Comment from nordicgirl

Exceptional

This has my vote. Love dree verse, no worries abput form. Very optimistic and thought provoking too. This has my vote. NG

Lots of rhyme, I notice and rhthm too. A long time ago ypu dod not have thst. I like it.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a very well expressed poem on daring to take a chance on love--(that's the way I'm interpreting your lines)--for reticent love may lose out by not declaring self. To me, this is the pivot point in your poem--when love overcomes fear:
"here we go
for this could surely be the
knell of death chimed
loud and clear
but I'm feeling good
I overcame the fear"
Well done. Marilyn

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Beautiful poem and thought, "Before Never"

I looked for you

but you did not happen by
you tarried coyly
at the thought of what I'd do
if my facade
had taken leave and left me

old

and not so bold....
These are my favorite words but all of the words are so rightly in place. It is a special poem and anyone who fall in love with it.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

A fine free verse poem with scattered rhymes. It flows well with the argument the narrator makes:

I looked for you
 
but you did not happen by
you tarried coyly
perhaps amused
at the thought of what I'd do
if my façade
had taken leave and left me
 
old
 
and not so bold

I do not know if this couple will have a future together, The narrator is also concerned about the relationship with oneself:

I'll find out if there's ever
any sense 
or recompense
for being me

Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2017