The Candidate
School board candidate seeks one man's vote.46 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This guy is what all politicians should be like. He knows what he needs to know and really cares about the job for which he is running. He has a good memory and loves his job and wants to make his area of the world better for everyone.
This is well written and uses prose and conversation well to promote character development and the setting.
Congrats of placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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This guy is what all politicians should be like. He knows what he needs to know and really cares about the job for which he is running. He has a good memory and loves his job and wants to make his area of the world better for everyone.
This is well written and uses prose and conversation well to promote character development and the setting.
Congrats of placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for sharing my review and your great take on the candidate. I truly appreciate the kind praise. Rod
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No problem, Rod.
Joan
Comment from JBCaine
Rod-
Congratulations on a fine 2nd in the contest. I missed your entry until I saw the announcement, but I see that the "beatdown" you gave me was well-deserved.
Well played to not only avoid the tumult that most of us joined, but also to share a few wise words on a very vital topic. Fiction that is completely believable throughout. That's not nearly as easy as it sounds.
Very nicely done, Sir.
JBCaine-
P.S. We could hunt down Captain Jack and put a thumping on him, but I swear the man would come back from the grave and ghost-whup us both the next time around. Best to you,
JBC-
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Rod-
Congratulations on a fine 2nd in the contest. I missed your entry until I saw the announcement, but I see that the "beatdown" you gave me was well-deserved.
Well played to not only avoid the tumult that most of us joined, but also to share a few wise words on a very vital topic. Fiction that is completely believable throughout. That's not nearly as easy as it sounds.
Very nicely done, Sir.
JBCaine-
P.S. We could hunt down Captain Jack and put a thumping on him, but I swear the man would come back from the grave and ghost-whup us both the next time around. Best to you,
JBC-
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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I truly appreciate this wonderful praise and great sportsmanship from a fellow competitor. Thank you so much, JBC, for the six-star bonus, too. Rod
Comment from bluegill
Nice, well-paced, humorous. As one who has ran for public office and lost, due to such radical ideas as neighborhood preservation, general fairness, and getting rid of a corrupt city manager, I can well identify with the character here. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Nice, well-paced, humorous. As one who has ran for public office and lost, due to such radical ideas as neighborhood preservation, general fairness, and getting rid of a corrupt city manager, I can well identify with the character here. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Wow! I really appreciate your taking the time to read my story and share your own. Rod
Comment from jusylee72
A different well received take on political fiction. No Hilary , Bernie or Trump. That was refreshing. I think you did a great job on this one. School Board is probably the most important election we need to vote in.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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A different well received take on political fiction. No Hilary , Bernie or Trump. That was refreshing. I think you did a great job on this one. School Board is probably the most important election we need to vote in.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thank you for sharing my story. I am glad you did not miss Hillary, Donald, et.al., and appreciate the kind praise. Rod
Comment from trumby
He sounds as if he'd be a very good candidate to vote for in anything.
The story very effectively shows his sincerity and believably.
This man would not only be a good candidate to vote for, but a good friend as well.
No typos or spags that I can see
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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He sounds as if he'd be a very good candidate to vote for in anything.
The story very effectively shows his sincerity and believably.
This man would not only be a good candidate to vote for, but a good friend as well.
No typos or spags that I can see
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Yes, indeed, this candidate would be a good friend I think. Thank you for pointing that out and sharing my story. Rod
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello RODG,
Lovely piece of Flash Fiction depicting its theme in a very interesting way!
Wording is simple, impressive, and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow almost throughout, especially towards the end.
Conversational part is laudable.
The last three sentences are particularly noteworthy.
It deserves to be honored with Six Stars but unfortunately I'm out of the fixed quota.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Hello RODG,
Lovely piece of Flash Fiction depicting its theme in a very interesting way!
Wording is simple, impressive, and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow almost throughout, especially towards the end.
Conversational part is laudable.
The last three sentences are particularly noteworthy.
It deserves to be honored with Six Stars but unfortunately I'm out of the fixed quota.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much RPSaxena,, for your very thoughtful review and kind praise. I appreciate your thinking it's worthy of six stars. Rod
Comment from LisaD123
This was very sensitively constructed and the characters and dialogue are realistic and well-rounded. The reader feels that he/she has pulled up a chair and is sat listening to the two men. The description enables the reader to clearly envisage the setting. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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This was very sensitively constructed and the characters and dialogue are realistic and well-rounded. The reader feels that he/she has pulled up a chair and is sat listening to the two men. The description enables the reader to clearly envisage the setting. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I am so pleased you felt you could "pull up a chair" and share the conversation. Thank you for your very kind comments. Rod
Comment from Clarekr
This was a clever way to write a story. Since it's mostly dialogue, it moves pretty fast which is fine. It's a good take on the topic. You're right about people not taking the local elections as seriously as they do the Presidential ones.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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This was a clever way to write a story. Since it's mostly dialogue, it moves pretty fast which is fine. It's a good take on the topic. You're right about people not taking the local elections as seriously as they do the Presidential ones.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I am delighted your enjoyed the story and my "take" on politics. Thank you. Rod
Comment from Rookette
This was a really good short story! I loved that instead of discussing what everyone expected to hear, you went with the school board election. You are absolutely correct! Anyone, those with children especially, should take time to read up on their candidates. Thank you so much for sharing! xoLeslie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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This was a really good short story! I loved that instead of discussing what everyone expected to hear, you went with the school board election. You are absolutely correct! Anyone, those with children especially, should take time to read up on their candidates. Thank you so much for sharing! xoLeslie
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I am delighted you did not miss any reference to presidential campaigns and enjoyed my story. Thanks for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Unspoken94
I shared this with my wife who taught second grade for 43 years. She
smiled throughout the read. Rod, this is an exceptional piece and I
am so glad you brought it to me to review. Fiction or non-fiction is
immaterial. It's truth. -Bill
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I shared this with my wife who taught second grade for 43 years. She
smiled throughout the read. Rod, this is an exceptional piece and I
am so glad you brought it to me to review. Fiction or non-fiction is
immaterial. It's truth. -Bill
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I am thrilled you shared this with a veteran teacher who "smiled throughout." I truly appreciate your kind praise and six-star rating. Rod
