Reviews from

Undocumented

The debate

31 total reviews 
Comment from giraffmang
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hi there,

I think I read the following piece first. This is a good way of addressing some of these 'thorny' issues. It's hard to get a truthful and unbiased message across to people these days when the victim mentality is so prevalent.

and the Republicans thoughts - I think you need an apostrophe here.

Another good thought provoking piece.
G

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from c_lucas
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Immigration used to be an open door. Decades later the door begin to close and laws were instituted. This is very well witten.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is excellent; very thought-provoking.

1) I think you meant "rapt" attention, not 'apt'...?
2) comma after "Congress"
3) comma after "...give my life for him(,)
4) This is my suggestion for expressing this sentence: "I think you know-- and now we all know--who did."
5) comma after "lawyer"

I truly enjoyed this, lancellot. I like how you think.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a very thoughtful and thought-provoking write. You make you points eloquently and with great wisdom. It is easy to get caught up in all the passions of the situation--fear of the family being broken up, or deportation, or pride for accomplishments and good citizenship. The congressman gives a wee thought out answer and offers to help, even though the audience could have gotten out of hand on the issue.

Excellent job defining the characters and setting the stage. The script wasenjoyable to read. Wish I had a six left at the of the week for his one.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from mbroyles2
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

The congressman had a well thought out response to Maria.
This will be a debated subject for months by the "entitled."
You presented this well.
Nice job.
Michael

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from nomi338
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

That is the most intelligent response to the immigration problem that I have ever been a witness to. It was balanced, empathetic, direct and on point. It was level headed, undramatic and it pointed to the pure undiluted truth. No one could or should ever ask for more.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Tpa
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I enjoy the setting of your text, and your premise was outstanding. I thought the Congressman did a beautiful job with his answers and examples. GOOD READING.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

AHEM!!!!!! I am such agreement. Let them get on the right path. If they are not capable then they need to be sent back to their country.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from ciliverde
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

An interesting take on the situation of the many people in Maria's situation. Can you imagine being raised in a country, you might not ever have been to your parents' country of origin, or know their language well. I like the idea of legal residence for people like this, possibly without citizenship. Who am I to say send them "home"? My grandparents came here as children, I don't feel complacent about my place here.
Nice job with this controversial topic,
Carol

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.
Comment from DonandVicki
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

A very well structured script. very compelling to read and held my attention. I am looking forward to reading the next act. Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
    Thank you very much.