Valentine's Day on McKinley Road
This is a memory from childhood.12 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
The memories of young puppy love will always be memorable and won't be forgotten whether it be sad or happy. I enjoyed reading your memory trip. Thanks for sharing your youth to the readers.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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The memories of young puppy love will always be memorable and won't be forgotten whether it be sad or happy. I enjoyed reading your memory trip. Thanks for sharing your youth to the readers.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your positive words. I appreciate your understanding.
Comment from Anastajiya
Wow. I love this so much. Growing up, I also lived in an area where the entire block was more like one family rather than a bunch of isolated neighbors. I like how you started off with reminiscing over the more innocent parts of your childhood and then built into a memory that was more serious and had a bigger impact on you.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Wow. I love this so much. Growing up, I also lived in an area where the entire block was more like one family rather than a bunch of isolated neighbors. I like how you started off with reminiscing over the more innocent parts of your childhood and then built into a memory that was more serious and had a bigger impact on you.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Thank you. It sounds like we shared similar neighborhoods growing up.
Comment from sunnilicious
This is a wonderful short story. I'm glad that it's non-fiction. I actually understand... school on Valentine's Day can be the worst thing ever. We're older now.... Let's not talk about it. I like that your are detailed in this narrative. Great visual imagery. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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This is a wonderful short story. I'm glad that it's non-fiction. I actually understand... school on Valentine's Day can be the worst thing ever. We're older now.... Let's not talk about it. I like that your are detailed in this narrative. Great visual imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for such wonderful words.
Comment from robyn corum
Mary Kelly,
I really enjoyed reading about your broken heart. *smile* Not really. I did enjoy your story, but not hearing about how your heart was broken by a callous young man. This was well-written and I hope you do great in the contest. Go win it all!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Mary Kelly,
I really enjoyed reading about your broken heart. *smile* Not really. I did enjoy your story, but not hearing about how your heart was broken by a callous young man. This was well-written and I hope you do great in the contest. Go win it all!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you for such wonderful support.
Comment from Unspoken94
Great story and I'm glad you fixed upon the emotions
and feelings that went with this story. They are the
key to its success. Excellent description of characters
and you didn't turn them into evil. An excellent and
different admission into the contest. -Bill
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Great story and I'm glad you fixed upon the emotions
and feelings that went with this story. They are the
key to its success. Excellent description of characters
and you didn't turn them into evil. An excellent and
different admission into the contest. -Bill
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you I always appreciate your opinion.
Comment from Mastery
Very well written, Mary. I loved the story and can relate in some ways. whatever happened to Miss Prissy and Russell? Did they become an item for good?
The only thing I would change is you have this listed as fiction. Is it? If not I would change the info to Non-fiction.
Blessings and thanks for sharing, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Very well written, Mary. I loved the story and can relate in some ways. whatever happened to Miss Prissy and Russell? Did they become an item for good?
The only thing I would change is you have this listed as fiction. Is it? If not I would change the info to Non-fiction.
Blessings and thanks for sharing, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the high praise and extra star. I always appreciate your opinion. It is a memoir but it is also a creative memoir so it's probably as much fiction as fact.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
You never fail to deliver and every time I read your work it is written with such verve and excellence. Absolutely stunning write and descriptions so real they bring me to the scene. So excited to read more kindest regards, Meia :)
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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You never fail to deliver and every time I read your work it is written with such verve and excellence. Absolutely stunning write and descriptions so real they bring me to the scene. So excited to read more kindest regards, Meia :)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you for such an uplifting review
Comment from Thesis
Your depiction of that memory is sad. Rejection, especially in front of a rival is devastating. I'm sure the experience was one that took a long time to get over. This is a good entry for the Valentines Writing Contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Your depiction of that memory is sad. Rejection, especially in front of a rival is devastating. I'm sure the experience was one that took a long time to get over. This is a good entry for the Valentines Writing Contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your good comments.
Comment from zanya
Ah h h a tale of the first flickering of love narrated with honesty and some regret a gentle intro perhaps to the complexity of love in the real world
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Ah h h a tale of the first flickering of love narrated with honesty and some regret a gentle intro perhaps to the complexity of love in the real world
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you for seeing the story line.
Comment from jusylee72
so sweet , so true, we were so vulnerable when we had crushes on a new or old boy. I completely understand how you felt and why you think of it sometimes and heck with Miss Prissy, she didn't have to such a stuck up snob and Russel , Well let me at him. He could have just said , Thank you. So sorry he hurt you.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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so sweet , so true, we were so vulnerable when we had crushes on a new or old boy. I completely understand how you felt and why you think of it sometimes and heck with Miss Prissy, she didn't have to such a stuck up snob and Russel , Well let me at him. He could have just said , Thank you. So sorry he hurt you.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you for such understanding and empathy.
