Act Of Endurance
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Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very well-written, interesting poem about what the solider has to face. Your great word, choice, description paints a vivid image in the reader's mind. Your art work is perfect, enhances the poem.
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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This is a very well-written, interesting poem about what the solider has to face. Your great word, choice, description paints a vivid image in the reader's mind. Your art work is perfect, enhances the poem.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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I wish I had a painter talent, giving me paint like handing it to a three year old. Glad aspects in this particular write were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
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I too wish I could paint. I have talented painters are on both sides of my family, but like you my art looks like a toddlers at best.
Comment from Stephen Force
I like the content and subject matter, the interweaving of holy and conventional warfare is really interesting, I would have suggested that you went in a more conventional structure, instead of using punctuation to set the meter do it with line separation, there were what I perceived some nice rhyming patterns that could be accentuated by using that form, it also might smooth out the reading and comprehension of the message. It was a really nice post, I am going to read some of the other chapters in the Act of Endurance
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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I like the content and subject matter, the interweaving of holy and conventional warfare is really interesting, I would have suggested that you went in a more conventional structure, instead of using punctuation to set the meter do it with line separation, there were what I perceived some nice rhyming patterns that could be accentuated by using that form, it also might smooth out the reading and comprehension of the message. It was a really nice post, I am going to read some of the other chapters in the Act of Endurance
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Appreciate your input, finding your statement point on, working revisions might enhance its presentation. Thanking you for the heads up, and generous rate dispute. Your comments are welcomed.
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I really like your picture, like old soldier and young boy, new soldier waiting his turn. It's true how our soldiers brave so many dangers for our safety and that never changes. Very nicely put!
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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I really like your picture, like old soldier and young boy, new soldier waiting his turn. It's true how our soldiers brave so many dangers for our safety and that never changes. Very nicely put!
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Yeah it does change, birth and death makes new and lost memories for us. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from L. A. Stanley
Your words describe things well. I "see" them. Your flow in the first stanza made me think this poem would be rhyming, but then it changed beginning with the second stanza. That confused me. But I then began to read the poem as if it were a story...I like that you left the interpretation of who is in this war and in this army open. This could be a war between mankind, or a war within man's mind.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Your words describe things well. I "see" them. Your flow in the first stanza made me think this poem would be rhyming, but then it changed beginning with the second stanza. That confused me. But I then began to read the poem as if it were a story...I like that you left the interpretation of who is in this war and in this army open. This could be a war between mankind, or a war within man's mind.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Yeah, suffering pits in my expression, working on flaws, learning my most important statement. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from beizanten
A well written and intriguing first stanza. A very good second stanza. A pretty good third stanza. a very good fourth stanza. Overall a very well written poetry thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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A well written and intriguing first stanza. A very good second stanza. A pretty good third stanza. a very good fourth stanza. Overall a very well written poetry thanks for sharing
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Glads aspects in this write were captivating to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Beri Bee
I look forward to reading Act of Endurance. I work with veterans, usually Vietnam, Korea, and WWII, and I have gotten to know them well; their lives and stories. I can't describe how much this speaks to me. Beautiful writing!
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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I look forward to reading Act of Endurance. I work with veterans, usually Vietnam, Korea, and WWII, and I have gotten to know them well; their lives and stories. I can't describe how much this speaks to me. Beautiful writing!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Working hard to perfect this project, being my initial, thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this poem. This reminds me of writing a poem by cutting words out of a newspaper or magazine and pasting them together. The syntax is as if the writer is not a native English speaker. I am not sure what the illustration has to do with the poem. This poem may mean much to the writer, but I don't think that meaning is getting across to the reader.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thank you for sharing this poem. This reminds me of writing a poem by cutting words out of a newspaper or magazine and pasting them together. The syntax is as if the writer is not a native English speaker. I am not sure what the illustration has to do with the poem. This poem may mean much to the writer, but I don't think that meaning is getting across to the reader.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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I feel you, getting the correct lip of word has tricks, guess why God states no one understands the Text, not native to Spirit tongue. You're right my writes suffers, learning and kicks like your has help me . Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Randa Dayle
What a nice tribute to the men and women of our armed forces, and remembering their sacrifices is always so important. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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What a nice tribute to the men and women of our armed forces, and remembering their sacrifices is always so important. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Forget the contest, presented original piece scattered with flaws, given revisions bringing this work closer to my intents. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from His Grayness
Excellent work here, much enjoyed and no suggestions to improve it in any way! My delight with thanks for the write! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Excellent work here, much enjoyed and no suggestions to improve it in any way! My delight with thanks for the write! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Your greyness is this due to your hair, needing no answer. Glad aspects in this write were captivating to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
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just tellin it like it deserves! His Grayness: Vance
Comment from Ben Colder
The poem speaks of reality. One must always face his or her enemies no matter the circumstances. A very nice take of this in poetry. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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The poem speaks of reality. One must always face his or her enemies no matter the circumstances. A very nice take of this in poetry. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Love the Holy Text, thinking initially it was crap, assured currently of its realities. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.