If I Had Only Listened
Only One Was Talking21 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved your words as they are so profound, sometimes we have to listen to truly get the picture and be aware of the situation, often we are in our own world. Great flow here and spoton rhymes too, I wish you luck with the contest,love Dolly x
I loved your words as they are so profound, sometimes we have to listen to truly get the picture and be aware of the situation, often we are in our own world. Great flow here and spoton rhymes too, I wish you luck with the contest,love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-May-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
But as we talked, I realized,
I heard but just one voice.
I wondered, also, how it was
That it had been my choice!
Suddenly, it came to me
So simply making sense:
I was doin' all the talkin'
While you just walked the fence.
If I had only listened
When I heard no sound from you,
If I had only listened
I'd have known that we were through.
We all do this I think, bury our heads an hope all will work out. Sadly it rarely does. Very good work kindest regards Meia x
But as we talked, I realized,
I heard but just one voice.
I wondered, also, how it was
That it had been my choice!
Suddenly, it came to me
So simply making sense:
I was doin' all the talkin'
While you just walked the fence.
If I had only listened
When I heard no sound from you,
If I had only listened
I'd have known that we were through.
We all do this I think, bury our heads an hope all will work out. Sadly it rarely does. Very good work kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 03-May-2017
Comment from alf collier
Great write here, the words convey musicality, and the progression of verses brings logic to the flow. I really enjoyed reading your lines, and wonder what genre you were thinking in as you wrote!! Bravo!!
Great write here, the words convey musicality, and the progression of verses brings logic to the flow. I really enjoyed reading your lines, and wonder what genre you were thinking in as you wrote!! Bravo!!
Comment Written 03-May-2017
Comment from oliver818
I really like your song lyrics. I can really imagine someone singing this, it's really nice. I love the line about one person doing all the talking while the other person walked the fence.
I really like your song lyrics. I can really imagine someone singing this, it's really nice. I love the line about one person doing all the talking while the other person walked the fence.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Selina Stambi
I was doin' all the talkin'
While you just walked the fence. ... love the lines.
Hey mystery writer,
I sort of heard a tune in my head. Great job.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali xx
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I was doin' all the talkin'
While you just walked the fence. ... love the lines.
Hey mystery writer,
I sort of heard a tune in my head. Great job.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali xx
Our future( punctuation mark not required here) I had seen.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good contest entry. I write a lot of songs. I've written forty that haven't been posted yet. I have too many short stories that come first.
A very good contest entry. I write a lot of songs. I've written forty that haven't been posted yet. I have too many short stories that come first.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Poet:
I enjoyed your refrain, which is such an important element in a lyric piece. It was simple and catchy, I could hear it as a country song. For a full song I'm thinking that it might need one or two more stanzas, but really it is excellent as a short song. Good luck in the contest!
Kim
Hi Poet:
I enjoyed your refrain, which is such an important element in a lyric piece. It was simple and catchy, I could hear it as a country song. For a full song I'm thinking that it might need one or two more stanzas, but really it is excellent as a short song. Good luck in the contest!
Kim
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from mkflood
Intersecting lyrics. Yeah I can see a good song from this one. I do thank you for selecting my work. It does work well together. It is an honor to have my work included with yours. Great job and thanks again...mkflood
Intersecting lyrics. Yeah I can see a good song from this one. I do thank you for selecting my work. It does work well together. It is an honor to have my work included with yours. Great job and thanks again...mkflood
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from nuthead
This is really good. With a good message.
This stanza brought it all together with a punch. The realization was felt strongly. Especially the first two lines. Wow. So true.
If I had only listened
When I heard no sound from you,
If I had only listened
I'd have known that we were through.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme work well. Would love to hear this sung, with accompanying tunes.
Good job!
This is really good. With a good message.
This stanza brought it all together with a punch. The realization was felt strongly. Especially the first two lines. Wow. So true.
If I had only listened
When I heard no sound from you,
If I had only listened
I'd have known that we were through.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme work well. Would love to hear this sung, with accompanying tunes.
Good job!
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very well-written song lyrics. When two people meet for the first time. They do not always take notice of the other's reactions and just assume the other feel the same and it's a match make in heaven.
Very well-written song lyrics. When two people meet for the first time. They do not always take notice of the other's reactions and just assume the other feel the same and it's a match make in heaven.
Comment Written 02-May-2017