Life In The Big Shitty
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Damaged Flower"The first eighty years.
9 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is REALLY EXCELLENT--describing movingly the speaker's fall into
a hellish existence, but relying on God to restore and heal. This poem is
one that will resonate with MANY others.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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This is REALLY EXCELLENT--describing movingly the speaker's fall into
a hellish existence, but relying on God to restore and heal. This poem is
one that will resonate with MANY others.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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Thank you Janice. I appreciate your fine review. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Libby Geisinger
A deeply powerful poem. The phrases such as " emotional starvation" and "raging inferno" to "precious God" push the reader back and forth between these emotional and mental turmoils which has a tremendous effect on the poem. As you mentioned in your notes, it isn't proper poetic prose but I think it is better that way, to just let your feelings flow; emotions aren't contained to a rhythm but come as they are. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of work.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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A deeply powerful poem. The phrases such as " emotional starvation" and "raging inferno" to "precious God" push the reader back and forth between these emotional and mental turmoils which has a tremendous effect on the poem. As you mentioned in your notes, it isn't proper poetic prose but I think it is better that way, to just let your feelings flow; emotions aren't contained to a rhythm but come as they are. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of work.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Thank you Libby for your wow review. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem really resonated with me and I felt you pain through your life journey from romantic fluff, to a problematic marriage, to finding peace in the Holy Spirit. I totally understand how anger and rage can get in the way to derail us and you expressed that very well. I wish you comfort having reconnected with the source of true harmony.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Your poem really resonated with me and I felt you pain through your life journey from romantic fluff, to a problematic marriage, to finding peace in the Holy Spirit. I totally understand how anger and rage can get in the way to derail us and you expressed that very well. I wish you comfort having reconnected with the source of true harmony.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you LisaMay for your insightful and kind review. So sorry you relate. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Teresa Alford
There is a lot of power in writing. It lends itself to healing. You are so brave to share. Some will be inspired by your experiences, and others will learn! Thank you for sharing! TA ":~)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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There is a lot of power in writing. It lends itself to healing. You are so brave to share. Some will be inspired by your experiences, and others will learn! Thank you for sharing! TA ":~)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much Teresa and for your sweet encouragement. "In the beginning there was WORD" You are so right. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from country ranch writer
Many are swayed by the I love you bit only to become broken and abused thinking the have no way out until one day out of the blue they find the courage to do something about it. God is you savior.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Many are swayed by the I love you bit only to become broken and abused thinking the have no way out until one day out of the blue they find the courage to do something about it. God is you savior.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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It isn't always courage stopping people. Thank you writer. All is in God's timeBlessings, Barbara
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a damaged soul not by its own fault that struggles to heal and forget ro become whole again. It is hard but to write is good therapy and we can all benefit.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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A very well-written poem about a damaged soul not by its own fault that struggles to heal and forget ro become whole again. It is hard but to write is good therapy and we can all benefit.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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This site has seen me through a lot since I joined in 2003. Thank you for your insightful and kind review. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Our life's journey can sometimes make us feel bitter, but those who toss us aside have the problem, we are just the victims of bully's. Be strong and know we are all worthy, a powerful and poignant write Barbara, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Our life's journey can sometimes make us feel bitter, but those who toss us aside have the problem, we are just the victims of bully's. Be strong and know we are all worthy, a powerful and poignant write Barbara, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much Dolly for your kind review. Believe it or not I don''t think I am bitter. Another miracle from God. Life has made me strong. :) Blessings, Barbara
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Glad to hear it Barbara, love Dolly x
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a life story narration, expressed in real life and relatable - I particularly like this poet's free verse style that lends itself easily to gentle and unforced rhyme. The poem flows smoothly and in a familiar and comfortable style - I really enjoy reading this poet's poetry, as I am certain many others will as well...
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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In my opinion, a life story narration, expressed in real life and relatable - I particularly like this poet's free verse style that lends itself easily to gentle and unforced rhyme. The poem flows smoothly and in a familiar and comfortable style - I really enjoy reading this poet's poetry, as I am certain many others will as well...
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Wow, thank you for the high praise. You caught the heart of my writing. Blessings, Barbara
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You are so very welcome, Barbara -my pleasure indeed. May God bless you as well...
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, good luck finding "better", Lovnpeace.
Writing and sharing your work on a site like FanStory is an excellent outlet to bond and converse with like minded individuals, get great feedback, and constructive critique, and purge your soul, so to speak.
It's also an great tool in improving your writing, if you take what's conveyed to you to heart.
I belong to four other writing sites besides this one, and in none of them do I receive nearly the amount of feedback as I do right here.
Good luck...
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Well, good luck finding "better", Lovnpeace.
Writing and sharing your work on a site like FanStory is an excellent outlet to bond and converse with like minded individuals, get great feedback, and constructive critique, and purge your soul, so to speak.
It's also an great tool in improving your writing, if you take what's conveyed to you to heart.
I belong to four other writing sites besides this one, and in none of them do I receive nearly the amount of feedback as I do right here.
Good luck...
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you Dean. I appreciate your input. I have been a member since 2003. I left for a short while but seem to be back now. I agree with you. Blessings. Barbara
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My pleasure, Barbara. You're more than welcome.
Oh, and welcome back, by the way!
~Dean
