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Haiku Club Challenges, Book II

Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haiku (red rose of love)"
an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets

18 total reviews 
Comment from honeytree
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The art work is great
for these words written.
I loved reading these words
so much in every way.
Great Haiku.

Honeytree

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
    Thanks so much:)
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Tab,

You sure have been writing some nice poems lately. This is another nice one.
I haven't been on here for awhile lately. I hope I can start writing poems again.

Kat

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
    Thank you Kat:)
reply by MizKat on 30-Jul-2017
    You're welcome.
Comment from Ulla
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Ohh Teresa, this is a bitter sweet haiku. Yeah, from passionate love to nothing. Love eventually wilts away, and then it hurts. Wonderful. I love the contrast of red and white. Well done. All the best

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017
    Thank you Ulla:)
Comment from BOO ghost
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Sure see a lot of sixes up there. He --he. Maybe the red rose fading to white represents an Omen. Spiritual or figuratively. Every rose has a thorn. With beauty comes danger! We must fight and stay alive! take what precious breath we got right now for no one knows when we wil wilt like the rose. Lets live for now like it is out last day on Earth and who knows, it could be. White can be spiritual. death can bring new life that is everlasting and does not wilt, the immortal souls lives for eternity if we believe in Him ans pray for his blessings and forgiveness. Maybe things are meant to be, just keep hope for death is the beginning for some.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017
    Thank you Boo. Sorry I'm not following your story. If you write poetry, I'll review, just don't have time right now to do justice for a book.
Comment from Joan E.
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I admired the extreme contrasts between the "red" and "white" and "love" and the "thorn" in this 4-5-4 haiku. The reader is left to imagine the poignant backstory. Sighs- Joan

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017
    Thank you Joan:)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Yes my friend this is well written and full of imagery a good addition for this book I enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017
    Thank you Jill:)
Comment from kathleenspalding
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Ooooooo! Great (and dark, LOL) haiku tells a story using very few words and looks like an excellent entry in the Flowers chapter. Very nice visual presentation with excellent choice of artwork and colors. Great job!

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017
    lol. Thank you Kathleen:)
reply by kathleenspalding on 26-Jul-2017
    You're welcome
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Wow I like this one. The first two lines of imagery are very pronounced...red rose of love, wilts ad fades to white. then the satori...thorn pricks too deep. As a lost love would do.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    Thank you Barb. Roses always remind me of my ex. When he bought me flowers - always roses - I preferred wildflowers, sunflowers, daisies, lilies, etc. I told him if he was going to get me roses I preferred yellow ones. Rarely did I get flowers but they were almost always red roses. They bring back bad memories:(
reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 25-Jul-2017
    LOL no yellow ones????
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    I suppose I could handle yellow ones but still prefer daisies, etc. and those are what Rebecca brings me:)
reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 25-Jul-2017
    I prefer wildflowers, they don't last long out of God's setting, but they are nature's finest.lol
Comment from Sasha
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Excellent work with this. The first two lines connect perfectly and the satori is superb. The red rose bled out... unique concept and a terrific entry for this book. I wish you all the best. I enjoyed this one very much.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    Thank you Sasha:)
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi Teresa

= Spot-on with this write.
= Good entry for the prompt.
= Good luck in the contest. Hope you win.

= Due to company coming from England, and other friends, all due in August, I'll be very busy and unable to post. BUT, I will be back in September with all new chapters and poetry.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers <> Jax / Jackie

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    I'll miss you. Have a great time though and we'll see you back in September:) Thanks.