Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

A--h-h-h-hhhh... There's nothing like love to make a heart sing, is there? The world seems a little bit brighter, the sights, sounds and smells all around us seem just a little bit sweeter...

I guess your protagonist will know exactly how all of this feels soon enough.

Or not...

Nice story, very well written.
Good luck in the contest.
~Dean :)

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thank you so much Dean. I'm thrilled that you liked it so, and thanks for your good wishes. All best.

reply by Dean Kuch on 11-May-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Interesting image.
-Good connection between the beginning and end with the old quote.
-Good description of the man she had just met.
-I guess she wasn't expecting him to ask her to dance.
-But she was pleased that he did.
-On top of that, he wants to see her again.
-It is then that she would know if he loves her.
-I just looked at the prompt more closely, and you have to have "exactly 100 words."
-You have approximately 90.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks ever so much. I have added words and it should be exact 100 now. All best.

reply by Pam (respa) on 11-May-2016

You are very welcome. You have exactly 100. Good job.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a fine entry for the contest
Fifty-fifty chance counting petals
with young teenage romance, probably less than that
but at least there is a first date and a chance
This must be exactly 100 hundred words
according to the prompt, I'd count by hand
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks a lot. I have added words and it is now exactly 100 words. All best.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

An excellent short story on first romance. You create the scene and atmosphere very well, and also leave a thought-provoking ending.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thank you so much Ray. Much appreciated. All best.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This certainly fits the required parameters. It is loaded with emotions such as love, frustration, doubt and uncertainty. It is well written and flows nicely for the reader. Thank you and good luck.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Thanks, could you please tell me the errors I've made. A four star means that corrections are needed. I would like to know what they are????

reply by aryr on 10-May-2016

Oh I am so sorry it was a slip of the fingers, I meant it to be a 5, I will change.

reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Thanks a lot for doing that. Your words just didn't fit your rating. Much appreciated.

reply by aryr on 10-May-2016

no problem

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

And I hope he loves her, your prompt
was written and fun to read, it was
short but in those few words you told
a loving meeting of two souls.

Good luck to you.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks so much, Bryana. Much appreciated.

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I think this is a good contest entry. It is a complete story in the few words allowed and it makes sense as it describes what a young girl might feel in this situation

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 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks ever so much. All best.