Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "haiku (cherry blossoms)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
18 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow.
It's no wonder members here have dubbed you "The Queen of Haiku."
Sure, cherry trees litter the ground with their blossoms without a care in the world.
Try doing that with your trash from In and Out Burger!
But it's a lovely litter, all pinkish white and fluffy.
I loved the presentation as much as I did the wording in your lovely haiku.
It's plain to see why we are the students and you, the teacher.
Fabuloso!
Haiku Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
Wow.
It's no wonder members here have dubbed you "The Queen of Haiku."
Sure, cherry trees litter the ground with their blossoms without a care in the world.
Try doing that with your trash from In and Out Burger!
But it's a lovely litter, all pinkish white and fluffy.
I loved the presentation as much as I did the wording in your lovely haiku.
It's plain to see why we are the students and you, the teacher.
Fabuloso!
Haiku Hugs!!!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the outstanding review and six stars. Your kind words mean a lot to me.... thank you sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy; thank you for sharing your haiku about cherry blossoms. The blooms may fall without guilt, but they sure are messy if it rains! A beautiful piece which is well presented,
~patty~
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
Hi Gypsy; thank you for sharing your haiku about cherry blossoms. The blooms may fall without guilt, but they sure are messy if it rains! A beautiful piece which is well presented,
~patty~
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend this again is well written and has beautiful imagery of cherry blossom scattered across the ground well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
Oh yes my friend this again is well written and has beautiful imagery of cherry blossom scattered across the ground well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Marykelly
This poem creates a lovely image of petals falling to the ground. The tongue-in-cheek conclusion is delightful since the tree has no remorse for littering.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
This poem creates a lovely image of petals falling to the ground. The tongue-in-cheek conclusion is delightful since the tree has no remorse for littering.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-all the technical aspects of this haiku were met, including two grammatically connected lines, a kigo as "cherry blossoms" And a wonderful satori as "guilt free".
-All is written in the present tense and offers a freshness a unique innocent presence that is reflected as the conceptual theme of the haiku.
-The pictures absolutely brilliant and presentation and color and very appropriate for this haiku.
-I liked it very much and thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
Cheers, Gypsy;
-all the technical aspects of this haiku were met, including two grammatically connected lines, a kigo as "cherry blossoms" And a wonderful satori as "guilt free".
-All is written in the present tense and offers a freshness a unique innocent presence that is reflected as the conceptual theme of the haiku.
-The pictures absolutely brilliant and presentation and color and very appropriate for this haiku.
-I liked it very much and thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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thank you very much for the review and kind words
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You are very welcome, Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from Ric Myworld
I always enjoy how you are able sway this reader's mind in one direction, then, snap my thoughts to the opposite with your closing line. Thanks for sharing another fine poem. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
I always enjoy how you are able sway this reader's mind in one direction, then, snap my thoughts to the opposite with your closing line. Thanks for sharing another fine poem. :-)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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thank you very much for the review and kind words
Comment from Lindagail Hall
This reminds me of the road I live on in London my road is full of cherry blossoms I love it when they are in full bloom, yet hate that when they blow the blossom off it enters my hallway in my home and covers my car, also it means Autumn and winter are around the corner. Love your word choice it's flows just as the blossoms do leaving trails on the. Pavements and roads.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
This reminds me of the road I live on in London my road is full of cherry blossoms I love it when they are in full bloom, yet hate that when they blow the blossom off it enters my hallway in my home and covers my car, also it means Autumn and winter are around the corner. Love your word choice it's flows just as the blossoms do leaving trails on the. Pavements and roads.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
guilt free... I wonder who is guilt free, the blossoms or the person responsible for raking the yard? I guess it is open to conjecture. Some great images for the mind in this one I think, Gypsy, Giddy
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
guilt free... I wonder who is guilt free, the blossoms or the person responsible for raking the yard? I guess it is open to conjecture. Some great images for the mind in this one I think, Gypsy, Giddy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Joan E.
Cherry blossoms seem to be the perfect subject for a haiku. I enjoyed your 4-8-2 version with the addition of alliteration and the thought-provoking satori. The picture you selected and your color presentation are lovely as well.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
Cherry blossoms seem to be the perfect subject for a haiku. I enjoyed your 4-8-2 version with the addition of alliteration and the thought-provoking satori. The picture you selected and your color presentation are lovely as well.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from DR DIP
cherry blossoms appear to be a very integral part as a subject of haiku i am seeing gypsy. I like the intent and meaning one can convey from this haiku thankyou for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
cherry blossoms appear to be a very integral part as a subject of haiku i am seeing gypsy. I like the intent and meaning one can convey from this haiku thankyou for sharing
dip
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy