Chilled Apples (Warning!)
a free verse contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Free verse poetry is my favorite and this is an example of why...if only I had a six...it grasp my attention from the beginning and keeps it as I hang on every word feeling the angst of what I fear is coming. Even your author notes add to the authenticity of your emotions and why you write in different genres...but I already knew the answer to that. ;-)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Free verse poetry is my favorite and this is an example of why...if only I had a six...it grasp my attention from the beginning and keeps it as I hang on every word feeling the angst of what I fear is coming. Even your author notes add to the authenticity of your emotions and why you write in different genres...but I already knew the answer to that. ;-)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Ah, Karen, HI! What a marvelous review - thank you for your continuing kindness and support, my friend.
Comment from Joan E.
I always appreciate your writing in a wide range of forms about a myriad of subjects. Keep flexing your "literary muscle". I was surprised you were able to find the perfect picture to parallel your free verse, along with the animation. I admired your using the "apple" metaphor to highlight a frightening problem. Sighs and best wishes in the contest- Joan
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I always appreciate your writing in a wide range of forms about a myriad of subjects. Keep flexing your "literary muscle". I was surprised you were able to find the perfect picture to parallel your free verse, along with the animation. I admired your using the "apple" metaphor to highlight a frightening problem. Sighs and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a terrific free verse poem, Dawn. The metaphor of the apple alludes to not only original sin, but a children's rhyme, fruit of the poisoned tree and much more.
This is a top notch entry into the contest and I wish you great success with it.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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This is a terrific free verse poem, Dawn. The metaphor of the apple alludes to not only original sin, but a children's rhyme, fruit of the poisoned tree and much more.
This is a top notch entry into the contest and I wish you great success with it.
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Wow, Gloria, you must know how grateful I am for this fabulous review; not only do you read this with depth, a writer of your calibre rating it as exceptional? I am over the moon! Seriously. Thank you very much! (but how in heck do you hold onto sixes so long...mine were gone two days ago...:( LOL.
Comment from I am Cat
I told myself I'm not reviewing... certainly not writing, but good god woman, how could I walk away from this one?
*puts cloaking device back on and wipes eyes*
Well done
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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I told myself I'm not reviewing... certainly not writing, but good god woman, how could I walk away from this one?
*puts cloaking device back on and wipes eyes*
Well done
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Oh, Cat - how can I ever repay you? You are amazing, and this review simply fills me with such gladness, I could sing (but I'd scare the whole building if I did.) LOL. I am NOT kidding. Believe it. *grin* Thank you all the way to the moon and back. I am truly, truly honored.
Comment from sandy montgomery
Though dark your work brings to the light much that should not be hid. The sad fact is that the innocent are often victims of those who they should be able to trust. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Though dark your work brings to the light much that should not be hid. The sad fact is that the innocent are often victims of those who they should be able to trust. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thanks so much for understanding, Sandy, and for your kind review!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend and a hard subject to tackle but poetry can't be all rainbows and sunshine otherwise it be life like well-done regards Jill
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Yes this is well written my friend and a hard subject to tackle but poetry can't be all rainbows and sunshine otherwise it be life like well-done regards Jill
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Too true, I believe, my friend - thank you!!!
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem Dawn with a very real truth told. So much hurt, and shame in so many ways. Hurt for all races, and sexes at every age in life. Good selection of words to make is real. God bless always.
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Good poem Dawn with a very real truth told. So much hurt, and shame in so many ways. Hurt for all races, and sexes at every age in life. Good selection of words to make is real. God bless always.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
Comment from Sasha
I am so sorry, but I am out of 6's already. This is a superb entry for this contest the words and music touched me deeply. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest. Absolutely marvelous job with this one.
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I am so sorry, but I am out of 6's already. This is a superb entry for this contest the words and music touched me deeply. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest. Absolutely marvelous job with this one.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A terrible truth just below the surface in so many homes. I wrote a story about this subject, Robyn. It needs to be told. Too many suffering children.
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A terrible truth just below the surface in so many homes. I wrote a story about this subject, Robyn. It needs to be told. Too many suffering children.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Gosh, this is dark and brutal, Dawn - your
words gave off an atmosphere - a chill.
The sad thing is that this goes on in real life....
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Your notes tell me you are a kind, caring person that feels real emotion for those who are less fortunate than yourself, and that when it comes to your poems you write as you feel - from the heart - you so often move me and also you trigger my imagination. Blessings, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Gosh, this is dark and brutal, Dawn - your
words gave off an atmosphere - a chill.
The sad thing is that this goes on in real life....
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Your notes tell me you are a kind, caring person that feels real emotion for those who are less fortunate than yourself, and that when it comes to your poems you write as you feel - from the heart - you so often move me and also you trigger my imagination. Blessings, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Thanks so much, Margaret - I just added notes, by way of explanation as to why I write as I do - I know it's asking a lot, since you already reviewed, but I would love to know what you think of those notes...
