Comment from Joy Graham

Exceptional

Excellent palindrome! The subject had me thinking of my own experiences. I got chills when I reached the middle and the words in reverse had their own meaning. Then kapow with the last three words. The placement of the words really sealed the deal for me. This one's out of the park, my friend :)

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

YAY!! This is the hardest darn form on Earth. Jeesh. I'm just thrilled you liked it. This is the greatest review I've received in a long time. I'm just going to read it over and over. Thanks a trillion billion. :)) mikey

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Wow.
Wow.
I don't know how to review this one except to say it is different and quite the perfect palindrome.
Very nicely done as a free verse and using the format for emphasis

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

This was a crazy difficult and lunatic fringe thing to write. Whew. It's good to hear you liked it. WHEW!! mikey

Comment from kiwisteveh

Good

Mikey, I know the nightmare it can be to create a half-decent palindrome poem. If not for the lure of the prize, I would never crack my brain trying to hatch one of these things.

This just doesn't work for me - the meaning is too forced in places. Also, O think you have an error right in the centre of your palindrome - one direction reads "dying embers extinguishing love eternal" while reading backwards, we have "dying embers extinguishing eternal love"

The simple solution is to just chuck another "love" in there, I suppose. BTW there is a typo in one of the 'extinguishing's

Steve

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 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Hi there, Steve
I thought it looked strange and read even stranger. DUH
Fixed the typo and chucked some love. LOL
This isn't the form to go sparse with. I was going to go with something wordy which would've been wise, but I wanted to see if I could pull off something sparse like this. Geez, it was a bear just to get it to this level. Thanks for catching the problems. I looked for hours. But after a while it's the forest for the trees thing. thanks again, mikey

Comment from nordicgirl

Exceptional

I cannot believe you were able to do this and have it work so damned well. Had I not known I would have given props for an exceptional deep poem. Now, I am just in awe. WOW!
NG

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

It wasn't easy, I can tell you that. Half the people reviewing don't realize it's a damn Palindrome man. Shit. Read it backwards fool. It's coolness. Thanks so much, girl. At least you the program here. Thanks a tril, mikey

Comment from Realist101

Exceptional

You really shine with romantic stuff Mike. This is beautiful. Cat does this too, putting the words out of line. Very effective. This should be in a book. A real book. :) S

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. This is the most difficult darn thing in the world to do. Jeesh. Who invented this form? Palindrome. Well, I had to do one cause I entered the contest. LOL
I'm pleased you enjoyed. Yes, Cat and I are twins, I taught her everything she knows. Be sure and mention that the next time you review her. HAHAHAHA!!!!!! Thanks so much, mikey

reply by Realist101 on 25-Apr-2016

I will! :) Nite...

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

A lovely palindrome, my friend. The one time I tried one, it gave me a migraine. Now, I just enjoy others. Your author notes were particularly interesting to me. I'm not much of a free verse writer, but your comments gave me a new perspective on them. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

I know what you mean. This WAS a headache and a half. Geesh. I'm so pleased it came out to your liking. I'm pretty sure I won't try one again. The free verse aspect allowed me to play some tricks in this case, so it was a big help. I'm delighted the notes helped. Free verse is misunderstood because a lot of it certainly is just prose scattered on a page. But it can be poetic when poetic devices are used, rhyme, meter, alliteration and all of that can make for a piece with a nice flow etc. Thanks a bunch. mikey

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi Mikey,
this is a good poem that you have penned, you seem to have mastered the form very well,
How ever I still having trouble getting my head around this free verse poetry.
I can respect those that like and wish to write it but it is not for me. Well done Mikey, seems like there are more than one that can write this style so well.
Brenda:))x

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 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

This is also a "Palindrome". That is what's the really difficult part. It reads exactly the same backwards as it does forwards. Check it out. Start at the end and read it backwards, you'll see that it is exactly the same reading it forwards. :)) NOT EASY!
Yes, free verse is for sure different. This is about as free as it gets where the poet places the words where he wants in the hope the reader will follow them exactly the way he wants. Hopefully that will cause the reader to pause and start exactly as the poet wishes. Unless it sucks, then it won't make a lick of sense, pass the biscuits please. LOL mikey

reply by brenda bickers on 25-Apr-2016

Hi Mikey, I checked it out and you are right it is the same backwards but the words don't make sense when you read them backwards....took me ages to read....lol
Great job hun, you didn't write that in your notes, you clever thing you.
Brenda:)x