Little Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
You are indefatigable--another new form! Thanks for sharing one of your favorite walking spots in both the photograph and poem. I enjoyed the multiple internal rhymes plus the end rhymes. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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You are indefatigable--another new form! Thanks for sharing one of your favorite walking spots in both the photograph and poem. I enjoyed the multiple internal rhymes plus the end rhymes. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thank you Joan,
Comment from IndianaIrish
Wow, this is a great form that I've never seen fore, Treischel. I liked the rhyme pattern, and it reads easy and smooth. Your photograph is lovely...as usual.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Wow, this is a great form that I've never seen fore, Treischel. I liked the rhyme pattern, and it reads easy and smooth. Your photograph is lovely...as usual.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thank you Karyn.
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
Another beautiful picture AND a beautiful poem to go along with it! This, too, was a new form for me, and I really, REALLY liked it! I think you handled it brilliantly - making it look soooo simple, when I'm sure it's not!! *smile*
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Tom,
Another beautiful picture AND a beautiful poem to go along with it! This, too, was a new form for me, and I really, REALLY liked it! I think you handled it brilliantly - making it look soooo simple, when I'm sure it's not!! *smile*
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Robyn.i like your enthusiasm.
Comment from brenda bickers
What a beautiful place to live, the colours are breath taking. I love that time of year.
Your poem described a perfect walk through natures beauty.
Brenda
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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What a beautiful place to live, the colours are breath taking. I love that time of year.
Your poem described a perfect walk through natures beauty.
Brenda
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Brenda. It is so lovely here in the fall.
Comment from Pantygynt
It would appear then that with the Rhupunt long it was the Welsh who invented the idea of the Cleave. Your example here certainly. Should you ever have to say this word out lout remember that the U is pronounced EE. This is a clever little version of the form.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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It would appear then that with the Rhupunt long it was the Welsh who invented the idea of the Cleave. Your example here certainly. Should you ever have to say this word out lout remember that the U is pronounced EE. This is a clever little version of the form.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. I didn't know that, appreciate the language lesson.
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In a song I wrote on the Welsh alphabet and its pronunciation are the immortal lines "ee" is the sound made by I and by U one F's a V; to say F**** it needs two. Lol.
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Hah! Love it!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great flowing poem. The spirit flies over the beautiful park to see everything around in WO der. I would wander their for hours. An awesome photo.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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A great flowing poem. The spirit flies over the beautiful park to see everything around in WO der. I would wander their for hours. An awesome photo.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from ciliverde
Another Welsh form, eh, I see you have been reading up on the forms - unless you knew them already. Cool stuff. This little poem is more complicated than it looks at first glance, and is expertly done - it just flies off the tongue.
Love this line "They make me whole as I extoll them, when I write."
Very nicely done!
Carol
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Another Welsh form, eh, I see you have been reading up on the forms - unless you knew them already. Cool stuff. This little poem is more complicated than it looks at first glance, and is expertly done - it just flies off the tongue.
Love this line "They make me whole as I extoll them, when I write."
Very nicely done!
Carol
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Carol. I look forward to reading more of yours.
Comment from MariMc
I wasn't sure about this at first; it seemed an awkward format and a reach to make it all fit. Upon re-reading, I felt its appeal in the internal rhymes and of course the topic of musing upon the natural world, extolling all the beauty. Not an easy style to work in (play with), and it's nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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I wasn't sure about this at first; it seemed an awkward format and a reach to make it all fit. Upon re-reading, I felt its appeal in the internal rhymes and of course the topic of musing upon the natural world, extolling all the beauty. Not an easy style to work in (play with), and it's nicely done.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you MariMc. I appreciate that you took the time to read it again.
Comment from Leineco
It's a lovely message, what a poetic walk in the woods :-)
I'm not sure I like the 16 syllable approach, it seems so
perfectly geared for four syllable stanzas. But I can see
the allure of stretching the lines out. (actually, just because
I am contrary -lol- I think I read it as if it were eight
syllable lines)
Very nicely written :-)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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It's a lovely message, what a poetic walk in the woods :-)
I'm not sure I like the 16 syllable approach, it seems so
perfectly geared for four syllable stanzas. But I can see
the allure of stretching the lines out. (actually, just because
I am contrary -lol- I think I read it as if it were eight
syllable lines)
Very nicely written :-)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Lienco. I was tempted myself to keep it as 4 syllable quatrains.
Comment from Marykelly
The description of the walking trails is vivid and colorful. The internal rhyme makes the narrative move quickly like the speaker is walking while talking. The emotion in the poem is the sense of wonder at nature's beauty. well done
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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The description of the walking trails is vivid and colorful. The internal rhyme makes the narrative move quickly like the speaker is walking while talking. The emotion in the poem is the sense of wonder at nature's beauty. well done
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Marykelly. I am pleased you enjoyed it.
