Little Poems
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Comment from sunnilicious
Oak Trees are pretty precious to me too. You are quite the writer to Ode in a Sonnet. Great flow of rhythm and rhymes. The words are simple yet quite creative and colorful. Well thought out and nicely written. Great!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Oak Trees are pretty precious to me too. You are quite the writer to Ode in a Sonnet. Great flow of rhythm and rhymes. The words are simple yet quite creative and colorful. Well thought out and nicely written. Great!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you Alicia, I am pleased that we connected on this. I appreciate the review, and the stars.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. Thank you for the author's notes they are so helpful in understanding the array of poem styles. The author's words are detailed, interesting and creative. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. Thank you for the author's notes they are so helpful in understanding the array of poem styles. The author's words are detailed, interesting and creative. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much, harmony13
Comment from Just2Write
Very nice, Tom. The photo you took certainly captured the words of your poem beautifully, and vice-versa.
I liked the repeating line at the beginning of each of the quatrains. It added a reverence for the trees, and invited the reader to look more deeply at the oaks and what they represent.
Rose.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Very nice, Tom. The photo you took certainly captured the words of your poem beautifully, and vice-versa.
I liked the repeating line at the beginning of each of the quatrains. It added a reverence for the trees, and invited the reader to look more deeply at the oaks and what they represent.
Rose.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thank you Rose. I appreciate the review and that you enjoyed is so well. .
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your special sonnet form. I enjoyed your echoing rhymes and the meter you chose. The "fine lace" and "arching swirls" are echoed so well in your photograph. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thank you for sharing your special sonnet form. I enjoyed your echoing rhymes and the meter you chose. The "fine lace" and "arching swirls" are echoed so well in your photograph. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much Joan, for the great review and that star surprise.
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You deserved all the stars and more for a new form and well-crafted poem. Hip, hip, hooray! -Joan
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is nice Tom A clever new for for us tgo try out. You did a good job telling your story about the mighty oak and her branches of fine lace. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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This is nice Tom A clever new for for us tgo try out. You did a good job telling your story about the mighty oak and her branches of fine lace. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much Nancy.
Comment from William Ross
The mighty oak tree has helped build this country, A great sonnet on the bare oak in spring. thanjs for the share and have a great day.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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The mighty oak tree has helped build this country, A great sonnet on the bare oak in spring. thanjs for the share and have a great day.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Thank you William.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Treischel, I enjoyed reading your poem - an illustration of the beauty of the oak tree.
I especially liked:
So, see these mighty oaks in spring!
Their branches, feathered to fine lace,
Caress the sky with stunning grace,
In arching swirls their fingers trace.
(feathered to fine lace - wonderful, vivid imagery)
Alan, as I read your poem, all that I could think was:
I see that might oak outside
the one outside my door
the one that may come crashing
to my living room floor
dear God, please be merciful
let this storm just pass
let me see the morning light
and I promise that
I'll remove that tree
once I save the fee
(Tr, the above paraphrases the conversation that I had with myself and God while Hurricane Sandy pounded. Sandy made a direct hit on my township. Electricity had been lost, and I was sitting on a chair in the corner of a room as far from windows as possible; and I prayed that the old oak tree would not divide my home into two. It did not. I was one of the lucky ones, and as soon as I could get the money together, I sadly, tearfully, removed the old oak tree for $2,000 ... sorry to go on and on, but your poem brought back that memory. Like the might Oak, Sandy divided our town in half. The ocean and the bay met and became one. We weres a week without electricity. Many people are still homeless. I do miss the oak tree.)
Great imagery and complementary artwork choice. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Hello Treischel, I enjoyed reading your poem - an illustration of the beauty of the oak tree.
I especially liked:
So, see these mighty oaks in spring!
Their branches, feathered to fine lace,
Caress the sky with stunning grace,
In arching swirls their fingers trace.
(feathered to fine lace - wonderful, vivid imagery)
Alan, as I read your poem, all that I could think was:
I see that might oak outside
the one outside my door
the one that may come crashing
to my living room floor
dear God, please be merciful
let this storm just pass
let me see the morning light
and I promise that
I'll remove that tree
once I save the fee
(Tr, the above paraphrases the conversation that I had with myself and God while Hurricane Sandy pounded. Sandy made a direct hit on my township. Electricity had been lost, and I was sitting on a chair in the corner of a room as far from windows as possible; and I prayed that the old oak tree would not divide my home into two. It did not. I was one of the lucky ones, and as soon as I could get the money together, I sadly, tearfully, removed the old oak tree for $2,000 ... sorry to go on and on, but your poem brought back that memory. Like the might Oak, Sandy divided our town in half. The ocean and the bay met and became one. We weres a week without electricity. Many people are still homeless. I do miss the oak tree.)
Great imagery and complementary artwork choice. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 23-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much LateBloomer, I appreciate your sharing that memory brought back about that tragic storm by my poem. So glad you made it through . Your prayers were answered. Praise the Lord.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Thanks for introducing me to yet ANOTHER form of poetic expressionism, Tom, and this one of your own creation, the Triptic sonnet.
Lovey, and very nicely done. I too love the skeletal branches of the trees in late fall and winter. To me they are inspiring, and apparently they are to you as well.
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Thanks for introducing me to yet ANOTHER form of poetic expressionism, Tom, and this one of your own creation, the Triptic sonnet.
Lovey, and very nicely done. I too love the skeletal branches of the trees in late fall and winter. To me they are inspiring, and apparently they are to you as well.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Thank you Dean. Alway glad to find a kindred spirit.
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You're very welcome, Tom.
~Dean
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You're very welcome, Tom.
~Dean
Comment from ciliverde
Very nice, Tom. I knew by the title, Oaken Arms, that I would most likely be a fan of this one. I haven't seen your Triptic Sonnet before, I guess you haven't done one in awhile, I agree that the three rhyming lines give a beautiful echoed sound to each stanza. I also very much like the subject matter you chose, which I'm sure comes as no surprise!
my favorite parts are the two middle stanzas, in which you describe the majestic, bare oaks. We have them here too - the valley oak is deciduous (our Coastal Live Oak is not) - and they are amazing to see in the winter.
I love the sense that the world is framed and held by these strong "oaken arms". Nice job!
If you like repeating rhymes, see my latest - a Gwawdodyn hir that has many repeated rhymes within each stanza :)
Carol
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Very nice, Tom. I knew by the title, Oaken Arms, that I would most likely be a fan of this one. I haven't seen your Triptic Sonnet before, I guess you haven't done one in awhile, I agree that the three rhyming lines give a beautiful echoed sound to each stanza. I also very much like the subject matter you chose, which I'm sure comes as no surprise!
my favorite parts are the two middle stanzas, in which you describe the majestic, bare oaks. We have them here too - the valley oak is deciduous (our Coastal Live Oak is not) - and they are amazing to see in the winter.
I love the sense that the world is framed and held by these strong "oaken arms". Nice job!
If you like repeating rhymes, see my latest - a Gwawdodyn hir that has many repeated rhymes within each stanza :)
Carol
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you Carol. I am very pleased that we connected on this one. I thought you might. I will be checking your out.
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
I love the photo AND the poem! And I really like this poem form, too. I think I may have to keep this to remember by! *smile* Thanks for sharing your unique and wonderful outlook with us!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Tom,
I love the photo AND the poem! And I really like this poem form, too. I think I may have to keep this to remember by! *smile* Thanks for sharing your unique and wonderful outlook with us!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thank you Robyn. I like to highlight the often overlooked. There is beauty all around us, if we look and appreciate.
