Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

MaryKelly,

Congratulations on your win with this incredibly creative
entry! Wow, you packed so much imagery in those first
two lines and nice alliteration of the last line as well.

Great metaphor too! Whew!

Linda

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Thank you for your enthusiasm.

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Oooo! Very cool five seven five in the traditional haiku form. Excellent imagery and metaphors. Thank you for writing and sharing and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016

Thank you for your encouraging review.

reply by kathleenspalding on 14-Nov-2016

You're welcome

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written contest entry. Your words combined and flowed easily forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016

Thank you for your positive comments.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Your 5-7-5 Fire poem benefited from not having any illustrations because you focus on the images created by your words alone. Your poem is haiku-like and makes an effective use of metaphor. Thank you for sharing. You got my vote.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016

Thank you for the good review and the vote.

reply by Sis Cat on 14-Nov-2016

You're welcome. The vote is close. I wish you success.

Comment from Rhonni

Excellent

Interesting take on fire...I love "clouds' dark cape" in the second line. Have never thought of lightening being fire...makes one think.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016

Thank you for your positive review.

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

This is great...'mid-air matador'...genius...I never thought to describe the lightning and clouds like that, but I can now see it so plainly! Good luck, blessings...

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016

Thank you for your good words and encouragement.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

This is cleverly done you have drawn an image for your readers in such few syllables I enjoyed good luck in the contest regards Jill

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016

Thank you for your good comments.

Comment from clsandau

Excellent

I really like this one! The words are very expressive and the 5-7-5 count is right on. I love the ending - mid-air matador, very easy to picture the whole poem. Thanks, Carol

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016

Thank you for the positive comments.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I love this metaphor comparing the drama of the bullring with that of the raging storm. It captures something of the essence of both. A cracking good entry into the contest. Best of luck!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016

Thank you for seeing the action.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Ah, now THIS I liked.
First of all, there's no denying that your 5-7-5 syllable count is on the money...

Next, the alliteration and internal rhyming you've used in your first line was not overbearing and added a nice touch to the overall composition of your poem...

And last, but certainly not least, the metaphorical reference to a bull fighting matador and the dodging of the clouds as the lightning flashes across the sky...

All adds up to a true winner in my book.

I'll be watching for this in the contest.~Dean

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 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016

Thank you for such a detailed and positive review. Your analysis is really helpful.

reply by Dean Kuch on 13-Nov-2016

The pleasure was mine entirely. I truly enjoyed this.
Best of luck!