Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Haiku(hot passion)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
18 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
Ulla, I love the sensuality of your poem. You describe a hot passion that is consumed by a summer folly that never lasts. Your words are well chosen to convey a mood and a message. Thank you for sharing, and also for inspiring me to get back to writing haiku after I received my copies of Haiku Anthology yesterday!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
Ulla, I love the sensuality of your poem. You describe a hot passion that is consumed by a summer folly that never lasts. Your words are well chosen to convey a mood and a message. Thank you for sharing, and also for inspiring me to get back to writing haiku after I received my copies of Haiku Anthology yesterday!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Hi Andre, thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked it. I still haven't got my copies. I would love to have it but will probably have to wait until it's released in Europe and pay the full price. A shame. But never mind. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Well done, Ulla. Your words present an image of a passionate love affair that doesn't last. Something that happens a lot I'm afraid. I guess it is typical of a summer love, Giddy
Well done, Ulla. Your words present an image of a passionate love affair that doesn't last. Something that happens a lot I'm afraid. I guess it is typical of a summer love, Giddy
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
Comment from c_lucas
Passion is a
fairway
In Life
Enjoy the ride.
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We can't know how our life will end. There are many ways of defining the last path.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
Passion is a
fairway
In Life
Enjoy the ride.
***
We can't know how our life will end. There are many ways of defining the last path.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Charlie. You're so right. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from rjuselius
"hot passion
consumed in soulful dance
summer's folly"
this is a beautiful piece of poetry dear ulla! i especially like the second line, it is the most powerful one. the satori is great too.
thank you fir sharing!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
"hot passion
consumed in soulful dance
summer's folly"
this is a beautiful piece of poetry dear ulla! i especially like the second line, it is the most powerful one. the satori is great too.
thank you fir sharing!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2017
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Awe, thanks, rebekka. I'm so pleased. Ulla:))x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An atmospheric and delightfully colourful write conjuring up lots of hot passion in the dance and reminds me of the sexy tango, great words, love Dolly x
An atmospheric and delightfully colourful write conjuring up lots of hot passion in the dance and reminds me of the sexy tango, great words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-The imagery is good in line two
with the description of the dance.
-Satori is effective, as well.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
-Nice image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-The imagery is good in line two
with the description of the dance.
-Satori is effective, as well.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Pam. I'm very pleased you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))
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You are welcome, Ulla.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
hot passion
is consummed in their soulful dance
summer's folly
A clever use of words in this short piece, Ulla - you have more patience than me - I find writing such a short poem much harder than writing a lengthy one.
Margaret
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
hot passion
is consummed in their soulful dance
summer's folly
A clever use of words in this short piece, Ulla - you have more patience than me - I find writing such a short poem much harder than writing a lengthy one.
Margaret
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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Thanks a lot, Margaret. I just wouldn't know how to write a lengthy poem. I don't know the first thing about meter and what else. But I admit. I am fascinated with the haiku. I've been to Japan a lot, and I can see how the form fits in with their culture. Thanks again. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This is a wonderful Haiku poem.
Which describes the scene with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words
and a lovely picture to accompany
Mitchell
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
This is a wonderful Haiku poem.
Which describes the scene with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words
and a lovely picture to accompany
Mitchell
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Mitchell. I so appreciate your review. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've written a good poem.
It contains three lines with a syllable count of 3-8-4
--I've never written a 3-8-4 so I'll have to see if I can.
The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Thanks for sharing your Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Spell Check: In the second line, I think the word 'consummed' should be spelled 'consumed'- Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
You've written a good poem.
It contains three lines with a syllable count of 3-8-4
--I've never written a 3-8-4 so I'll have to see if I can.
The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Thanks for sharing your Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Spell Check: In the second line, I think the word 'consummed' should be spelled 'consumed'- Just my opinion.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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Thanks a lot, Nicole. I really appreciate it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Ulla
= I love, love the artwork you paired with this super haiku.
= They compliment each other wonderfully. Nice job.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers <> Jax / Jackie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
Hi, Ulla
= I love, love the artwork you paired with this super haiku.
= They compliment each other wonderfully. Nice job.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers <> Jax / Jackie
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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Thanks a lot Jax, so glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))