Shepherd
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "With Me"poems inspired by Psalm 23
29 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I particularly enjoy the cinquain form, because it employs a significant title and is succinct. It was actually created by Adelaide Crapsey, an American poet, near the turn of the twentieth century, who was influenced by the short Japanese forms of haiku and senryu. I enjoyed your interpretation and double version. I admired your storytelling and spiritual lesson. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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I particularly enjoy the cinquain form, because it employs a significant title and is succinct. It was actually created by Adelaide Crapsey, an American poet, near the turn of the twentieth century, who was influenced by the short Japanese forms of haiku and senryu. I enjoyed your interpretation and double version. I admired your storytelling and spiritual lesson. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the review on my cinquain. I appreciate the information on how it was created. I appreciate the kind comments about the storytelling, and am pleased to hear you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Joy Graham
It's nice to see a familiar poetry form among the new modern stuff. I haven't worked with the cinquain for a while so am happy with your author notes to remind me. All your syllables worked well. I like seeing sacred themed poetry among all the santa claus stuff this time of year. I've been thinking it's time I added a sacred theme to my Christmas poems, but I'm coming up blank for some reason. Something will come to me eventually, I hope!
I'm really taken with your line, "Learn how royal you are". I never thought of it that way before. Something to ponder.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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It's nice to see a familiar poetry form among the new modern stuff. I haven't worked with the cinquain for a while so am happy with your author notes to remind me. All your syllables worked well. I like seeing sacred themed poetry among all the santa claus stuff this time of year. I've been thinking it's time I added a sacred theme to my Christmas poems, but I'm coming up blank for some reason. Something will come to me eventually, I hope!
I'm really taken with your line, "Learn how royal you are". I never thought of it that way before. Something to ponder.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Hi Joy,
This is the first cinquain I've attempted, but I do like to play with various forms and there are so many. Thank you for the excellent critique. Thank you for pointing out the line you liked. That one makes me ponder as well. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas.
Debi
Comment from BeasPeas
Nicely done to compare the two. One is earthly and sees things from an earthbound perspective. The other us ethereal and reveals to us the possibility of another place that isn't of this world. Your double cinquain easily points out the difference. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016
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Nicely done to compare the two. One is earthly and sees things from an earthbound perspective. The other us ethereal and reveals to us the possibility of another place that isn't of this world. Your double cinquain easily points out the difference. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016
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Hi Marilyn,
Thank you for the great analysis and encouraging comments.
Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Interesting image.
-Format is good.
-I like the opposing cinquains, Debi.
-In the first we have the view of the Pharaoh,
and how well treated he thinks the slaves are
under his rule.
-In the second is the truer way:
""Love's path climbs true and straight."
-With Jesus you, the people will be royal.
-Thanks for sharing; I liked your poems.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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-Interesting image.
-Format is good.
-I like the opposing cinquains, Debi.
-In the first we have the view of the Pharaoh,
and how well treated he thinks the slaves are
under his rule.
-In the second is the truer way:
""Love's path climbs true and straight."
-With Jesus you, the people will be royal.
-Thanks for sharing; I liked your poems.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for the detailed review. You seem to cover everything from the formatting, the type of form and the theme. Thank you for pointing out what you enjoyed. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
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You are welcome and deserving of the review, Debi. I enjoy reviewing and finding what it is that works, esp. for a form poem. I am also glad to give encouragement; it is even better when it is appreciated.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine double cinquain
with exact syllables to the form in each
Excellent contrast between the confining view of man
and the expansive view of the divine
Excellent art work to match poem
Nicely done
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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This is a fine double cinquain
with exact syllables to the form in each
Excellent contrast between the confining view of man
and the expansive view of the divine
Excellent art work to match poem
Nicely done
Comment Written 12-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Thank you for the excellent review. Thank you for your analysis of the form and theme. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
Comment from June Sargent
Truer words were never written. Two choices offered. Low road or high road. Physical vs. spiritual. Beautifully expressed in a few short verses. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Truer words were never written. Two choices offered. Low road or high road. Physical vs. spiritual. Beautifully expressed in a few short verses. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Thank you for the very encouraging review. I appreciate you taking time to share your thoughts on the theme, too.
Comment from RGstar
A nice contrast shown here with both philosophy and meaning, from a point of faith. There poems are not as easy to write as some will think for you must capture the essence of the message. You have done that here.
Well done, my dear friend. Good presentation.
Have a great day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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A nice contrast shown here with both philosophy and meaning, from a point of faith. There poems are not as easy to write as some will think for you must capture the essence of the message. You have done that here.
Well done, my dear friend. Good presentation.
Have a great day.
RGstar
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Hi RGstar,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Your comments are so encouraging. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. You comments about the contrast, the philosophy and the technical difficulty of the form are appreciated.
Debi
Comment from krys123
Happy holidays and peace be with you, Debi;
-I love your Cinquain piece of poetry which is technically composed excellently well.
Your use of quotations in this particular piece of poetry adds to the personal environment of your conceptual theme which is a spiritual reflection of one's personal desire to follow the Lord and His blessings than to be driven by a false god which is the ruler and Pharaoh of Egypt..
-An interesting concept that I enjoyed reading because of the different outlook you use that this particular subject matter.
-The picture looks like a divine light which is usually used as an understanding or enlightenment which I feel is also relative to your conceptual theme of your poetry.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Happy holidays and peace be with you, Debi;
-I love your Cinquain piece of poetry which is technically composed excellently well.
Your use of quotations in this particular piece of poetry adds to the personal environment of your conceptual theme which is a spiritual reflection of one's personal desire to follow the Lord and His blessings than to be driven by a false god which is the ruler and Pharaoh of Egypt..
-An interesting concept that I enjoyed reading because of the different outlook you use that this particular subject matter.
-The picture looks like a divine light which is usually used as an understanding or enlightenment which I feel is also relative to your conceptual theme of your poetry.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Hi Alex,
Nice of you to drop in and give a great review. I appreciate the details. Your review is longer than the poem. LOL. Have a wonderful holiday season.
Debi
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You're very welcome my dear friend.
Alex
Comment from Thomas Bowling
My wife and I met a woman from the Philippines. I asked if her kids were ready for Santa. She said, "In the Philippines, we don't know about Santa. It's all about Jesus."
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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My wife and I met a woman from the Philippines. I asked if her kids were ready for Santa. She said, "In the Philippines, we don't know about Santa. It's all about Jesus."
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Sounds like they have it right in the Philippines. Not that I don't enjoy Santa, but the focus seems to be a bit too much in that direction at times. Thank you for stopping in to read and comment.
Comment from bertranclan
Well now that is so good it should be in the Bible! You write the truth, and that is most often what a poet does. Kudos to you!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Well now that is so good it should be in the Bible! You write the truth, and that is most often what a poet does. Kudos to you!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Wow that is quite a compliment. Thank you for the encouraging comments. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.