Tree Climber
Iambic pentameter blank verse.70 total reviews
Comment from Leena
What a lovely and interesting poem! Thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It was more like an experience I myself had( of climbing trees in childhood) and just relived through your verse. Great work.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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What a lovely and interesting poem! Thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It was more like an experience I myself had( of climbing trees in childhood) and just relived through your verse. Great work.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Leena, for your generous review of my most interesting poem. I am glad you enjoyed reading it and that it brought back childhood, tree climbing memories.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I can just imagine the pleasure you had climbing that tree, I was a bit of a Tom-boy, always climbing trees and tearing my dresses. LOL. I really enjoyed your poem, it was lovely and brought back so many of my memories. Well done, my friend, you tell them so well. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I can just imagine the pleasure you had climbing that tree, I was a bit of a Tom-boy, always climbing trees and tearing my dresses. LOL. I really enjoyed your poem, it was lovely and brought back so many of my memories. Well done, my friend, you tell them so well. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for your review. A lot of reviewers like you said my poem brought back childhood memories of tree climbing. I am glad you had a pleasurable read.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Sis. You are indeed the teller of tales! I drifted right along with you climbing bare and then climbing back into spring and beyond. This is clever beautiful writing. Loved it! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Hello Sis. You are indeed the teller of tales! I drifted right along with you climbing bare and then climbing back into spring and beyond. This is clever beautiful writing. Loved it! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Kiwi, for your review. When I rediscovered the picture in an old family photo album, I was stunned that it depicted my brother and me climbing the plum tree in full bloom. My poem captured the moment. Thank you for climbing with me.
Comment from FxstsLisa
Interesting fantastic poem! I also learned something new today (looked up the unstressed/stressed syllables). I love how you explain childhood memories; remembered ones as well as faded and forgotten. Lastly, I loved the ending line "Could he imagine he could climb this far"? Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Interesting fantastic poem! I also learned something new today (looked up the unstressed/stressed syllables). I love how you explain childhood memories; remembered ones as well as faded and forgotten. Lastly, I loved the ending line "Could he imagine he could climb this far"? Beautifully done!
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you for your review of my beautifully done, fantastic poem! I appreciate it. Yes, learning about stressed and unstressed syllables was a revelation.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Andre,
I admire anyone who can write blank verse well. That is one style I can't imagine myself tackling anytime soon. You have excellent use of alliteration, onomatopoeia, and enjambment in this piece. I also appreciated your use of strong repetitive words; recall, imagine.
All of these elements make this an exceptional piece. This is my favorite stanza:
Forever free, forever young, the boy
within a black-and-white memento plays.
How often he appears apart from me.
Could he imagine I would climb this far?
What strong images you evoke in the mind in the reader of you as a little boy. The photograph taken by your mother is a nice touch and I love that you have done this piece in black, white, and gray.
Awesome work! Thanks for sharing! :)
Kim
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Hi Andre,
I admire anyone who can write blank verse well. That is one style I can't imagine myself tackling anytime soon. You have excellent use of alliteration, onomatopoeia, and enjambment in this piece. I also appreciated your use of strong repetitive words; recall, imagine.
All of these elements make this an exceptional piece. This is my favorite stanza:
Forever free, forever young, the boy
within a black-and-white memento plays.
How often he appears apart from me.
Could he imagine I would climb this far?
What strong images you evoke in the mind in the reader of you as a little boy. The photograph taken by your mother is a nice touch and I love that you have done this piece in black, white, and gray.
Awesome work! Thanks for sharing! :)
Kim
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Kim, for your generous review of my first blank verse poem. In my experience, they are harder to write than rhymed poems which sometimes encourages over reliance upon the rhymes at the end of the line while the other nine syllables are a mess. Without rhymes, it encouraged me to use other poetical tools, as you have noted. I am glad you favored the last stanza the most. I wrote that last.
Thanks again for your review.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Sis,
I am so happy that I have sixer remaining for this poetic art. The poem offers much imagery (in sound, in sight and in touch) and nostalgia from childhood days. Also, I like your unique phrasing.
I think you need a comma after play in the second stanza. I am unsure since I am not a SPAG expert.
Thank you so much for the syllable link. What a great site for metrical poets. I normally use rhyme zone for my metered poems for rhymes, but I never used syllable link.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Sis,
I am so happy that I have sixer remaining for this poetic art. The poem offers much imagery (in sound, in sight and in touch) and nostalgia from childhood days. Also, I like your unique phrasing.
I think you need a comma after play in the second stanza. I am unsure since I am not a SPAG expert.
Thank you so much for the syllable link. What a great site for metrical poets. I normally use rhyme zone for my metered poems for rhymes, but I never used syllable link.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Poetic Friend, for your generous, six star review of my poem that offers much imagery and unique phrasing.
I found How Many Syllables immensely helpful for pointing out the stresses in words. I'll check out rhyme zone.
Thanks again for your review.
Comment from Annie_ Stone
That was a nice poem. It is always interesting to read bio's of other's, to see where they have been, to who they become. Thanks for letting us read it. Annie
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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That was a nice poem. It is always interesting to read bio's of other's, to see where they have been, to who they become. Thanks for letting us read it. Annie
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Annie, for your review. I am glad I shared my biographical poem with you!
Comment from Rasmine
When you are playing, you invent -- I know I did. You forget life for awhile.
This brings back memories of kids shooting bebe guns at our house. My grandmother almost got hit in the face. That was a scary time. I remember being paralyzed with fear. (Later on, these two punk kids admitted it was them. I didn't say anything because it might happen again. They could have said they were sorry, but they were children.)
Hey, TC, SisCat
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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When you are playing, you invent -- I know I did. You forget life for awhile.
This brings back memories of kids shooting bebe guns at our house. My grandmother almost got hit in the face. That was a scary time. I remember being paralyzed with fear. (Later on, these two punk kids admitted it was them. I didn't say anything because it might happen again. They could have said they were sorry, but they were children.)
Hey, TC, SisCat
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, TC, for your generous review of my poem. The arsons who set fire to our porch were kids who suffered no consequences for it. We know they did it. I am glad my poem sparked your own bittersweet childhood memories.
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Kids do the most damn, dangerous things. I think they should have consequences. I hope their parents did something, cause things could have got a lot worse.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An excellent blank verse piece as I see none repeated as rhymes.
You took us through climbing and added memories of the past, then concluded with who you have become today. Nice progression and a great way to learn more about my friend
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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An excellent blank verse piece as I see none repeated as rhymes.
You took us through climbing and added memories of the past, then concluded with who you have become today. Nice progression and a great way to learn more about my friend
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Barb, for your review. I am glad my blank versed earned the praise of a talented poet such as yourself.
Comment from Dean Kuch
For all intents and purposes and as far as I can tell, this is a well composed blank verse piece chronicling your childhood memoirs, Andre.
The iambic pentameter is in good form.
The imagery used (not to mention the language) is easy to visualize and comprehend.
A powerfully poignant poetic proclamation portraying, primarily, the innocence of youth, and some of the pitfalls that we, as children, have absolutely no control over whatsoever.
Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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For all intents and purposes and as far as I can tell, this is a well composed blank verse piece chronicling your childhood memoirs, Andre.
The iambic pentameter is in good form.
The imagery used (not to mention the language) is easy to visualize and comprehend.
A powerfully poignant poetic proclamation portraying, primarily, the innocence of youth, and some of the pitfalls that we, as children, have absolutely no control over whatsoever.
Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dean, for your review of my first blank verse. Anyone can write a nostalgic poem about childhood, but what made the poem poignant for me was that I included the pitfalls. Thanks again for your review.
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It's entirely my pleasure, Andre.
Have a great day.
~Dean
