Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "haiku (day of the dead)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
20 total reviews
Comment from Grasshopper2
Lady Blue,
Dia de Los Muertos is 3,000 years old, still evolving, and more colorful now than ever before. The Spaniards viewed the ritual as sacrilegious, but the festival couldn't be quashed. It is like the memory of a loved one that never fades. Dia de Los Muertos may change, but it never vanishes. I like the nuance of line two and your satori. Fanstory software has left you a few nits: 02-Dean KuchÃ?, 19-Gaye HemsleyÃ?, 29-Ray -mountainwriter49Ã?, 36-Giddy Nielsen-SweepÃ?, and 42-Caroline -zinniaÃ?.
Michael
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Lady Blue,
Dia de Los Muertos is 3,000 years old, still evolving, and more colorful now than ever before. The Spaniards viewed the ritual as sacrilegious, but the festival couldn't be quashed. It is like the memory of a loved one that never fades. Dia de Los Muertos may change, but it never vanishes. I like the nuance of line two and your satori. Fanstory software has left you a few nits: 02-Dean KuchÃ?, 19-Gaye HemsleyÃ?, 29-Ray -mountainwriter49Ã?, 36-Giddy Nielsen-SweepÃ?, and 42-Caroline -zinniaÃ?.
Michael
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy; thank you for sharing another poem about prayer. It must be hard to express an entire thought in a haiku - at least I think so - but you manage to do it all the time.
~patty~
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Gypsy; thank you for sharing another poem about prayer. It must be hard to express an entire thought in a haiku - at least I think so - but you manage to do it all the time.
~patty~
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Ricky1024
Hi Darling Gypsy Blue Rose,
This is a "Haiku" done in the honor of love and religion.
Nicely penned with fine Theme and Imagery.
The Alter picture is very special.
Thanks and have a good day!
Ricky...
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Hi Darling Gypsy Blue Rose,
This is a "Haiku" done in the honor of love and religion.
Nicely penned with fine Theme and Imagery.
The Alter picture is very special.
Thanks and have a good day!
Ricky...
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-Do you know, that at first I understood this with him misconstrued the. Because when you wrote in the second line "altar were I pray for mine - -", I was asking myself, pray for what? That's when you speak of the word mine. Mine what?
But then I understood it as it's a prayer for love.
-I was overwhelmed by the actual powerfulness of the conceptual theme in this haiku. In this holy ritual, prayer, where you use this for love, is a very dramatically artistic and passionate love that's both romantically displayed both in your heart, your mind, and your soul through the use of prayer.
-Great to grammatically connected lines are given support by wonderful satori that gives that excitement the spontaneity which involves an aha moment that makes the conceptual theme readily understandable.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you love dearly.
Alex
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-Do you know, that at first I understood this with him misconstrued the. Because when you wrote in the second line "altar were I pray for mine - -", I was asking myself, pray for what? That's when you speak of the word mine. Mine what?
But then I understood it as it's a prayer for love.
-I was overwhelmed by the actual powerfulness of the conceptual theme in this haiku. In this holy ritual, prayer, where you use this for love, is a very dramatically artistic and passionate love that's both romantically displayed both in your heart, your mind, and your soul through the use of prayer.
-Great to grammatically connected lines are given support by wonderful satori that gives that excitement the spontaneity which involves an aha moment that makes the conceptual theme readily understandable.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you love dearly.
Alex
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
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Your sincerely welcome, Gypsy. And take care and have a good one especially with your family and friends.
Alex
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate.
A very impressive little piece indeed and the picture sets it off nicely.
I'm impressed about the first book... well done and congrats. If I had more time and knew how to write one I'd join... but alas, I can't at present.
Good luck with it all.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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G'day mate.
A very impressive little piece indeed and the picture sets it off nicely.
I'm impressed about the first book... well done and congrats. If I had more time and knew how to write one I'd join... but alas, I can't at present.
Good luck with it all.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, mate.
Cheers
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent job with this haiku, Teach.
I've learned through researching that like most things in Spain, what the nation borrows from overseas is usually adjusted and transformed into something of their own, not to mention each region puts its personal stamp on it. The same goes with Halloween, which is clearly not an American affair in Spain. It doesn't have the pomp and hype as in the US, but rather a traditional feel which sets it apart from most European countries.
Better known as El Dia de los Muertos (Day of the Dead or All Souls Day), Halloween in Spain is a three-day celebration that kicks off on October 31st with Dia de las Brujas (Day of the Witches), continues with Dia de Todos los Santos (All Saints Day) on November 1st, and culminates with Dia de los Muertos on November 2nd.
Now THAT's what I call a celebratory event!
Thanks for including what your kigo is based upon so I wouldn't have to go looking.
Great work with this, darlin'!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Excellent job with this haiku, Teach.
I've learned through researching that like most things in Spain, what the nation borrows from overseas is usually adjusted and transformed into something of their own, not to mention each region puts its personal stamp on it. The same goes with Halloween, which is clearly not an American affair in Spain. It doesn't have the pomp and hype as in the US, but rather a traditional feel which sets it apart from most European countries.
Better known as El Dia de los Muertos (Day of the Dead or All Souls Day), Halloween in Spain is a three-day celebration that kicks off on October 31st with Dia de las Brujas (Day of the Witches), continues with Dia de Todos los Santos (All Saints Day) on November 1st, and culminates with Dia de los Muertos on November 2nd.
Now THAT's what I call a celebratory event!
Thanks for including what your kigo is based upon so I wouldn't have to go looking.
Great work with this, darlin'!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Heh heh... I like your signature, darlin. Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
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You are more than welcome, my dearest. :)
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for showing us how much the Haiku Club has grown--congratulations! I admired your spiritual and prayerful, 4-7-5 haiku. Here's to love- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for showing us how much the Haiku Club has grown--congratulations! I admired your spiritual and prayerful, 4-7-5 haiku. Here's to love- Joan
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Oatmeal
Gypsy Blue Rose,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
The words you chose worked well.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Gypsy Blue Rose,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
The words you chose worked well.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Marykelly
The tone of this poem is comforting. Praying for loved ones at the altar is formally recognizing the value of praying for the dead and gives comfort to the one praying that there is still something you can do for the one who is loved but out of reach.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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The tone of this poem is comforting. Praying for loved ones at the altar is formally recognizing the value of praying for the dead and gives comfort to the one praying that there is still something you can do for the one who is loved but out of reach.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
My goodness, Gypsy, I hope these subjects lighten up soon. Even so I must admit I am exploring options I never thought I would. I have read about the day of the dead in Mexico and the way it is celebrated which sounds great. I really liked your haiku for the way it expresses your devotion. Giddy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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My goodness, Gypsy, I hope these subjects lighten up soon. Even so I must admit I am exploring options I never thought I would. I have read about the day of the dead in Mexico and the way it is celebrated which sounds great. I really liked your haiku for the way it expresses your devotion. Giddy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
