Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "haiku (from soft sandy shores)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
37 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This is really lovely, Dean. Even without the picture, I can feel and hear and see the sparkling, shimmering sea and the soft sand and the reflection of the stars on the waters.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
This is really lovely, Dean. Even without the picture, I can feel and hear and see the sparkling, shimmering sea and the soft sand and the reflection of the stars on the waters.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading, lyenochka. That's what I was hoping for, the type of reaction you've described in your review.
Much appreciated.
~Dean
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this is such a fairytale haiku, Dean. Expertly done from a technical standpoint. Two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery in lines 1 and 2 and a soft, dream-like satori in line 3. Great S alliteration in lines 1 and 2.
I absolutely loved the picture! It draws the reader in. I love pictures of the night sea, and it really appeased me. Where did you find it?
A wonderful contribution to the site's book, thank you for your collaboration.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
Oh, this is such a fairytale haiku, Dean. Expertly done from a technical standpoint. Two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery in lines 1 and 2 and a soft, dream-like satori in line 3. Great S alliteration in lines 1 and 2.
I absolutely loved the picture! It draws the reader in. I love pictures of the night sea, and it really appeased me. Where did you find it?
A wonderful contribution to the site's book, thank you for your collaboration.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Yelena.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)
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Dean, my review was cut short. I don't which version you read. I went back and edited it - look again. So sorry, it happens sometimes on the site.
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Yeah, I got the shorter version of your review the first time, lol.
The animation came from my Photobucket library. I keep several such gifs on hand for a variety of different writing reasons and genres.
Like the following, for instance:
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Look at the latest offering in my portfolio - it's short, will give you a good chuckle.
Comment from sunnilicious
Wonderful S-word alliteration. It forces the satori memorable. Well thought out and nicely written. Colorful. Romantic. And such a nice haiku member you are... I hope your cliche appreciates you for the shout-outs and more...
And I'm out of 6ers, but this is very deserving.
Have a nice week :)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
Wonderful S-word alliteration. It forces the satori memorable. Well thought out and nicely written. Colorful. Romantic. And such a nice haiku member you are... I hope your cliche appreciates you for the shout-outs and more...
And I'm out of 6ers, but this is very deserving.
Have a nice week :)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Yes, we all pitch in together to promote the club. It's a team effort.
Thanks for your thoughtful review of my haiku for this weeks challenge, Alicia.
I very much appreciate it.
~Dean :)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Dean, A haiku that beautifully illustrates the essence and feeling of a night beneath the stars along a sandy shore.
Good alliteration and descriptive writing:
soft sandy shores
stars shines/shimmering seas.
After reading your poem, I heard a little tune by Acker Bilk playing "Strangers On The Shore."
Just lovely. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
Hello Dean, A haiku that beautifully illustrates the essence and feeling of a night beneath the stars along a sandy shore.
Good alliteration and descriptive writing:
soft sandy shores
stars shines/shimmering seas.
After reading your poem, I heard a little tune by Acker Bilk playing "Strangers On The Shore."
Just lovely. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading, 'Bloomer.
I'm glad you enjoyed my haiku.
Much appreciated. :)
Comment from thonnigford09
Dean, I loved this poem. Lots of alliteration. Wonderful art. I love alliteration. Perfect. Thx and I would recommend this. The poem was so descriptive that your senses come to life. Thx Theresa.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
Dean, I loved this poem. Lots of alliteration. Wonderful art. I love alliteration. Perfect. Thx and I would recommend this. The poem was so descriptive that your senses come to life. Thx Theresa.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Theresa. That was exactly what I was hoping to hear after writing this haiku.
I appreciate you, your time, and the generous six stars.
All my best,
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No problem Dean. 🙂
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Dean; I absolutely love this haiku. Your presentation and words were very soothing, and the kigo was well understood from the sparkle of the water (at least to me.) Well done, as always,
~patty~
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
Hi Dean; I absolutely love this haiku. Your presentation and words were very soothing, and the kigo was well understood from the sparkle of the water (at least to me.) Well done, as always,
~patty~
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading my weekly haiku challenge submission, Patty.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Have a lovely week.
~Dean
Comment from artemis53
This is beautiful, Dean and I'm amazed how you tied it together with the stars giving warmth to the cold sea. This is one of the prettiest haikus I've ever read.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
This is beautiful, Dean and I'm amazed how you tied it together with the stars giving warmth to the cold sea. This is one of the prettiest haikus I've ever read.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Diane.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
~Dean
Comment from Rasmine
Hello again, Dean,
I was away for two days. Now I'm paying for it, but I had to get away and talk to other friends.
I love the middle part and your Satori is relaxing.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
Hello again, Dean,
I was away for two days. Now I'm paying for it, but I had to get away and talk to other friends.
I love the middle part and your Satori is relaxing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thanks for checking my haiku out.
I appreciate it.
~Dean
Comment from Aussie
Loved your Haiku, especially on moonlight nights when the stars and the moon show wonderful reflections on still water. Well done my friend. ****** six virtual stars.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
Loved your Haiku, especially on moonlight nights when the stars and the moon show wonderful reflections on still water. Well done my friend. ****** six virtual stars.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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I'm glad you enjoyed my haiku weekly challenge submission, Kay.
Six or no six, I always appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me about my writing.
Enjoy the rest of your weekend, my dear.
~Dean :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Dean,
This is a great haiku. The art is awesome. Your words flow well & the lines are connected as required. The satori makes great sense. I like the alliteration of 's'. Your haiku is a complete package--the words = the art make a memorable read. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
Dean,
This is a great haiku. The art is awesome. Your words flow well & the lines are connected as required. The satori makes great sense. I like the alliteration of 's'. Your haiku is a complete package--the words = the art make a memorable read. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading, Jan.
Enjoy your weekend.
~Dean