Comment from Vijay Kumar V

Excellent

Hahhah! Wow! You desrve winnning it. Those numners got so much of curiosity and finally its a good finis.
Habe a nice day

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Thank's for taking the time to read it and for the review. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Macsween,

First, the stuff about speed limits isn't true lol Top speeds in the US tend to be no more than 65 miles per hour. I haven't ever heard of there being no speed limit, in Montana or elsewhere here. Nice job on the random dialogue while they were checking the speeds of the cars.

Congrats on winning the dialogue contest.

Kim

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017

Thanks for the review and kind words.

I'm from UK so don't really know anything about speed limits in the US or any state for that matter.

It's based on a joke I heard from a cop friend.

I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from Contests

A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017

Wow. Thank you very much.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Good piece here for the competition. Clear and no confusion despite the three speakers at times. Natural sounding dialogue.

your colleagues already asked that - need an apostrophe in there. It's abbreviated for colleague has.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you for taking the time to review. Thanks for pointing out the grammar error.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hahaha...
Well, MacSween, I believe your colloquialisms might be a tad off as it pertains to dialect in the great state of Montana...or even Wyoming for that matter, lol.
Ya see, we don't say "Mum" here in the states for "mother", although we will say "Mums the word," if we plan on keepin' a secret, heh-heh.

"Cops" are not referred to as "coppers". That's usually reserved for pennies.
We call 'em: Johnny law, Local Yokels, the Fuzz (of course, that term's pretty much passe now), or the Poe-po.

Also, there are in fact speed limits in every state in our beautiful country.
Even Montana and Wyoming, believe it or not.

Good story, though. Very funny...
Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thanks Dean.

Thanks for the review.

I know the dialect is a little off for the area, I've used my own British vernacular here ask don't know how someone from the area would talk.

The story is based on a joke I heard the last time I was in America. I picked Montana and Wyoming because I like the sound of those words. I've never been there, but I'd love to visit. I usually spend time in New York and Connecticut when I'm over visiting family.

I am glad you liked it and I always appreciate your advice.

Macsween

reply by Dean Kuch on 28-Feb-2017

You bet 'cha.
You are more than welcome.
~Dean :-]

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

I am not sure of the speed limits in the us but I am sure that 95 is well over what it should be in the UK I think it would be classed as speeding well done on this write regards Jill

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written dialogue between two officers on the side of the road checking the road user's drivibg speed. When they finally catch someone exceeding the speed limit the driver thinks he is in another state.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review. Glad you liked it.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Hmmm. Your colloquialisms don't particularly work
for Montana or Wyoming. Having said that, I like the gist of your story.
Two bored Staties shootin' the shit while timing cars.
I wonder if the opening sets the scene quickly enough. This is FS, after all.

Just my thoughts.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks.

First post since November 2014. You're prob right about the colloquialisms, my UK style showing through. I'll have think.

Thanks again.

Al

Comment from pome lover

Exceptional

that is just as cute as it can be! Original and clever. a sixer in my book. When I first started reading it I didn't know what in the world it was, who was talking to whom, and then, light bulb! I started over. And started chuckling. I love the humorous banter back and forth, the cocky speeder and the simple, perfect ending. You carry it off to the end without explaining to the dummies who might not get it first try. (moi)
good for you and good sho-ow!
What IS that you are holding in the picture of your hands?
pome lover

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Wow. Thank you for the great review. I haven't posted since Nov 2014 and was a little apprehensive but I'm really glad you liked it.

I'm holding a baby turtle in the picture. I was on vacation in Sri Lanka with my wife and we visited taken in a turtle sanctuary. That little guy was ready for release into the wild and the staff let us transfer them to a holding tank for release later that night when it was dark.

Thanks again for the review.

reply by pome lover on 27-Feb-2017

How fun! I've always wanted to see them running to the ocean.
Well, I hope you keep writing. Your imagination and sense of timing and humor are wonderful.
pome lover

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thank you.