A Prize Shot (Once In A Lifetime)
a 208 wd vignette for the Potlatch Prose challenge Aug.20/1623 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Well, you did that. Congrats on a fine piece of image-filled prose, Dawn. *smile* Yours is the last piece I'm reading before I have my dinner and now I have a lovely image to take with me. Thanks!
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Well, you did that. Congrats on a fine piece of image-filled prose, Dawn. *smile* Yours is the last piece I'm reading before I have my dinner and now I have a lovely image to take with me. Thanks!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2016
Comment from Ulla
Hi Dawn this is gorgeous. What lovely poetic imagery you evoke. The challenge this week is really good. So happy it's carried on, on Sunday. All the best. Ulla:))
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Hi Dawn this is gorgeous. What lovely poetic imagery you evoke. The challenge this week is really good. So happy it's carried on, on Sunday. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 25-Aug-2016
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I know we are not supposed to give sixes but I cant help it with this one.
I have lived this and your description and imagery is excellently done.
Your control of the words is wonderful
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I know we are not supposed to give sixes but I cant help it with this one.
I have lived this and your description and imagery is excellently done.
Your control of the words is wonderful
Comment Written 25-Aug-2016
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh Dawn this is gorgeous. All your imagery is vivid with brilliant colours, smells and the emotion evoked is one of retrospection and yes, peace.
A loon echoing over a lake is always a great reminder that one isn't the bustle of civilization.
You have done a fabulous job with your imagery. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Oh Dawn this is gorgeous. All your imagery is vivid with brilliant colours, smells and the emotion evoked is one of retrospection and yes, peace.
A loon echoing over a lake is always a great reminder that one isn't the bustle of civilization.
You have done a fabulous job with your imagery. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Gloria, your review makes me so happy! THANK you!
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I am sooooo loving all these imagery writes. They are quite incredible. Makes me feel like I've gone on vacation.
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I want to read more, but I have been sitting in one spot for hours...(LOL).
Comment from frogbook
This was really a descriptive one, filling the reader with anticipation as they are caught up in the writer's excitement over the subject. A relaxing and satisfying end to the journey too.
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This was really a descriptive one, filling the reader with anticipation as they are caught up in the writer's excitement over the subject. A relaxing and satisfying end to the journey too.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from BeasPeas
Your fine write does have strong imagery, Dawn. And a camera shot like this one is one in a million--although I know it's not yours--but a good focal point for your story. These quiet moments of personal observation are interesting to me, as I strive for them, too. I carry my camera with me all the time. Marilyn
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Your fine write does have strong imagery, Dawn. And a camera shot like this one is one in a million--although I know it's not yours--but a good focal point for your story. These quiet moments of personal observation are interesting to me, as I strive for them, too. I carry my camera with me all the time. Marilyn
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Boy! That is a beautiful picture Dawn. I would love to have that one in my home on a wall! Good job on the imagery in the
vignette. Well done my friend. xx Nancy
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Boy! That is a beautiful picture Dawn. I would love to have that one in my home on a wall! Good job on the imagery in the
vignette. Well done my friend. xx Nancy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from Mark Valentine
You're right about the photograph - incredible. And your words do it justice. I read this, as I do many pieces, at my desk at my job, in the moments before I get down to work. I had to go back and re-read becaue I read it too rapidly the first time. It almost forces you to slow down to enjoy the imagery and to feel the spirit of the story. I mean, you can't rush through ""The first rays of sun are just breaking over the horizon, turning the velvety smooth, black water to glistening gold". The reader's experience of the poem mirrors the canoeist's experience of nature. Wonderful!
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You're right about the photograph - incredible. And your words do it justice. I read this, as I do many pieces, at my desk at my job, in the moments before I get down to work. I had to go back and re-read becaue I read it too rapidly the first time. It almost forces you to slow down to enjoy the imagery and to feel the spirit of the story. I mean, you can't rush through ""The first rays of sun are just breaking over the horizon, turning the velvety smooth, black water to glistening gold". The reader's experience of the poem mirrors the canoeist's experience of nature. Wonderful!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Dawn.
Did you mean to repeat, 'the paddle', in last line?
You certainly meet the challenge, with lovely nature imagery throughout, accompanied by the thoughts it inspires.
Very peaceful and wonderful observations as dawn breaks to reveal the magic.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Hi, Dawn.
Did you mean to repeat, 'the paddle', in last line?
You certainly meet the challenge, with lovely nature imagery throughout, accompanied by the thoughts it inspires.
Very peaceful and wonderful observations as dawn breaks to reveal the magic.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Good grief! This has been the strangest night. No, I did not mean for 'the paddle' to be repeated. Thank you! It's 6:30 am here and I've been at this since yesterday though so that's probably caused me to be careless when I revised...sigh...you're the best!
Comment from country ranch writer
such a beautiful presentation for this I really admire this picture it reminds me of my times on the water watch life come awake early in the morning
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such a beautiful presentation for this I really admire this picture it reminds me of my times on the water watch life come awake early in the morning
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
