Paying Respects
minute poem7 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
Yikes! This is such a sad poem, but so well-written, Mike. I can see why it was a winner in this contest. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect and the theme is unique and so clearly expressed. (It is not you in the coffin, I know. ;p) I passed near your neighborhood yesterday on my way home from Prescott, but though I looked around, I didn't see you anywhere. No doubt you were busy writing. You are so prolific. Congratulations on the second-place win. Keep up the good work. You are so versatile.
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Yikes! This is such a sad poem, but so well-written, Mike. I can see why it was a winner in this contest. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect and the theme is unique and so clearly expressed. (It is not you in the coffin, I know. ;p) I passed near your neighborhood yesterday on my way home from Prescott, but though I looked around, I didn't see you anywhere. No doubt you were busy writing. You are so prolific. Congratulations on the second-place win. Keep up the good work. You are so versatile.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from rama devi
Bravo, Mikey, for placing in the contest. This is intensely expressive. Vivid. Dramatic. Masterfully crafted and presented with as stunning image and tone.
Superb consonance of F in line one. Fine alliteration and consonance of S (and soft C) and L, plus excellent consonance of P as well. Fine rhymes.
Potent imagery!
Bravo and kudos and congrats.
Warmly, rd
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Bravo, Mikey, for placing in the contest. This is intensely expressive. Vivid. Dramatic. Masterfully crafted and presented with as stunning image and tone.
Superb consonance of F in line one. Fine alliteration and consonance of S (and soft C) and L, plus excellent consonance of P as well. Fine rhymes.
Potent imagery!
Bravo and kudos and congrats.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from evilynne
That's a great poem, Mikey, scary and haunting. I enjoyed the eerie feeling. Anyway, it is well written. Congrats on your win. Evi
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That's a great poem, Mikey, scary and haunting. I enjoyed the eerie feeling. Anyway, it is well written. Congrats on your win. Evi
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from damommy
A bit creepy, but beautiful.
I'm hoping this is a dream. Even dreaming you see yourself in the coffin is more than I want to see.
Your rhyme and meter were perfect. Great wording. The first stanza set the scene perfectly. "I scream out loud" - great reactions and paints a vivid scene.
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A bit creepy, but beautiful.
I'm hoping this is a dream. Even dreaming you see yourself in the coffin is more than I want to see.
Your rhyme and meter were perfect. Great wording. The first stanza set the scene perfectly. "I scream out loud" - great reactions and paints a vivid scene.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
your words describe a nightmare, Mikey -
a cleverly thoughtou piece of verse.
congratulaltions on your win, my friend.
Margaret
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your words describe a nightmare, Mikey -
a cleverly thoughtou piece of verse.
congratulaltions on your win, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from Sanku
It is a chilling scenario.One is looking at oneself lying dead. ' A lonely shrine',and 'an empty room' speaks much about the person's life.The preachers words of doom indicate that he has no deliverance even in the other world.
It is a great read.
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It is a chilling scenario.One is looking at oneself lying dead. ' A lonely shrine',and 'an empty room' speaks much about the person's life.The preachers words of doom indicate that he has no deliverance even in the other world.
It is a great read.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
Comment from Allison78
This poem is really beautiful, dark but beautifully written. There is a lot of truth in these words. This flows so well and really makes you think, you did a wonderful job on this!
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This poem is really beautiful, dark but beautifully written. There is a lot of truth in these words. This flows so well and really makes you think, you did a wonderful job on this!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
