This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Veronica Has a Shock!"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Sandra,
I'm confused. You mention Elowin, but I'm having trouble figuring that name out and where that person was introduced?
No errors to mention in this chapter.
Daveth didn't tell you his da's name yet. I'm thinking it's going to be something significant.
I can picture the wheels turning in Daveths mind to try to invent indoor toilets with hot and cold running water.
I'm giving you a six for this whole story before I run out of them for the week.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi Sandra,
I'm confused. You mention Elowin, but I'm having trouble figuring that name out and where that person was introduced?
No errors to mention in this chapter.
Daveth didn't tell you his da's name yet. I'm thinking it's going to be something significant.
I can picture the wheels turning in Daveths mind to try to invent indoor toilets with hot and cold running water.
I'm giving you a six for this whole story before I run out of them for the week.
Joy xx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi, Joy, thank you so much for the 6 stars! Elowen is Daveth's five year old sister, she doesn't feature much, but she does make a small appearance now and again. Daveth and Joe are the main characters in that family, but Rosie, his mum, and Elowen will come into their own soon. Thank you, Joy, your reviews are lovely. Big hugs again. Sandra xxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
At least Daveth has some hope now of seeing his dad again. :-)
IF Veronica can pull it off again!
Which I have a feeling she will.
Nice flow to the story. :-)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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At least Daveth has some hope now of seeing his dad again. :-)
IF Veronica can pull it off again!
Which I have a feeling she will.
Nice flow to the story. :-)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Lot's of complications coming. The next three parts opens the story right up! (Just to keep you reading!! LOL) :) :) xxxxxxxxxx
Comment from Mustang Patty
It seems that there is a wormhole somewhere in this glen. I love this story about time travel! It has the feel of so many other stories - but it has its own unique twist as she is never sure where she will end up - kind of like the old show, 'Quantum Leap.'
You've built a great deal of suspense and given us information about what the mission is this time; find Daveth's Da.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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It seems that there is a wormhole somewhere in this glen. I love this story about time travel! It has the feel of so many other stories - but it has its own unique twist as she is never sure where she will end up - kind of like the old show, 'Quantum Leap.'
You've built a great deal of suspense and given us information about what the mission is this time; find Daveth's Da.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Patty. I was taking a chance writing the sequel, but it does seem to be working out fine. (at the moment!) I'm delighted you are enjoying it, that means a lot to me. Thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from mbroyles2
You are off to a grest start with this one and a deep suspense thriller is starting to develop.
Veronica has her hands full this time.
Great setting of the scene and moving the story forward.
Excellent writing!
Michael
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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You are off to a grest start with this one and a deep suspense thriller is starting to develop.
Veronica has her hands full this time.
Great setting of the scene and moving the story forward.
Excellent writing!
Michael
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Thank you so very much, Michael, for the lovely 6 stars and the wonderful review. I really appreciated your remarks, you've really made my day! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from MelB
Hi Sandra, great job on the story and dialogue. I didn't find any errors. It had to be weird for Daveth to hear about the things that will be invented in the future.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Hi Sandra, great job on the story and dialogue. I didn't find any errors. It had to be weird for Daveth to hear about the things that will be invented in the future.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for reading this part, Melissa. Yes, I have to be careful not to let him know too much!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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You're most welcome:) I'm a little behind on reviews but catching up.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Excellent job on the dialogue. An interesting and well written chapter. I'm glad you are back with us again. You were missed, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Excellent job on the dialogue. An interesting and well written chapter. I'm glad you are back with us again. You were missed, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Debbie, that was so nice of you to say that. I missed being here too. But I'm back and writing. Thank you, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Sandra. I had no idea this story would be as good as it is for me. I love how realistically you write. It has a completely believable dialog and perfect for the dialectic and time period. Kudos on this chapter. It's great! I'm coming back for more. xxoo deborah (Kiwi)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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Hi Sandra. I had no idea this story would be as good as it is for me. I love how realistically you write. It has a completely believable dialog and perfect for the dialectic and time period. Kudos on this chapter. It's great! I'm coming back for more. xxoo deborah (Kiwi)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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That is wonderful to know! Thank you so much, Deborah! You have quite made my day. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from suzterus
This was a great story! I love time travel novels. You have great description and dialogue. I found it very easy to follow along. I was able to feel the time period right away and I love the slang used, it was easy to read but still gave it the point.
Great Job!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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This was a great story! I love time travel novels. You have great description and dialogue. I found it very easy to follow along. I was able to feel the time period right away and I love the slang used, it was easy to read but still gave it the point.
Great Job!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Suzterus, for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
Another great chapter, Sandra, and one that could lead to anything! So, where has Davith's father gone? Is he in the future, or even further back in the past? I can't wait to find out!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
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Another great chapter, Sandra, and one that could lead to anything! So, where has Davith's father gone? Is he in the future, or even further back in the past? I can't wait to find out!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 15-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Alexis, for the lovely six stars! I'm afraid I can't answer that question because Veronica doesn't even know, LOL. Big hugs, my friend. xx Sandra xx
Comment from apky
A wonderful read that kept me going to find out what would happen next, not to mention the escapism. If I were Daveth (and the paragraph below gives the reader a pretty good idea about which period he lives in), I'd find it had to imagine too:
Daveth was giving me a look that told me he was still trying to work out if I was for real or not. I could see what I'd told him took a bit of digesting. I smiled and stepped closer to him. "It's all real, Daveth, and I'm real, too, you know I am. Now, just in case I get spirited away, tell me your father's name, and can you tell me what he looks like?"
Apky
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
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A wonderful read that kept me going to find out what would happen next, not to mention the escapism. If I were Daveth (and the paragraph below gives the reader a pretty good idea about which period he lives in), I'd find it had to imagine too:
Daveth was giving me a look that told me he was still trying to work out if I was for real or not. I could see what I'd told him took a bit of digesting. I smiled and stepped closer to him. "It's all real, Daveth, and I'm real, too, you know I am. Now, just in case I get spirited away, tell me your father's name, and can you tell me what he looks like?"
Apky
Comment Written 15-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you so much for this lovely review, Apky, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I hope you continue to read it, I really appreciate your support, my friend. :) Sandra xx