Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

In last note - "winters" should be "winter's" to show the observations belong to the winter.

No better life than living on a farm as this well written poem depicts.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Thanks Brett

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Exceptional

A wonderful descriptive write filled with information to give to the reader and stroke the senses and paint a beautiful picture, a joy to read, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Thanks Dolly, you are too kind.
Have a great day.
Regards.
Kev

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I do believe you have included all the workings of the farm and the world as it awakens to life of the day. I am a farm girl and the farmer approaching does indeed make the farm come alive. Nice free verse with occasional rhyme

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Thanks so much Barb

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I know all about life on the farm, Kev.
I live on one.
You shift rhyme schemes frequently here going back and forth between a sort of a,b,a,b scheme to an a,a,b,b.
I'm not even sure if you're aware that you're doing it.

For example:
"The northerly wind sweeps the plain (a)
Wakens the trees limbs and leaves (b)
The roses in bloom release champagne (a)
An attract lots of roving honey bees (b)"

Then...

"Foals and mares prance in the Lucerne paddock (a)
Awakening muscles to burn off a full stomach (a)
As a tiger snake moves in for a strike (b)
On a young plover, the ones they like (b)" --this is written in aabb...

The scenery here you've described and depicted vividly enough. It is the sort of things I have the pleasure of seeing each and every morning of every brand new day.
Nicely done...

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Yes Dean others have pointed this out to me. I know I should get the gist of this ab ba but hey I just write to please me. In saying that I am still learning to be a poet, maybe a slow learner.
Cheers and thanks for your review and comments I will take them on board, cheers, Kev

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Cool observations.

My favorite stanza:
Rabbits run around and around on the grassy dew (I love bunnies!)
Down the path (comma) the ants form and (an) endless que
Lambs search and bother mom for milk (so cute)
The spiders inspect their lunch wrapped in silk (yummy)

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Thanks Rasmine for your review and comments.
Cheers, Kev

Comment from Natali Holden

Excellent

I like the picture. I only spotted one mistake. In the fifth stanza at the bottom, "An attract lots of roving honey bees". Is it supposed to be and or an at the beginning? From this poem, I can tell you are observant. Beautiful poem!
Natali ;)

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017

Natali thanks for reviewing my poem and picking up the mistake, you are a gem.
Have a great day.
Cheers, Kev

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

The poet has penned a very enjoyable work, taking the reader on a stroll through the farmyard. Some beautiful lines here - none better than the opening line, "A winking of the day to come." Perfect!

A bit of a nit here: the poet changes the rhyme pattern from ABAB to AABB midway through the work, although it doesn't detract much from the overall enjoyment of the poem.

A lovely visit to the farm - thanks for sharing!
pf

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017

Thanks so much, cheers Kev

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Ah, morning is the most marvellous time of the day, new hope being born, the waking of nature, the animals all stirring, the vegetation with sparkling dew encrusting the verdant growth. Well done, beautifully written, the meter changes from a varied rhyming abab and aabb to an variable meter, sort of ebbing a flowing, perhaps intentional, perhaps not. But excellent descriptive narrative, with some great imagery, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : the ants form an(d) endless (que.) queue?

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thanks very much Roy for your kind words and comments.
Cheers, Kev

reply by royowen on 27-Jul-2017

Most welcome

Comment from heavenempress

Excellent

hey, that is work par excellence. you wrote it with so much passion. i personally enjoyed reading it. the poem is so embracing. cant imagine what you left out. every life on the farm, you touched on it. your description is very rich. there is a skilful display of ideas from one stanza to the other. keep it up!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thank-you for your comments and review.
Cheers, Kev

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"A Continuation, Antonym, Poem."
Poem as review...
"Sea"
By Dr. Ricky 1024

"The Many "Creatures of the Delight...
"Full Sun gleams across the Sphere's...
"Spearing Rays as Starfish bask in Bays...
...
"Sperm Whale flops the Foamy Waves...
"Of Delight illuminate the Night...
"Air Surrounds the "Sleeping Sea."
"Great Whites hunt for Seal...
"Sealed and Wandering...
"Creatures now back at...
"Your Farm...
Dr. Ricky 1024.
Great Poem here...

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thanks Dr. Ricky for your review and your lines of
yonder he looks
From the farm to the sea
As a new world irrupts
Above and beneath the sea
Cheers
kev