Spring on Tour
Spring is the rock star of seasons.19 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Love the analogy of Spring as a rock star. The lines are clever and the framework simple, yet descriptive. Each connection to an actual performance made me smile. I particularly liked the notes floating like pollen, landing everywhere. - Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Love the analogy of Spring as a rock star. The lines are clever and the framework simple, yet descriptive. Each connection to an actual performance made me smile. I particularly liked the notes floating like pollen, landing everywhere. - Wendy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Thank you for finding and reviewing this poem. I must admit it was fun to write.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Marykelly, I really enjoyed reading your poem. It made me smile. I like your analogy of spring to a concert on tour. Of special note:
Songbirds sing backup,
woodpecker plays the drums.
Notes float like pollen
landing everywhere.
(Great imagery. I can see; I can hear it.)
I also liked:
Spring's concert is the best,
she deserves a Grammy.
(Indeed she does.)
My only suggestion for improvement would be here:
makes the place even better.
(Suggestion ... something with a little more imagery, e.g.
her chill fills the air -- just my humble opinion.)
A timely poem to welcome spring.
"Free verse is free-flow from the heart ~ LateBloomer.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LB
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Hello Marykelly, I really enjoyed reading your poem. It made me smile. I like your analogy of spring to a concert on tour. Of special note:
Songbirds sing backup,
woodpecker plays the drums.
Notes float like pollen
landing everywhere.
(Great imagery. I can see; I can hear it.)
I also liked:
Spring's concert is the best,
she deserves a Grammy.
(Indeed she does.)
My only suggestion for improvement would be here:
makes the place even better.
(Suggestion ... something with a little more imagery, e.g.
her chill fills the air -- just my humble opinion.)
A timely poem to welcome spring.
"Free verse is free-flow from the heart ~ LateBloomer.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LB
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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You amaze me with your details and I appreciate every word.
Comment from Irish Rain
I like spring...but...it brings summer...which I can do without...so...I wait for fall. This is a great entry for this contest, you said it all! Blessings...
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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I like spring...but...it brings summer...which I can do without...so...I wait for fall. This is a great entry for this contest, you said it all! Blessings...
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you, I always appreciate your reviews.
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You are most welcome!!
Comment from oliver818
I like this springtime poem, it catches Spring beautifully. I especially like the last line about giving spring a Grammy, haha very clever. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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I like this springtime poem, it catches Spring beautifully. I especially like the last line about giving spring a Grammy, haha very clever. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your detailed review and positive comments.
Comment from nuthead
Fantastic personification of Spring. Love this clever poem. A graceful, perfumed diva on tour, indeed, with backup singers and band, screaming fans! Deserving of a Grammy for sure! Wonderful imagery and personification of birds and wind as well as Spring. And the pollen notes floating everywhere. Fabulous!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Fantastic personification of Spring. Love this clever poem. A graceful, perfumed diva on tour, indeed, with backup singers and band, screaming fans! Deserving of a Grammy for sure! Wonderful imagery and personification of birds and wind as well as Spring. And the pollen notes floating everywhere. Fabulous!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your enthusiasm.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem, making Spring the rockstar season who goes out there and entertain everyone who likes to join in the bursts of color and hear the bird choirs sing.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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A very well-written poem, making Spring the rockstar season who goes out there and entertain everyone who likes to join in the bursts of color and hear the bird choirs sing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for expressing your appreciation of this poem.
Comment from Bill Schott
This spring poem, Spring On Tour, takes us through all the senses to experience the spring ambience that we may have forgotten since last year. One one correction would be that -- I -- an Spring's biggest fan.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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This spring poem, Spring On Tour, takes us through all the senses to experience the spring ambience that we may have forgotten since last year. One one correction would be that -- I -- an Spring's biggest fan.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the detailed review and heads up.
Comment from sunnilicious
I enjoyed your personification of Spring. Creative. Refreshing. Funny. Great visual imagery. Well thought out and nicely written. Good flow of rhythm. Some of the rhymes are forced. Overall, nice work.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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I enjoyed your personification of Spring. Creative. Refreshing. Funny. Great visual imagery. Well thought out and nicely written. Good flow of rhythm. Some of the rhymes are forced. Overall, nice work.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your attention to detail.
Comment from MLEaton
There is much beauty in your lovely poem, that evokes all those special moments of Spring. I do like the concept, but sometimes it lacks a little flow.
The weather has been so balmy over the last two days that I've been enticed into the garden to marvel at the beauty of the flowers and revel in the blossom. I hope you've had a chance to sit and enjoy the show.
Well done.
Marion :)
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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There is much beauty in your lovely poem, that evokes all those special moments of Spring. I do like the concept, but sometimes it lacks a little flow.
The weather has been so balmy over the last two days that I've been enticed into the garden to marvel at the beauty of the flowers and revel in the blossom. I hope you've had a chance to sit and enjoy the show.
Well done.
Marion :)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Spring's perfume fills the air
driving fans wild.
Evening breeze joins the crowd,
makes the place even better.
Songbirds sing backup,
woodpecker plays the drums.
Notes float like pollen
landing everywhere. ' Utterly beautiful truly a poem of wonder kidest regards and very well done Meia x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Spring's perfume fills the air
driving fans wild.
Evening breeze joins the crowd,
makes the place even better.
Songbirds sing backup,
woodpecker plays the drums.
Notes float like pollen
landing everywhere. ' Utterly beautiful truly a poem of wonder kidest regards and very well done Meia x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your enthusiasm.
