Comment from Susanjohn

Excellent

ahhhhh hopefully huh?? work work work!!!... but then comes along that piece of pie!!!..i mean it's pie!! ya can't turn that down!! hehe enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016

Oh me! Should see what I brought home from the shops just now. Some Iced finger buns lovely with butter or in our case Low cholesterol marge...kinda cheating i know. Thanks for coming by.

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Nice mesh of poem and artwork. Thanks for sharing this piece and keep writing more of them.

Wishing you all the best--
Bill~

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016

Thanks Bill appreciate your lovely review. We had a time of Writer's Block there in some sort of depression but thank God we are back on deck again! Cheers.

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Do you like the digital scale? I have one of the old ones, that reads vastly different every day. Sometimes I like it, ha ha. I like your acrostic, good luck, blessings...

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016

Thanks for the support. Still getting used to new Digital. The old Rotary was way off it seems! Hoping to see LESS Kilpos once I get back into serious walking.

Comment from Bollie

Good

This is a really clever and creative poem for the Acrostic poetry contest. I don't think that there's enough substance in your lines. This meets the contest requirements, but 6 one word lines doesn't flow very well without any rhymes. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016

Thanks Bollie. Would not surprise me if it is not a winner friend. For a whole lot of reasons. have made several changes alrfeady from my original offering. I appreciate you coming by.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

A very encouraging write. If you can lost weight, that is an inducement to others to try to drop a few pounds. Your words are well chosen and encouraging. You seem to advocate bein smart about it, not going on a fad diet, for instance.. You know, it might be neat to have all your "ly" words together. Especially, intelligently, hopefully getting thinner. What do you think? judi

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Good suggestion but that would mess up the spelling I think. I onmly just changed the H word after a few said it needed a change and also I changed the heading as they said the previous heading might havedisqualified me.

Thanks.

reply by judiverse on 13-Sep-2016

You're welcome. I'm sorry. I didn't see that this was a contest entry the first time. Right. They love to disqualify people. judi

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Yeah well I have known that before I am thankful some kindly warned me what was a better way to go. Now fixed.

reply by judiverse on 13-Sep-2016

Good luck then. What a clever siggy. judi

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

My digital scales lies too, according to my doctor's scales. Sometimes I think they tamper with those doctor scales to scare us. lol - Good luck with the weight loss. I'm battling too. I've been walking everyday and I'm going plant-based diet.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Thanks Sis. I am about to go in and change one more word. probably doing more damage but the comp is not closed yet hehe!

Comment from RoostyNester

Excellent

Working to get thinner is something that we can all relate to. I liked your poem and the style of poem you wrote. Very well done in words.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Thanks mate appreciate you coming through. I just this minute changed the title was warned I had the title wrong so see how we go.

Comment from Grasshopper2

Excellent

Your acrostic spells weight, and you use six excellent and succinct words. I do not believe I have read another acrostic using only one word for each letter to spell. Well done. Blessings. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Thanks Michael I was about to do that very thing. Someone else said it and I was a bit miffed, but good idea.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Average

An Acrostic poem is a poem where the first letters of each line spell out the title. This doesn't fit the category. Nice effort though.

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Trust you to stick the pin. Thanks for nothing.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Ok Thomas apologies for my reaxctioon a coup,e ofothers said same and I am about to go change the title come back agaon. OK Sorry.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Sorry for the dreadful typos above. I think you got it.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Made several changes please forgive the snooty first response.

reply by Thomas Bowling on 13-Sep-2016

No problem. I made the same mistake when someone corrected one of my stories. I went back and reread the piece and realized he was right.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Thanks, and again deepest apologies for the bad reaction. Dean Kuch made this cute siggy for me. Tom says not allowed on reviews but Dean says ok on Replies hehe.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Hoping you will come back and fix the rating, mate.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Nice acrostic, but the word heaps and being thinner seem not to work together. May you find you week wonder filled. Blessings, Patricia

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

I see all the trouble makers are now coming out thanks anyway.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Hi Sis thanks for your help appreciated a couple of others said same. Title now changed. Thanks again.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Took everything you said on board second edit just done come back and look.

reply by patcelaw on 13-Sep-2016

Hope;fu;;y thinner is better.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Thanks I hope I don't have the typos in it will go look again hehe. Lord Bless.

reply by patcelaw on 13-Sep-2016

The typo was mine. Hopefully you are not offended.

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Nah fine sis I went in and lined the parts up a little better on the check, hehe.

have you met my siggy courtesy Dean Kuch.