Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "haiku (dove flies)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
23 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
As you can see, I am still trying to catch up from my Alaska trip. It was good to be away from much of the political turmoil. I admired your social commentary in this tiny haikuI and think we could use many flocks of doves--here's to peace! _Joan
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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As you can see, I am still trying to catch up from my Alaska trip. It was good to be away from much of the political turmoil. I admired your social commentary in this tiny haikuI and think we could use many flocks of doves--here's to peace! _Joan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I appreciate that you took the time to review it. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
We could use a few white doves flying over the White House these days. Having olive branches in their beaks couldn't hurt either.
Nice way of turning your haiku weekly challenge on birds into a political statement.
Let's hope a few fly over Ryongsong Residence, also known as Residence No. 55, and known by locals as Central Luxury Mansion, or the presidential palace in North Korea and the main residence of North Korean leader Kim Jong-un.
Hey, it couldn't hurt, right?
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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We could use a few white doves flying over the White House these days. Having olive branches in their beaks couldn't hurt either.
Nice way of turning your haiku weekly challenge on birds into a political statement.
Let's hope a few fly over Ryongsong Residence, also known as Residence No. 55, and known by locals as Central Luxury Mansion, or the presidential palace in North Korea and the main residence of North Korean leader Kim Jong-un.
Hey, it couldn't hurt, right?
~Dean :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Dean, I appreciate the review and the kind words, thank you, darlin.
Gypsy hugs
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It's always a pleasure, dearest Gypsy.
HUGS!!!
~Dean ;)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written and very beautiful with a beautiful meaning you have done really well and shown your talent again it shines through I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written and very beautiful with a beautiful meaning you have done really well and shown your talent again it shines through I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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I appreciate the review and the kind words, thank you
Comment from Unspoken94
This Haiku needs to be seen and read again and again by
all those who struggle to understand what is truly evil and
what is good. MariVal, thank you for this word of hope when
so many of us feel very disillusioned by the dove who flies over
a house that could easily shoot it down. -Bill
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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This Haiku needs to be seen and read again and again by
all those who struggle to understand what is truly evil and
what is good. MariVal, thank you for this word of hope when
so many of us feel very disillusioned by the dove who flies over
a house that could easily shoot it down. -Bill
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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You are right, Bill, I know how it is but I keep hope for peace. Thank you very much for the six stars and exceptional review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. At this stage the White House needs more than one dove to fly over that will bring ultimate peace.
Typo in title
haiku (dove flys)flies
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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A very well-written haiku. At this stage the White House needs more than one dove to fly over that will bring ultimate peace.
Typo in title
haiku (dove flys)flies
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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thank you for the review, I corrected the error
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-truly the White House needs with your poem suggests is that we need peace in the White House.
-Very good to grammatically connected lines followed by a satori that expresses a supportive situation to the conceptual theme and also gives the poem that aha moment and then alliteration form of "peace prayer".
-A very good addition to the haiku booklet that should serve as a goods representation of haiku's.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-truly the White House needs with your poem suggests is that we need peace in the White House.
-Very good to grammatically connected lines followed by a satori that expresses a supportive situation to the conceptual theme and also gives the poem that aha moment and then alliteration form of "peace prayer".
-A very good addition to the haiku booklet that should serve as a goods representation of haiku's.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, Alex.
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You are most sincerely and dearly welcome, Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from apky
The way things look at the moment,
we do need some prayers for the White House.
WhatI fail to understand is why Americans let
their beautiful country come to this mess.
One can't help but wonder: what next, a civil war?
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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The way things look at the moment,
we do need some prayers for the White House.
WhatI fail to understand is why Americans let
their beautiful country come to this mess.
One can't help but wonder: what next, a civil war?
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review. I hope we don't have a war. I didn't vote for trump.
Comment from Mark Valentine
Lovely thought - would that it came true. I think many people on all sides wish they could throw a blanket of clam and peace over our capital. Love how you tied nature into this political poem.
Btw, did you mean to write "flys" instead of "flies"?
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Lovely thought - would that it came true. I think many people on all sides wish they could throw a blanket of clam and peace over our capital. Love how you tied nature into this political poem.
Btw, did you mean to write "flys" instead of "flies"?
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for bringing that error to my attention. I meant flies. Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy;
as always, your haiku is well structured.
A nit: the plural of fly is 'flies.' (I looked it up to make sure.)
I think doves are afraid to fly over the White House. Too much bad karma.
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Hi Gypsy;
as always, your haiku is well structured.
A nit: the plural of fly is 'flies.' (I looked it up to make sure.)
I think doves are afraid to fly over the White House. Too much bad karma.
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and the correction.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Gypsy
This is such an apt read for me, only yesterday I had two doves at my feet as I sat at a park bench and I was thinking of their significance as birds of peace, especially of late as the World is acting a little crazy.....beautiful words....as usual...loved this.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Hi Gypsy
This is such an apt read for me, only yesterday I had two doves at my feet as I sat at a park bench and I was thinking of their significance as birds of peace, especially of late as the World is acting a little crazy.....beautiful words....as usual...loved this.
Mitchell
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
