Act Of Endurance
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Comment from lyenochka
It would be quite thought-provoking to see a gravesite marked with only the words "Because". We would ask "Because what?" But if this poem is addressing Christ, (I guess this because of these words:
"God, (I'd remove the comma because it's the subject)
appointed you,
reign as a king,
you who,"
God appointed Jesus to reign over all and we are alive even after we die "because" of Him and His work for us.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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It would be quite thought-provoking to see a gravesite marked with only the words "Because". We would ask "Because what?" But if this poem is addressing Christ, (I guess this because of these words:
"God, (I'd remove the comma because it's the subject)
appointed you,
reign as a king,
you who,"
God appointed Jesus to reign over all and we are alive even after we die "because" of Him and His work for us.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I have my flaws prevailing my works, performing constant revisions upon them. Thanking you for your shout. I will try to apply this wisdom. Appreciate your generous rate despite those faults. The because is pertained to me: my gravestone.
Comment from royowen
It's difficult being able to tell a friend how much one appreciates Them,, and even more difficult putting the right words together to make jell and make th feel appreciated, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2024
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It's difficult being able to tell a friend how much one appreciates Them,, and even more difficult putting the right words together to make jell and make th feel appreciated, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2024
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Appreciate that shout, glad certain aspects of this read, found some interests in its appeal
Thanking you for those kind words and generous rate.
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Well done
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Because, reminds me that at the end of the day the argument for belief in God will always come down to the idea that God is always there.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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This poem, Because, reminds me that at the end of the day the argument for belief in God will always come down to the idea that God is always there.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Yes, indeed, He's there watching over all our transactions, hoping to behold a greater aspect prevailing our being. Thanking you for this generous rate.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and imagery to draw in a reader. Many will relate.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and imagery to draw in a reader. Many will relate.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I wish a small portion of your statements, be true, pleasing to ear, hearing how it touched you. Wow! Thanking you for these uplifting words: plus very generous rate.
Comment from Eleri
This poem portrays some obviously deeply held feelings, which are well expressed. However, you do seem to have the habit of leaving out words that would aid the flow such as definite and indefinite articles. For example, in line two at the end surely it should be 'by a king' or 'by the king'. Line five should also start with 'you are...' not 'you be..' and in line six what does 'touch ins feelings...' mean exactly. There are other instances in the poem but I think that you should really read your poems out loud to see how they flow as this may help you pick out where you are mis-phrased or missed a word out.
Eleri
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This poem portrays some obviously deeply held feelings, which are well expressed. However, you do seem to have the habit of leaving out words that would aid the flow such as definite and indefinite articles. For example, in line two at the end surely it should be 'by a king' or 'by the king'. Line five should also start with 'you are...' not 'you be..' and in line six what does 'touch ins feelings...' mean exactly. There are other instances in the poem but I think that you should really read your poems out loud to see how they flow as this may help you pick out where you are mis-phrased or missed a word out.
Eleri
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I do suffer from grammar, thank you for the shout, appreciating those sincere thoughts, definitely will consider actions. Plus your generous rate despite faults.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a touching and moving poem. Your verse flows along nicely and your descriptive words are perfect for your theme. It's very profound and thought provoking. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This is a touching and moving poem. Your verse flows along nicely and your descriptive words are perfect for your theme. It's very profound and thought provoking. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Glad features in this write was found appealing. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
Comment from Artasylum
Hello TPAC: The image alone is a supernatural view. Very Stong. Your words are pitch perfect as are your fonts, just right... Well done and looking forward. yours, diana
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hello TPAC: The image alone is a supernatural view. Very Stong. Your words are pitch perfect as are your fonts, just right... Well done and looking forward. yours, diana
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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I'm tossed between perception about my writes. I think feeling my needs come first which is conveyance of views. Glad aspects of this write was found pleasing.Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought
Comment from meeshu
excellent poetry, TPAC. this offering reads like one long sentence.
that's a good thing it flows from line to line without pause'
well written......meeshu
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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excellent poetry, TPAC. this offering reads like one long sentence.
that's a good thing it flows from line to line without pause'
well written......meeshu
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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I'm struggling with my writes, mostly proper assessments of grammar in their definition. Glad aspects of this write was found appealing. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting views.
Comment from Rookette
Wow! Such a beautiful, heartfelt testament. It follows no rules and still flows beautifully. I envy anyone who can write like that. Absolutely beautiful! I look forward to reading more! xoLeslie
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Wow! Such a beautiful, heartfelt testament. It follows no rules and still flows beautifully. I envy anyone who can write like that. Absolutely beautiful! I look forward to reading more! xoLeslie
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Enjoy yourself, hope the others you find hold the same gleam stated by your interests. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from Beverly Botelho
You've managed to express what, I believe, many people believe but can't articulate. Congratulations on a well-done piece! Only one question - I'm not sure what the word 'because' in the last line means.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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You've managed to express what, I believe, many people believe but can't articulate. Congratulations on a well-done piece! Only one question - I'm not sure what the word 'because' in the last line means.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Anything but pure is the meaning behind because. Glad you enjoyed this write. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
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Thanks for clarification: now I understand.