My New Year's Eve Party
octogram-potlatch challenge40 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
This Canadian reviewer said yup and nodded her head all the way through this octogram. You got the theme right with a memory, nice meter, nice rhymes, nice repeating line, and a unique touch of placing the final line a little bit askew from the rest.
Nothing out of the ordinary to report here, except to say you pass this challenge with flying colors :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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This Canadian reviewer said yup and nodded her head all the way through this octogram. You got the theme right with a memory, nice meter, nice rhymes, nice repeating line, and a unique touch of placing the final line a little bit askew from the rest.
Nothing out of the ordinary to report here, except to say you pass this challenge with flying colors :)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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YAY! What a great form this turned out to be. Thanks a million. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Gotcha, MIkey. I feel the same way.
I just find crowds put me on edge <-- yep, that's me, too
I hate crowds, one reason I hate cities. Very well done. This octo thing was fun... what next, I wonder?
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Gotcha, MIkey. I feel the same way.
I just find crowds put me on edge <-- yep, that's me, too
I hate crowds, one reason I hate cities. Very well done. This octo thing was fun... what next, I wonder?
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Gee, I don't know. You have a nice list of possibilities. Which one do you like. This turned out to be way better than expected. Glad you liked this. I was relieved. LOL I thought I was headed for the abyss. Mikey
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I like rispetto. It's an easy form. Or maybe we can do a minute poem, also easy and well known on the site due to constant use in prompts. That might be a nice break from all the learning. So, either of these would be nice, I think. I'd like to use them back to back for four weeks, but that's just me. Then afterwards, perhaps some sort of free verse with rules? There may be examples of such. I know some folks love free verse, so I thought we could stick in another one for them. :)
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That sounds good to me. The minute is popular and I've seen some dandies. None by me. HAHAHA! It destroys me. But, I could use the practice I guess. LOL mikey
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Oh, Mikey, you are such a liar. You can write a great minute poem in a minute, I'll bet! It's short! Ohhhhh... wait... you can't write anything short, can you? LOL! THat's your problem! LOL!
Thx for being a good sport, cuz I tease you a lot. I even said in my review of Robyn's monkey riddle poem that it was you.
Ouch! Don't hit me!
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I was in such a bad mood until I saw that. HAAAAAHAHAHA! That so made me smile. I've never denied my pongid ancestry. LOL
Any attention is good attention. I learned that when I was three. :))
Comment from krys123
Hi Mikey;
-you sure made your point about having solitude instead of a New Year's Eve party. very distinctively clear and the imagery that you use very definitively expressive and vivid be descriptive in doing so.
-None of your rhyming words were forced or labored in each of your rhyming words were contingent and supported to the meaning and concept of each and all of your line therefore making your rhythm to flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter was excellently written and you followed the requirements for an Octogram writing and along with the cadence and timing a major reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The picture of a lone man under the moon that shows solitude and is very appropriate, supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of your writing.
-Thanks for sharing and posting this Mikey and made the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Hi Mikey;
-you sure made your point about having solitude instead of a New Year's Eve party. very distinctively clear and the imagery that you use very definitively expressive and vivid be descriptive in doing so.
-None of your rhyming words were forced or labored in each of your rhyming words were contingent and supported to the meaning and concept of each and all of your line therefore making your rhythm to flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter was excellently written and you followed the requirements for an Octogram writing and along with the cadence and timing a major reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The picture of a lone man under the moon that shows solitude and is very appropriate, supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of your writing.
-Thanks for sharing and posting this Mikey and made the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Blessings to you, Alex. What great words to hear from one of your always stellar in depth reviews. Thanks a million. mikey
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You are very welcome Mikey.
Alex
Comment from Pantygynt
Some lovely rhymes here etude! Wow. That would merit a 6 from the French judge. At times it gets a bit close to the prohibited area of people - are crowds people? They are certainly made up of people. I think I'll award you the benefit of the doubt there, because this is quite beautiful.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Some lovely rhymes here etude! Wow. That would merit a 6 from the French judge. At times it gets a bit close to the prohibited area of people - are crowds people? They are certainly made up of people. I think I'll award you the benefit of the doubt there, because this is quite beautiful.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Are crowds people? I've asked that. LOL
Wow. I'm honored by these kind words. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from candyfink
I like your writing style, I think it goes deep within your soul...... it feel like you're projecting your soul onto your poetry......thank you for sharing.
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I like your writing style, I think it goes deep within your soul...... it feel like you're projecting your soul onto your poetry......thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
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Wow. That's such a lovely thing to say. I'm so honored to hear that. Thank you, mikey
Comment from William Ross
Very good on this octogram and on the challenge. everything is as supposed to be, i'd rather have my solitude than hang with crowds myself. good job have a great day
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Very good on this octogram and on the challenge. everything is as supposed to be, i'd rather have my solitude than hang with crowds myself. good job have a great day
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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It seems common for us artists to lean towards solitude. I guess we like the peace to do what we do. mike
Comment from Gloria ....
This is quite lovely, Mav. I love the tone and being a big fan of solitude myself I connect with your poem on an emotional level.
You've perfectly written to the form and there's just one syllable missing in this line:
something told me all's not chill. An easy repair for you.
Super job and I love it.
Ange.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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This is quite lovely, Mav. I love the tone and being a big fan of solitude myself I connect with your poem on an emotional level.
You've perfectly written to the form and there's just one syllable missing in this line:
something told me all's not chill. An easy repair for you.
Super job and I love it.
Ange.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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I imagine as fellow musicians also we are quite similar, Ange. The desire to entertain coupled with the need for peace to compose and do what we do. It doesn't look like it makes sense but it does when one thinks about it. Good catch with the short syllable. Yep, no one will ever know now. :))
Thanks so much. Mav
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: chatty you with a chill out solitude time???
I can see with all the crowds, table full of drinks and loud music,
you could have gotten over loaded. Stress or solitude??? I think a time
out was well deserved, fresh air and all. Noise and strife left behind,
and a peace and quiet was in order...well written, my pen pal friend!
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Michael: chatty you with a chill out solitude time???
I can see with all the crowds, table full of drinks and loud music,
you could have gotten over loaded. Stress or solitude??? I think a time
out was well deserved, fresh air and all. Noise and strife left behind,
and a peace and quiet was in order...well written, my pen pal friend!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Funny, yes? I am the life of the party I suppose. But actually I'd just as soon be alone. HAHAHA. mikey
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My husband is snoozing on the sofa. He goes to the grocery store before the birds wake up - he's grocery manager. Yes, we don't go to parties. There's so many good shows on tv - Trump vs Clinton - for the past 8-10 months. Ok, I'll review my fans instead...so many pen pals. You are on the top of my list with Dean and Jay. God bless! flylikeaneagle
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My husband is snoozing on the sofa. He goes to the grocery store before the birds wake up - he's grocery manager. Yes, we don't go to parties. There's so many good shows on tv - Trump vs Clinton - for the past 8-10 months. Ok, I'll review my fans instead...so many pen pals. You are on the top of my list with Dean and Jay. God bless! flylikeaneagle
Comment from tfawcus
Great response to this week's challenge! That urge to seek solitude in the midst of noisy social gatherings is one I can identify with quite strongly. The shorter lines in this all have the effect of reducing the clutter and slowing the poem to achieve the effect of quiet contemplation away from the madding crowd.
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Great response to this week's challenge! That urge to seek solitude in the midst of noisy social gatherings is one I can identify with quite strongly. The shorter lines in this all have the effect of reducing the clutter and slowing the poem to achieve the effect of quiet contemplation away from the madding crowd.
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much, Tony. There was some great pieces with this form. I was surprised with this. Not bad. LOL mikey
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
I never had you down as a loner, thought you were right old raver.
I take it you didn't score that night then.
This was good.
I struggled to come think of something, this topic is not good for those with bad memories. LOL
Great job as always.
Brenda:))x
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Hi Mikey,
I never had you down as a loner, thought you were right old raver.
I take it you didn't score that night then.
This was good.
I struggled to come think of something, this topic is not good for those with bad memories. LOL
Great job as always.
Brenda:))x
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
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That's the funny thing. I am a right old raver. But really, I'd just as soon sneak away by myself or with a right lovely bird and be alone. :)) mikey
