The Window
Can Darkness Expunge the Light?90 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
After reading this several times, the way I understand it is that you closed your mind to your weakness (fall) or bad decision; tried to block it out, but felt bad about it and realized you couldn't. Or - you tried to rationalize that something wasn't your fault, but realized it was. Rather a self awakening? I may be totally off base, here. :)
However, to me, those few words can mean a myriad of things.
I liked it.
pome lover
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
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After reading this several times, the way I understand it is that you closed your mind to your weakness (fall) or bad decision; tried to block it out, but felt bad about it and realized you couldn't. Or - you tried to rationalize that something wasn't your fault, but realized it was. Rather a self awakening? I may be totally off base, here. :)
However, to me, those few words can mean a myriad of things.
I liked it.
pome lover
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
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Of course I left the poem open-ended. It can mean anything to anyone, within certain parameters. You were definitely within them with your interpretation.
Comment from lalajovanoski
I really like this cinquain poem that you have shared with us. Composed very nicely with a good flow throughout. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing it
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I really like this cinquain poem that you have shared with us. Composed very nicely with a good flow throughout. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing it
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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THanks, Lala. I'm happy you enjoyed it. I appreciate your good wishes in the contest.
Comment from ZainaSaif
The amazing art and even better poem is a true contest winner! Your author notes are also very meaningful words towards your artist!
KEEP WRITING :)
-Zaina
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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The amazing art and even better poem is a true contest winner! Your author notes are also very meaningful words towards your artist!
KEEP WRITING :)
-Zaina
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Oh, I shall KEEP WRITING, as long as there are marvelously kind people, like yourself, saying such inspiring words. Thanks you, Zaina.
Comment from estory
I liked the dramatic breaks in the poem, and I liked how you turned the fall around on itself and made yourself the one who falls. makes this much more complicated and relevant. It implies us in the fall of another, makes us responsible. nice image in nailing down the door. estory
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I liked the dramatic breaks in the poem, and I liked how you turned the fall around on itself and made yourself the one who falls. makes this much more complicated and relevant. It implies us in the fall of another, makes us responsible. nice image in nailing down the door. estory
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Estory, thank you for your astute commentary, proof of a deep reading. I appreciate your generous rating and kind words.
Comment from nomi338
We always have the choice to view life and either remain outside what is happening or join in and become a part of what is happening. Quite obviously what we choose to do defines who we are and maybe who we will become later in life. May we never have cause to regret who we were. Excellent statement about personal responsibility.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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We always have the choice to view life and either remain outside what is happening or join in and become a part of what is happening. Quite obviously what we choose to do defines who we are and maybe who we will become later in life. May we never have cause to regret who we were. Excellent statement about personal responsibility.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Excellent interpretation, Nomi. It all boils down to a question of choice, doesn't it? And we rise or fall based on it. Thanks for your generous words and kind rating.
Comment from Halfree
Do not know dip about all the poetic forms. I statrted to look at all the forms to learn something...lost cause with me...Robert Frost and Poe still have a hold on me. Read this...thought well perhaps. Flipped past and came back. Got it the second read...good work.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Do not know dip about all the poetic forms. I statrted to look at all the forms to learn something...lost cause with me...Robert Frost and Poe still have a hold on me. Read this...thought well perhaps. Flipped past and came back. Got it the second read...good work.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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A Frost enthusiast can't be all bad! I love reading his poems, particularly his longer, story-type poems. Read them aloud. Love the man. Thanks for reading this one. Glad you went through it a second time.
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi, Jay...
I enjoyed this poem, in my identification with it on a discomforting scale. Nicely arranged with the line breaks. The flash image implied gives the human condition to observe others suffering, then quietly shut it out and pretend otherwise for a multitude of reasons. The widow allows us both to see through to and to thinly shelter from things unsavory.
For me, it's an uncomfortable examination of what that says about the self. The reminder of the courage it must take to resist that urge to hide and ignore what is just within view.
Potent thought portrayed in a short amount of time.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi, Jay...
I enjoyed this poem, in my identification with it on a discomforting scale. Nicely arranged with the line breaks. The flash image implied gives the human condition to observe others suffering, then quietly shut it out and pretend otherwise for a multitude of reasons. The widow allows us both to see through to and to thinly shelter from things unsavory.
For me, it's an uncomfortable examination of what that says about the self. The reminder of the courage it must take to resist that urge to hide and ignore what is just within view.
Potent thought portrayed in a short amount of time.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I am SOOOOOOOOOOOOO pleased you found this poem worth the time to plumb to whatever depth you found in it, then stay there long enough to ferret out a meaning (You depth-plumbing ferret!) that seemed to lead you to application beyond the scope of the poem. That gives me confidence that the time it took to write this brief glimpse into my heart was worthwhile.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
It is not enough to just observe or chronicle an event of great sadness or dark importance. If you do nothing, then you have participated in the act. You have pointed that out with a marvelous economy of words. I am not a huge fan of these small, syllable driven forms, but you have done a wonderful job of presenting just enough that the reader's mind travels several interesting paths of discovery. That is what every poet should hope for. Well done, Jay
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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It is not enough to just observe or chronicle an event of great sadness or dark importance. If you do nothing, then you have participated in the act. You have pointed that out with a marvelous economy of words. I am not a huge fan of these small, syllable driven forms, but you have done a wonderful job of presenting just enough that the reader's mind travels several interesting paths of discovery. That is what every poet should hope for. Well done, Jay
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Wendy, I don't know you, but I think I'm in love. (You're safe from being stalked, given my rusting age!) You shared the deeper, supporting, theme of the poem, while YOU weave throughout the exegesis with your kindness and generosity. Bless you, Wendy. I wish I could reward your wisdom with a "Thumbs Up" but I'm out of them. I'll do the next best thing and add you to my list for next month. (Just did it.) So, please know you are appreciated!
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Go ahead and stalk, Jay. At my age it would be a badge of honor. Bakersfield is the only thing that gives me pause. While I now live in Virginia, I was a So. Cal girl for the first 54 and I'm still a bit of a San Diego snob. The wished for thumbs up is plenty. - Wendy
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No one pauses to long in Bakersfield, Wendy. If I lived in San Diego, I'd be a snob as well. Already have your name on my list, so it's too late for any changed wishes. You deserve one and you'll get it. LOL, thanks, dear Wendy, for the followup comment and your delightful humor.
Comment from IndianaIrish
I know you like to write open-ended poetry that allows the reader to explore your words deeper and use their own experiences to share the emotions in the poem...this one is a wonderful "reader" poem, Jay. A window allows us to see out and observe, but it also shows the reflection of us in the window...and that reflection can be distorted by grief, but it tells the truth. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I know you like to write open-ended poetry that allows the reader to explore your words deeper and use their own experiences to share the emotions in the poem...this one is a wonderful "reader" poem, Jay. A window allows us to see out and observe, but it also shows the reflection of us in the window...and that reflection can be distorted by grief, but it tells the truth. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Many thanks, Karyn. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed reading this. Poetry's not my usual forte, but I must say I'm pleased with this and the previous, ABC, poems. Thanks for your kindness and generous rating.
Comment from Nika2016
It reminds me of the way people avert their eyes when confronted with the homeless and two scenarios go through the mind simultaneously: He deserves it...he must have failed....My compassion says I owe it to him to help him..
A thoughtful poem...
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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It reminds me of the way people avert their eyes when confronted with the homeless and two scenarios go through the mind simultaneously: He deserves it...he must have failed....My compassion says I owe it to him to help him..
A thoughtful poem...
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Now that's a slant on it that hadn't occurred to me. Thanks, Nika, for taking the time to read this to the appropriate level, then find alternate uses of the theme. You are kind with your words, generous with your rating.
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Welcome...:)
