The Letter
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Letter - Part Two"...a family saga
46 total reviews
Comment from Rlegel99
Glad you explained about the money amount difference. Family problems make great subjects for writing. The dialogue is believable and flows well. Like that her husband came home to help.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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Glad you explained about the money amount difference. Family problems make great subjects for writing. The dialogue is believable and flows well. Like that her husband came home to help.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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So glad you are continuing to enjoy the story. This saga was fun to write,
~patty~
Comment from kathleenspalding
Excellent chapter. You've got quite a story going on and I am SO curious about the past and future!
You've switched from first person in the first chapter to third person here, so best to go back to the first chapter & make that all third person.
...mother gone - someone....seven years ago (dash instead of comma?) but his wife...
maybe... "We haven't spoken to them since Dad's funeral... ?
Quite a few "I will"s that can be contracted to "I'll"s.
Taking his cell phone...maybe say 'Doug' instead of 'he' prepared.... (since it's a new scene?)
That's it. Hope you have lots of fun with the grandkids!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Excellent chapter. You've got quite a story going on and I am SO curious about the past and future!
You've switched from first person in the first chapter to third person here, so best to go back to the first chapter & make that all third person.
...mother gone - someone....seven years ago (dash instead of comma?) but his wife...
maybe... "We haven't spoken to them since Dad's funeral... ?
Quite a few "I will"s that can be contracted to "I'll"s.
Taking his cell phone...maybe say 'Doug' instead of 'he' prepared.... (since it's a new scene?)
That's it. Hope you have lots of fun with the grandkids!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Hi Kathleen; thank you so much for your continued support of the saga. Thank you so much for all of your notes,
~patty~
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You're welcome
Comment from mbroyles2
Interesting story with a family full of characters that could possibly cause trouble at dear old mom's memorial service.
You set the scene well and the dialogue is terrific.
Great job!
Michael
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Interesting story with a family full of characters that could possibly cause trouble at dear old mom's memorial service.
You set the scene well and the dialogue is terrific.
Great job!
Michael
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Michael; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
Comment from Patricia A. Shaw
When In laws and siblings are estranged it's not an easy thing. The daughter in law was put in a complex position to make arrangements for the funeral. I wonder why this is happening. But I thought this in the first part. The in-laws aren't taking it well. The story is very interesting and I look forward to where it will lead. Doug is being a good trooper to notify siblings after strained relationships. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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When In laws and siblings are estranged it's not an easy thing. The daughter in law was put in a complex position to make arrangements for the funeral. I wonder why this is happening. But I thought this in the first part. The in-laws aren't taking it well. The story is very interesting and I look forward to where it will lead. Doug is being a good trooper to notify siblings after strained relationships. Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
Comment from Sugar Cube1
Amazing writing! It`s very clean and very entertaining. I`m glad you told what happened in part one for those who didn't read it. I like the picture you put with it. A stamp picture is perfect for writing that is titled, "The Letter." I really did enjoy your work!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Amazing writing! It`s very clean and very entertaining. I`m glad you told what happened in part one for those who didn't read it. I like the picture you put with it. A stamp picture is perfect for writing that is titled, "The Letter." I really did enjoy your work!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Patty. I like how you put such emotional burden on your beginning of this chapter.
That next section where she is explaining everything to her I believe husband is so emotional. You have a great way of bringing out the emotions in your writes.
I certainly can see why you have an all time best on this. It is a gut wrenching scene which you handle perfectly.
Well done. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Patty. I like how you put such emotional burden on your beginning of this chapter.
That next section where she is explaining everything to her I believe husband is so emotional. You have a great way of bringing out the emotions in your writes.
I certainly can see why you have an all time best on this. It is a gut wrenching scene which you handle perfectly.
Well done. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Kiwi; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
Comment from His Grayness
Wishing I had the deserved sixth star for this compelling and excellent work. It has the great power of "grip" right from the outset and never let's go throughout so this author knows how to HOLD ON to the reader. That's really rare and very critical to any professional author. Good work and good luck! you are on a winner here! HIS GRAYNESS.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Wishing I had the deserved sixth star for this compelling and excellent work. It has the great power of "grip" right from the outset and never let's go throughout so this author knows how to HOLD ON to the reader. That's really rare and very critical to any professional author. Good work and good luck! you are on a winner here! HIS GRAYNESS.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Vance; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
Comment from thonnigford09
Patty, I really like the story you have going here. Well written. I like the way you added the intro. from the other book and part of the chapter too. Easier to review. Thanks and let me know when this continues. I would recommend it. Theresa
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Patty, I really like the story you have going here. Well written. I like the way you added the intro. from the other book and part of the chapter too. Easier to review. Thanks and let me know when this continues. I would recommend it. Theresa
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
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Thx patty intetesating story!!!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"Uh huh. Okay, I need food for forty adults and eight children. We will need some high chairs and booster chairs for the kids. Can we have round tables set up? I will need some appropriate centerpieces and nice linens. I would like an open bar and enough room for people to mingle and mill around.
"I think that will do it. Can I call you back if I think of anything else?
"Okay, great. I have your number and we have this set for next Saturday afternoon. Thank you so much for your help. Oh...one more thing, can I have a few security people? It might get rough if everyone is drinking..."
The thing I love about your writing is how you make it so real. It always sounds so authentic. Well done this is amazing Patty must catch up on more of your work been a bit lax last few days xx
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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"Uh huh. Okay, I need food for forty adults and eight children. We will need some high chairs and booster chairs for the kids. Can we have round tables set up? I will need some appropriate centerpieces and nice linens. I would like an open bar and enough room for people to mingle and mill around.
"I think that will do it. Can I call you back if I think of anything else?
"Okay, great. I have your number and we have this set for next Saturday afternoon. Thank you so much for your help. Oh...one more thing, can I have a few security people? It might get rough if everyone is drinking..."
The thing I love about your writing is how you make it so real. It always sounds so authentic. Well done this is amazing Patty must catch up on more of your work been a bit lax last few days xx
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Meia; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~
Comment from lalajovanoski
I really found this piece to be quite interesting with a lot of emotional pulls. Pretty deep and gss good construction. I must read the next chapter to this. I'll look for it
Thanks for sharing this
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I really found this piece to be quite interesting with a lot of emotional pulls. Pretty deep and gss good construction. I must read the next chapter to this. I'll look for it
Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading this crazy saga. Part three is now available and I will conclude it with Part Four at the end of the week,
~patty~