimed he was at a Miami seminar. Unbeknownst to him, his wife had an investigator tail and film him having an affair. Story is tight, drama is heightened, and the twist ending is compelling and fitting. Writing shows a high level of polish and creativity to pull off this feat of telling a story through dialogue only. You live it to reader to imagine the husband's expression when his soon-to-be ex-wife tells him that his secret tryst is known.
This is a thrilling read, John, and I found no errors in it. Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success.
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To be brutally honest, John, this fifty-one word dribble flash fiction works better than many of the entries I read in such contests. First, it is all composed of telephone dialogue between a wronged woman and a two-timing husband who claimed he was at a Miami seminar. Unbeknownst to him, his wife had an investigator tail and film him having an affair. Story is tight, drama is heightened, and the twist ending is compelling and fitting. Writing shows a high level of polish and creativity to pull off this feat of telling a story through dialogue only. You live it to reader to imagine the husband's expression when his soon-to-be ex-wife tells him that his secret tryst is known.
This is a thrilling read, John, and I found no errors in it. Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
Comment from Jackreese
We all have that gotcha moment, only this one looks like its gonna coast Tony more than he bargained for. It's a strong entry, Good luck!
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We all have that gotcha moment, only this one looks like its gonna coast Tony more than he bargained for. It's a strong entry, Good luck!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day mate.
Short, sweet and funny. I call that an "Ouch! Moment."
A very good contest entry and I wish you the best of luck in it. Did you write for the picture or write and then got the picture?
Great job.
Cheers Fez
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Hahahaha! G'day mate.
Short, sweet and funny. I call that an "Ouch! Moment."
A very good contest entry and I wish you the best of luck in it. Did you write for the picture or write and then got the picture?
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A bad phone call. The jig is up. A freind and I had lunch at our favorite resturant today. On the way home his phone rang. It was his wife. She asked, "Where are you?"
He said, "On the way home."
She hesitated and asked, "Are you alone?"
He said, "Tom is with me. You're on speaker phone."
She hesitated again and said, "I'll call you later."
I said, "You're in trouble."
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A bad phone call. The jig is up. A freind and I had lunch at our favorite resturant today. On the way home his phone rang. It was his wife. She asked, "Where are you?"
He said, "On the way home."
She hesitated and asked, "Are you alone?"
He said, "Tom is with me. You're on speaker phone."
She hesitated again and said, "I'll call you later."
I said, "You're in trouble."
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
